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dirty little secret


I tried so far… and got so hard… but in the end, it didn't even matter at all. (Direct Support)

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Okay. This was very cute!!

I loved this!

Poor spike!! I hope he gets somepony special to love!!

Can't wait to see what else you write.

Maybe autumn blaze x spike.

Oh?

Great stuff! Noticed a few formatting issues:

"worse ... maybe she’s right.”

The '...' is separated from 'worse.'

“You’re ... you’re not going to use your love spell on Rarity, are you?”

Same issue. It repeats frequently enough that if you CTRL+F ' ... ', you'll find every instance. However, this might be a deliberate choice, so I leave the matter to you.

This was a fun, smexy story!

Please keep writing.
~ Yr. Pal, B

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Poor spike!! I hope he gets somepony special to love!!

Oh, I'm sure he'll hook up with Gabby or Ember one of these days.
Or maybe both? ^.^

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That's on purpose.

I'm not 100% sure if it really abides by the strictest of grammar guides, but I like to differentiate between an end-punctuation ellipse and a mid-sentence pause ellipse. The mid-sentence pause has a space in front of it, while the end punctuation one has no space. (This mirrors the same way an em dash is used.)

Though, yeah. For your second example there, it really could have been two separate sentences. Could go either way.

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(This mirrors the same way an em dash is used.)

<Distant shouting from off screen:>
No it doesn't! An em dash isn't supposed to have a space on either side of it!

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Ah! Figured as such.

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Eh, depends which grammar authority you're using.
Most of the ones that advise against it originate from newspaper grammar guides (such as the Chicago Manual of Style), which I think are unduly obsessed with not wasting any space on the page. (Those same grammar guides are the ones who say you shouldn't use an Oxford comma. Again, omitting an "unnecessary" character just to save a tiny bit of space on the page.)

But I'm not writing newspapers, so I'm not concerned about cramming as much text on the page as possible. Plus, I think having the spaces in there makes it look so much cleaner and less cluttered.

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As was hinted at by the author, go watch Season 9. (Emotes are stuck in Season 1 so you'll just have to imagine Gabby being cute)

Rather than being sad its over one should be happy it happened one and eventually move on to a more fruitful relationship.

Lucky Spike got a taste of how to enjoy a Unicorn.
Since only a Unicorn can use the stimulus spell in his rear end, i guess we know his target in pony species.

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that first part is way easier said than done, especially right after a breakup

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6-12 month is general, very sad if one needs a life long to get over it :ajsleepy:

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Everyone is unique. And I mean 6 months? Some people don’t heal that easily.

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A random example, not a general rule. If you know and dated someone for weeks or months it's a different thing than for years or even decades.
If you want a more seriouse answer you have to give more to work with.
A vage question get a vage example for a answer :raritywink:

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Having the Princess of Love there to help makes it easier! ^.^

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Yeah ... Gabby or Ember, I'd think.
I'd see it as:
Spike develops a really cute and loving relationship with Gabby, and everybody's happy. But then one day Dragon Lord Ember flies into town, claims Spike as her dragon mate as per dragon tradition, and won't take "but I already have a girlfriend" as an answer. It then all becomes a convoluted mess for a while, until they finally stabilize as a polyamorous thruple after an intense wrestling match between Gabby and Ember devolves into intense lesbian hate-fucking between Gabby and Ember, leading to them learning how to all love each other.

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Well, only a unicorn could do it with magic...
But Gabby's talons or Ember's tail could achieve a similar effect.

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Yeah, it's fun dealing with some actual emotional stuff for once! ^.^

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^.^ Thanks! What's your favorite part?

I'd see it as:

You already wrote that fic, remember? :derpytongue2:

Happily married my ass, bitch got filled by Spike. Shining Armor deserves better. Cadence is a 304 and she's gonna cheat on Shining Armor again. He'd have been better off with Chrysailis.

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Poor Shining Armor. His wife gave out a pity sex. Hopefully he gets to bust a nut in another mare.

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The chat at the beginning seems to be implying that Shining fugged Twilight on his birthday, so it sounds like Cadance doesn't have a monopoly on extramarital shenanigans here.

Not since Chrysalis...

...I love me some Chrysadence, but I find myself both curious and NOT curious about what Cadence's story is behind that...:ajsmug:

That aside, this was, as always from dirty little secret a fun and interesting read, both sexually and just general story entertainment. Poor Spike, good on Cadence to make him feel better like that. She was right, he needed, first and foremost, to get his mind off of Rarity, just enough to open him up to...well, everything else again. Also, nice that he had fun, fun is good after something painful. Not sure if that applies to heartbreaks, but Cadence is the expert, not me.

Cadance paused, glancing back at Twilight. “Remember last year when I asked you for a really big favor and you came up to the Crystal Empire to be a certain somepony’s birthday present? Well ... consider the favor repaid.” With one last wink, she left Twilight behind and headed for the stairs.

That's "Shining's extra special birthday presents" right? But wasn't it not the real twilight, but a changeling?

well this was nice.

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On a long enough timescale, I eventually write everything. ^.^

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I like to think of them as having more of an open marriage.

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Thanks! ^.^ I love getting more detailed feedback like that!

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...I love me some Chrysadence, but I find myself both curious and NOT curious about what Cadence's story is behind that...

Oh, you know, trapped in a dungeon below Canterlot with only the occasional visit from Chrysalis for company...

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Not all of my stories are in the same universe! ^.^
In this one, he got the real thing. :twilightsmile:

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Thanks! ^.^ What's your favorite part?

“Well, I suppose it’s time for me to work my magic, then.”
Suddenly sitting up straight, Twilight stared at her, aghast. “You’re ... you’re not going to use your love spell on Rarity, are you?”

