Rainbow Dash loves everypony, her loyalty is unfailing. But when she is asked to murder one she grew up with because that pony was different, she fails to be loyal to the highest power in Equestria. She is banished to the Everfree Forest, and is supposed to keep a low profile there... Lest she lose her wings. But Dashie has different plans. She meets up with an incognito group that name themselves 'The Elements', a group created by Celestia and a mysterious pony named Berry Rush, to protect and serve the Elements of Harmony. It was supposedly disbanded when prophecies were whispered about an uprising against the Princess. Tragedy strikes all in this tale. Who wins? Who dies? Find out in this tale of disharmony and the true nature of Friendship.
It's an interesting idea, but I thought you rushed too quickly. There was no time for me to figure out what was going on and, more importantly, why. We just jump right into an out-of-nowhere demand for Derpy's death and continue from there.
Also, there was a huge jump between Dash leaving the safe house and getting her wings hacked off. Where did she go? How'd she get caught?
And that ending... if you're going to make us hate Celestia as much as you are, you need to show us her death, ideally at the hands of the hero. That's the only way a story like this can have closure. You just brushed over it, so the ending isn't very satisfying.
No offense but I think I'll read the rest to see if it gets any better. Sorry, but there were errors in spelling grammar and punctuation, and this is only 500 or so words. Also, it goes much too fast. We start off with Rainbow walking up to the princess and 5 minutes later she's banished. Also, short chapters. In my opinion, a good chapter should be at least 1,000+ words.
But despite all that, I shall read on.
1463734 Also, the last chapter says, Epilogue which is usually at the very end of a story, yet it says incomplete.
This is an interesting concept and if it were more developed it might have been a really good story. As it is there are huge chunks of the story that are missing, the best described parts seem to be of gore and violence, the ending isn't really an ending and there are quite a few inaccuracies. How was RD caught? Exactly why was Rarity's elitism the reason that AJ dies? Why did Celestia want Derpy dead exactly? Was it that she had simply crossed the point of insanity or had Derpy done something to drive her over the edge? There were also numerous spelling errors and grammatical errors that made it difficult to stick with this story. I started of skeptical of this but read to the end all the same with the hope that it would improve but it really didn't unfortunately. Hope this doesn't sound offensive, it's meant to be constructive.
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this is for both of you, i agree, i did rush into it, and i put it as incomplete because i am going back and editing nonstop on it. I copied it from my google docs, and it was all written offline. So Those errors will be corrected. And the plot holes I will patch up, thanks for the advice. More will be added 
Thanks for the feedback aaaaaaand, i am planning on writing a sequel that goes into the war and how Celestia dies and such. I have it ended the way it does for that reason
Have Trixie bust in with akimbo Uzi's and shoot everyone up. She also has a jetpack and anti-gravity hooves attachments.
Whoa whoa whoa man, fucking pacing there is none in this story. First the princess just casually asks dash to kill derpy then bam banisment, all of a sudden applejacks a bad guy, gilda has come out of nowhere and apparantly fluttershy has been helping Dash out for some time after the banishment.
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I know! I wrote it last year, as my FIRST fanfiction! please give me some leeway for the time being, im attempting to fix my mistakes