Based on Locoattack1's fanfic A New World. Members of the interwedded families of Slater and Cartwright are transported into Equestria in quick succession, but only one of them is a brony. How will the ponies react to these aliens appearing out of nowhere? What contributions can they give to this society?
For both worlds this is set in (an) alternative universe(s) and only 56 episodes have been made of MLP:FiM.
This is a self-insert fanfic. If you consider these kinds of writing egotistic I'd advise against reading this.
Chapters (8)
So not one human get to send to equestria but a hole town will end up there? Intrensting concept which sadly rarely yoused in my opinion sure it's fun when you end up in equestri and all but it woud be way bether if a big group of humans woud end up there to forming comunityes forging alliances befrend the ponies get moral/etnical dillemas. It's so much more fun to describing things on these kind of level. Faved up voted can't waite for more.
2079811 I'm sorry to say that it's not gonna be a whole town but a few households or so.
Awwwwwww not a hole town? But I so hoped thet finaly there woud be a large scal of humans ending up in Equestria
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2084635 Awfully sorry. However I do intend for some of the dialogue to deal with the possibility of something on that scale.
2084697 So you mean thet later on the story ponies coud pull in a lot of humans to there world or it will be the situation for a other story?
2084775 Well, there will be talk about what to do should too many humans appear and, if the ponies want to breed humans, they will have to ensure a greater genetic variety arrive. The latter point is undecided at this stage.
So far so good gonna see where this goes don't let me down
2130752 I intend to, but I need to know if you want Pinkie Pie to spring a surprise party at the start of the next chapter or not.
I'd say by now the others might be sitting on Pinkie pie to stage them later once the wierd aliens have had time to settle in, after the first few times a human house popped in...
Oh boy new chapter awsome can't waite for more.
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Do not complain about going OVER the word limit! It is a good thing(even if most of it was song)!
Cliches/tropes that actual good stories tend to avoid that I spotted so far in this story:
1. Bastard Humans
2. Brony in Equestria
3. Instant Acceptances
4. Equestria is a Utopia
FUCKING SERIOUSLY?!
NO REALLY....BASTARD HUMANS?! UTOPIA EQUESTRIA?! I swear I am beginning to lose faith in a lot of stories on fimfiction.
I love how writers like you write stories where humanity is filled with nothing but fucking pure malice and evil along with its history; and turn around and fucking glorify a world which we know next to nothing about! BE REALISTIC! THAT'S LIKE SAYING FUCKING WONDERLAND IS A PARADISE...WHICH IT WASN'T BECAUSE OF THE RED QUEEN!
How do we know that Equestria doesn't have its own social issues, and there aren't wars currently going on in their realm? Why would Equestria have a military if they never have war?! THINK! THINK! THINK!........
Next one:
Seriously....the instant acceptances....no "We don't know if you're entirely dangerous or not so we must take precautions" kind of deal?
No scared ponies? Don't fucking bring up zecora because SHE IS A TYPE OF HORSE! THE ONLY REASON WHY SHE WAS FEARED WAS BECAUSE OF HOW DIFFERENT SHE LOOKED FROM OTHER PONIES!.......Humans aren't animals at all, nor are they ponies! They are creatures that Equestria is NOT FAMILIAR with, and they have never seen them before!
Brony in Equestria.....I don't have a huge problem, but try to be a little more unique...insert fics are way too common and it irks me.
Fucking why are these tropes so over used? The first three that I covered aren't even freaking true in what they are trying to accomplish!
This is why I think UTOPIA EQUESTRIA is not fucking true: Changling attack in season 2; King Sombra returns to reclaim the crystal empire; Nightmare Moon tries to permanently darken Equestria; Discord; the prejudices shown toward Zecora in "Bridle Gossip."
So yeah....OOPS!
Also, the whole "Equestria is a Utopia" thing is something along the lines of ignorance because of how untrue it is.
My apologies for blowing up here, but seriously...AVOID THOSE TROPES/CLICHES!
2836188 A few pointers...
Bastard humans: That is built around my own frustration with how humanity has behaved but, over time, it'll mellow as the full-scope becomes apparent while discussing the differences between our two worlds.
Instant Acceptances: We have no projectile weapons and my granddad was the first to arrive, so the ponies are bound to see that he's of no danger due to age and the gradual arrival also ensures that they have reasonable methods for dealing with it.
Equestria is a Utopia: Um, perhaps not completely but compared to how humanity has to function it is, it's all a matter of how things progress in the long run. Besides the two-parter that closes the 2nd series, the two-parter that opens the 3rd series and subsequent follow-ons are NOT recognised by this brony.
Give it time and things should start to get a bit rougher.
WOW! You got whole bit where "dragons eat gemstones which allows them to breath fire" HOLY FUCK! DRAGONS HAVE AN INTERNAL MAGIC SUPPLY THAT ALLOWS THEM TO DO THIS!
Also! Dragons are BORN with the ability to breath fire anyway because of their organ system! They've always been able to breath fire! Holy crap..........I've never seen a story get so much wrong!
okay now I gotta bitch every time I read a chapter of your story. SERIOUSLY?! Fucking A man...you must hate humanity and all of its fucking glory. Wow........So I guess the Ifle Tower is terrible architecture; the Royal Palace in England must be terrible architecture....the BASTARD HUMAN trope never ends!
2837244 That was 70's architecture, modernist architecture.
Okay fuck this story. This has too much misanthrope in it. You keep fucking glorifying a world you know next to nothing about (I will admit I don't know much either, but certainly more than you do.)
You just bumped the whole misanthrope, and Equestria Utopia cliche/tropes to a whole new level with this. I'm done reading.
2837935 Fair enough. It seems pretty clear that we're not on the same page.
2837244 Firstly, the correct spelling is Eifel. And it was disliked by many Parisians.
Secondly, there is no 'Royal Palace' in Great Britain, it is referred to as Buckingham Palace. HM Queen Elizabeth II has many residences through the country.
Third this is roughly what the protagonists house looks like: www2.rgu.ac.uk/publicpolicy/introduction/images/douglas.jpg
And finally, if you disapprove of any of the themes or issues raised in this story, no one is forcing you to read it.
# It's a long way to Tippomarey, it's a long way to go # This ponified song has been stuck in my head for the last 15 minutes.
Unlike JacktheBrony, who has finally stopped complaining, I have no problem with the supposed problems with this story. This is a concept I may consider utilising when I get around to writing my first fic. But perhaps I will use a more typical HiE style, except with a family instead of the individual. Such a story would negate the typical problem of homesickness as well as preventing the story from turning into some Celestia forsaken ship/harem fic. Good story sir, have a moustache.
I look forward to the next instalment of this story.
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Close, except it's semi-detached.
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Either way the problem remains. Using the typical HiE concept is not the best way to go.
Excellent, a new chapter. You have laid down the basics of the future story quite well and given your characters cause to return to Ponyville and frequently interact with the mane six. Your merging of Equestrian and pre-decimal currency is also quite interesting. The most difficult thing to do in a HiE is language, particularly the explanation, I would be interested to hear perhaps Twilight's theories on the similarities at some point. Finally, the reactions to Pinkie Pie, just right.
Ignore the downvotes, if I could I would do multiple upvotes to level things out. This is a good story, keep on going.
That sexual fantasy thing came outa f***ing NO WHERE! WOW that was confusing...... hi Blade Star
2837935 Good, I won't have to listen to you BITCHING ABOUT EVERYTHING!!!
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year old comment, year old update. It's not bitching if the problem with the fic is real. I can criticize if I want. If I have something to say, I'm going to say it.
2837935 good riddance
6416967 i know right