I was about to say "You didn't meant literal magic, right?". Good to see she doesn't go down that route.

Cadance paused, glancing back at Twilight. “Remember last year when I asked you for a really big favor and you came up to the Crystal Empire to be a certain somepony’s birthday present? Well ... consider the favor repaid.” With one last wink, she left Twilight behind and headed for the stairs.

I really should get around to read that particular story some day.
I'm also curious about Twilight's thoughts right now. But it's probably something like this:
:facehoof:: "Of course she would try something like that. But hey, as longs as it works..."

Carefully closing and locking the door behind her – for all the good it would do if Twilight really wanted to intrude – Cadance approached his bed.

For all we know she had already set up scrying spells while Cadance was still going up the stairs.

“Did you come all the way from the Crystal Empire just to lecture me? I already get plenty of that from Twilight.”
“No, I came all the way here to fuck you.”
His head snapped up. “What?

Me: "What?"

Oh wow ... that tongue of his – he was really going deep! The forked tip of it was already tickling the back of her throat. She only throated his tongue a little bit, though, and mostly just because it was something she didn’t get to do very often. Not since Chrysalis...

When you described his tongue I was about to comment Cadance would have experience handling serpentine tongues from her "diplomatic meetings" with Chrysalis, but you already came to this conclusion yourself.
Not that I expected anything else.


To be continued...

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To be continued...

lol, couldn't get through it all at once? ^.^ Must mean I did a good job!

Good for them!
:moustache:

At least he was polite enough that he didn’t even attempt to grab her head or her horn and force the matter. Rarity had probably taught him that. There was no way a mare like her would put up with such a thing.

:raritywink:: "Indeed, darling."

Cadance arched her back a little and winked her pussy at him. “I’m all yours tonight. Take me, Spike.”

Shining: "But-"
Cadance: "Don't worry, dear. I already called for someone else to keep you busy."
Chrysalis: "That's right, you're all mine now! At least for today..."
Shining: *seemingly frightened but actually exited stallion noises*

He’d already been so on-edge. She couldn’t let him cum already, just from the first insertion!

:moustache:: "Don't look at me, this is entirely your fault!"

“I’m not Rarity.” She lifted her head again, looking him in the eyes. “Fuck me like you mean it.”

Famous last words.


Good story!
I enjoyed reading it.

Just wondering:
Do you have any special plans for story 100? Because you are about to reach that milestone.

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Shining: "But-"
Cadance: "Don't worry, dear. I already called for someone else to keep you busy."
Chrysalis: "That's right, you're all mine now! At least for today..."
Shining: *seemingly frightened but actually exited stallion noises*

Later...
Cadance: "So, Chryssy, how'd your night with Shining Armor go?"
Chrysalis: *rolls eyes* "He just wanted me to transform into his sister most of the time."
Cadance: "Most of the time?"
Chrysalis: "Yeah... One time he wanted me to suck him off while disguised as his old drill sergeant from basic. One time he wanted me to be a griffon. Oh, and one time he wanted me to be a giant corn dog for some reason?"
Cadance: "Seriously, a giant corn dog? How could he even fuck a corn dog?"
Chrysalis: "Oh, he didn't fuck the corn dog. The corn dog fucked him."

Actually, you know... That's quite an interesting conundrum.

You get to spend the night with a shapeshifter who can be anyone or anything you want, no restrictions! All guilt free and with permission. But after the night is over, the shapeshifter is going to tell your wife everything you did. Your wife can't hold it against you ... but she can judge you for it. How much are you going to risk? Which fantasies are you not willing to try out under those conditions?

Do you have any special plans for story 100? Because you are about to reach that milestone.

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Yeah, um ... sure! I've, uh ... I've totally been planning something really special all along!
I just can't tell you what it is yet because, um ... because it's a secret! Yeah! A dirty little one!

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Actually, you know... That's quite an interesting conundrum.
You get to spend the night with a shapeshifter who can be anyone or anything you want, no restrictions! All guilt free and with permission. But after the night is over, the shapeshifter is going to tell your wife everything you did. Your wife can't hold it against you ... but she can judge you for it. How much are you going to risk? Which fantasies are you not willing to try out under those conditions?

Just what do you consume to get ideas like this out of nowhere?
And where can I get some of it?

Imagine if he just asked he to "be herself".
No disguise, no personality change, no nothing. Just Queen Chrysalis doing whatever evil changeling queens do to their most prized prey.
How do you think Cadance would react to that?

Yeah, um ... sure! I've, uh ... I've totally been planning something really special all along!
I just can't tell you what it is yet because, um ... because it's a secret! Yeah! A dirty little one!

*narrows eyes* Okie. Doki. Loki.
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Source.

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Imagine if he just asked he to "be herself".
No disguise, no personality change, no nothing. Just Queen Chrysalis doing whatever evil changeling queens do to their most prized prey.
How do you think Cadance would react to that?

Eh, honestly I'm really just tired of this trope.

Way too many stories out there where the 'twist' is that the lucky pony wants the changeling's true form. Yeah, it seems like a unique take on the idea ... except that like 90% of changeling stories out there do exactly this. Come on! They're a changeling have fun with it! Why is it so hard to find stories of a pony having sex with a changeling with the changing disguised as a different pony? (For that matter, a changeling disguised as yourself could give some nice narcissistic self-cest opportunities. Looking at you, Trixie.)

Just what do you consume to get ideas like this out of nowhere?

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A little late to the party but i enjoyed this. That was one happy, flexible princess. Though, i have to admit, I too am curious about Twilight being used as a surprise birthday present and how that went. (Pretty sure I can imagine it.)

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I'd write a story about it, but I'm pretty sure the same story has already been written 500 times.

That was certainly unorthodox. Then again, that's precisely why we come for stories like this.

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