Have you ever been on a trip that you really did not want to go on? Well that's how I feel right about now. I'm Edward, just some 23 year old shut-in and I've been dragged along for a boring-ass vacation on some island in the middle of nowhere.
Although, it would seem that my destination would be somewhere very different. While still being in the middle of nowhere, I'm in the middle of nowhere with a bunch of talking colorful horses. What's worse, is I can't even understand a damn thing they are saying; but, oh it gets even better than that; I'm now somehow one of these things.
Before I can even think about getting out of this mess, I'll need to learn how to even walk and talk like one of them, maybe then I can get some answers and hopefully find my way home.
Earlier chapters are weak. You've been warned.
Rated teen for slight language and suggestive themes.
Edited by Darastrix. Pre-read by Azu.
Cover image by Sinrar.
Not a blatant self-insert.
...And then they buckeddl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Luna_lolface.png
Just kidding. Trying my hand at a human fic. I know all about the worst cliches and shall do by darnedest to keep as many out as possible. If a part seems cliched or confusing, or rushed, just wait and a well thought-out explanation shall appear in the story. Also, my pre-reader would beat me with a badger if I ever let something slip into the story by mistake.
It's not much now, but stick around, It's gonna be good.
I love any and all comments, I really care about what my readers think as opposed to a lot of authors.
If you downvote, please have enough courage to tell me why, I promise to not be mad as long as you make sense
Gonna say right now the romance isn't with any of the princesses. Hope that quells some worries out there
EDIT: Looking back, I now realize how 'meh' and bad the first chapter is
FORGIVE ME FOR I WAS A YOUNG AND IGNORANT HEATHEN
Haven't read the revised version yet but can you tell me if Wingus and Dingus are still in it?
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They still are
Interesting concept, I like it!
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Thanksdl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra.png
OK, read it.
And I'm intrigued.
Faved and upvoted.
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That's what I like to hear!cdn.broni.es/images/emotes/mlp-bmtouchdown.png
Thanks buddy, I shan't disappointcdn.broni.es/images/emotes/mlp-psalute.png
Interesting, only thing that bothers me is that Ed was identified as intelligent, and then jumps after a phone that was ruined the second it touched the water.
Then again smart and intelligent aren't quite the same thing.
1449945 Me too! please tell me how u get
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I know you won't.
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He's intelligent, but a bit dense.
I wonder who else is like that?dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png
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How I get-?
1450294 how do you get those new emoticons?
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oh, and delete those spam posts. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Sweetie_Belle_lolface.png
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Here
And...
Here as well.
Copy the image's url into the blue picture thingy right up there^
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Well...That's a firstdl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia_O_O.png
Thanks
not bad
Good story.
Hm, interesting, lets see where this goes. Faved and upvoted.
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Thanks a bunch guysdl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Bonbon_OMG_LOVE.png
I can't believe how well my story premiere is doing.
It already has more favorites than either of my other stories, and they're much further along.
Wonder it it'll get featured?dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Bonbon_OMG_LOVE.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Bonbon_OMG_LOVE.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Bonbon_OMG_LOVE.png
Not bad man. Keep it up. Also, nice bit with the language barrier.
Attention to detail is great.
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Thanks
I noticed way too many stories just assume we'd talk the same language, along with a lot of other cliches I'm trying to not include.
At least he's not a red and black alicorndl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/lolface_Celestia.png
Hmm, decent start to your story. At least you established that there is a language barrier between Humans and Ponies which is a nice touch and can make things look interesting in Eds' Point of View. From the look on his character I can assume that he is, really like, an average joe; having human friends, has good form of intelligence with a snarky attitude, experienced a love-life, can be dense and ignorant, and traits that would make him...well...human. I hope you keep that in mind as the character progress down the line as it would help make the character more realistic and "unbiased" towards discovering Pony-kind and reactions towards their cultures.
Personally I've seen too many HiE where, the human(s) in question, are easily integrated their society as how they seamlessly accept the fact of talking ponies with little to know argument (if not being too peaceful/passive around ponies). The scenario doesn't seem realistic as humans ,as to their nature, don't like changes and are ignorant to their environment. If you do plan on having the protagonist accept the way of life with ponies by acceptance, throw in obstacles to help that slowly but inevitably accept his fate. But that's your call as a author so it's up to you what you want to do with your story, I'm merely giving my "two bits" on the subject (forgive me if I made some sentences that are not clear).
Wish you the best luck and hope it turns out well for your favor, Best regards
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Very nice. Might be a suggestion but make sure written word carries the same rule, or I'd be kinda pointless. But that's my two chips. Have fun with it, you'll enjoy writing this if it goes as good as this.
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I've still got some tricks up my sleevedl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia2.png
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Ooh, so you're going with the language barrier route. I enjoy when people go along that path.
I am reading this from my phone,(and will be for the next little while...) so I won't be easily able to use as many comment features
C'est la vie
My interest has been piqued. I await more.
I approve of this fic so far.......you may proceed.
So about those updates :)
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Soon, soon young one
This one didn't end up as long as I initially wanted it, but I felt that was a better ending-point than my original plan
Please rate, and more importantly, comment. Cause how else will I know what people do and don't like without feedback?
Just a little fyi, the next chapter will still be in 1st person, but chapter 4 will be in 3rd person and focusing on all the characters except Edward. Then it will go back to Ed for another 3-4 chapter and then have a 3rd person one, and so on and so forthdl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra.png
The next chapter will be made much quicker than it took for this one. I Pinkie Pie promise to never take this long againcdn.broni.es/images/emotes/mlp-psalute.png
One last thing, I'm taking suggestions for cover images. No, I'm not using a generic pony-generator picture. All other suggestions are welcome, and the winner gets an awesome prize. /)'3'(\
Keep it up i like it
Oh, this is getting interesting. I wait in eager anticipation.
And the shadow is princess Luna!! That's just my guess but love the chapter and yay you won't take as long as this one
So far the idea of a human turned into a pony without the ability to speak their language is certainly a new twist. This story is pretty interesting. Can't wait for the next chapter.
The Bermuda Triangle is in the Atlantic Ocean, not the Pacific.
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I thought it was the Atlantic at first...dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Cheerilee.png
By Celestia's scared plot! It updated!
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Azu, I am disappointdl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Redheart_gasp.png
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Sacred plot
I'm drugged up on turkey! Leave me alone!
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I could just see you with a syringe of turkey and sticking it in your arm
"Ohhh yeah... that's the good stuff. Niiiiiice and dry."
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you gotta slather it in brown gravy first.
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Well duh
Just don't get hooked and start OD'ing on this stuff. You don't want to get...The Gobbles!
"That was bad and you should feel bad..."
Quiet, you're a marshmallow.
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Actually, shes a dictionary.
Bermuda Triangle?
I read A LOT of HiE fics. You are the first to use the Bermuda Triangle.
Mustache!
You may continue...
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That's what I was planning ondl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia2.png
I'm honestly shocked I'm the only one who's used it so fardl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Redheart_gasp.png
But, hay, I try to be really original with all my storiesdl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra.png
Thanks for the 'stache