Based on Irwin Allen's Land of the Giants. (But only just.)
When a state-of-the-art propulsion system on board a new spaceship goes haywire it brings the ship and all humans on board to Equestria, but the scale of this magical world is not what most would expect.
What safety is there for people in a world where even mice tower over them? Can they find a way to get back to Earth? Will they even want to?
May contain ultra-soft vore.
This is my first work on this site. Constructive criticism will be helpful.
Assistance in writing provided by two others who shall remain annonymous until they request that their handles are given in acknowledgement.
Chapters (6)
Oooooookay... Little tip.
This is NOT how you introduce characters to an audience.
I'll be honest. I just read this and... I know nothing about these characters. Oh I read what you told me, but it was presented in such a fashion that it was, well... boring. To the point that I stopped caring very quickly.
This isn't how you show character. If you want to make a list like this to explain the cast to YOURSELF then this is a viable method, but you can't try and explain them to US like this. Nobody will remember them, and nobody will really care.
If you want to show characters and introduce them, have them interact. Have them do things. Actions are what define a character. The things they say and the way they say it. Their movements. Their actions. You can't just slap a list down in front of us and expect us to remember and accept it. Writing simply doesn't work like that.
Honestly I think you should do this little prologue over. Show us these traits and these characters through their actions and speech (just remember that actions are more important than dialogue). Show us doing their jobs, talking to each other, interacting with their family and friends, how they sit and eat a sandwich among colleagues. Even the most basic of actions tell us more about character than throwing a list at us.
Seriously. If you want a really good story you'll want to do this part over. Introduction to a character is perhaps the most important part of a character. I know it's hard but if you really want anything good then it's necessary.
First chapter is kind of too long and too short at the same time, I'm not sure if their was much point uploading this before they got to pony land, but I look forward to reading more, if your still writing
11194 I am indeed, but I do struggle in places as I attempt to find a good narrative link between two places that are well-formed in my head.
Okay, there... See? Now that we can finally put their actions in context, that we're actually having something happen, and we're not loaded down with tons of superfluous supporting characters, I can finally see the sorts of characters we're working with here. A bit archetypal but otherwise good.
In fact, now that we've finally gotten to Equestria, things are shaping up to be really interesting. It almost makes me wonder why we had to chug through that first part. But I like how you portray the characters, and the humans seem kinda interesting now.
Also, loved Applejack's line about "I wonder if I should look for it now or wait for Twi." They've seen so many crazy things she just KNOWS what's about to happen.
Agreed, I assume Mr? Bads, I felt at first that I had little to no connection to the characters, nor any semblence of plot. I was adrift in a sea of words, unable to fathom my bearings nor drift towards any landmass of coherency. However, in this chapter, that all changed. I was caught in a net of logic, and drawn up into the vessel of narrative. I felt however that there was a slight lack of scale, but I am sure as interactions proceed, we shall in fact be gifted that. In conclusion, my only feeling left that I have not spit out in a vaunted application of humor is this, "Dear Sweet Celestia. Its a giant Pinkie Pie."
My brain hurts. I'm not a physics person and a lot of the stuff you talk about in the first chapter was really confusing to me. I guess you can say *removes sunglasses* it's all geek to me.
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anyways...
It's good, hope to see more.
Much more.
And please make sure they spend most of their time with Twilight, i don't want to have to unravel how they would survive every near death experience they go through.
Nice!
Can't wait for the next chapter!
interesting
Oh sweet Luna, it's a time travel fic with a scailing issue!
Like it still
interesting
......I love it yet for some reason I don't approve of the actual ship....odd....keep up the good work!
....That's one small step for ponies, one giant leap for human in equestria story kind!
14874 It's not really time-travel, more dimension jumping.
The 2nd and 3rd chapter's were much better, and you started to give the crew personalities, though I think you over did the swearing. You did a good job with the mane cast and I look forward to more
21258 The subject of the swearing was that it was an integral part of her personality, but in regards to the rating I did make use of calligraphic intelligability so as to try and avoid offense.
more please!
I'm liking this. I really hope I get to see more of this, because its a really unique twist on the Human in Equestria stories, and I'd hate to see it abandoned.
79073 I've been meaning to update but I can't seem to shake off writer's block at the moment. Everytime I look over what I already have I struggle to form a continuation.
If you'd like a suggestion, I'd say you should probably focus on the encounter with Twilight and the humans. Maybe something along the lines of what she does while she observes them, for example, does she communicate with them or make an attempt to? Something along the lines of that would make for a great continuation, that and what happens with the other survivors.
Looking forward to seeing more of this story.
I love the fact Twilight is writing a thesis on them. Nice touch.
Just wait until they see Manehatton. Pre-industrial skyscrapers, my FLANK!
Time's Gabriel's reading difficulty kicked in: 0 *yay!* but did suffer from some ADD due to doing many things at once *boo!*
Okay, I admit, when I saw this fic at first I was like:
"A Macrofic? Okay, this is going to hurt."
That was when common logic slapped me and said -
"Gabriel you useless waste of a human being! This is Hereward we're talking about! The guy who faved your fic - technically a Macrofic too when you think about it - twice, and is likely showing you support! Not to mention his material on Writing.com wasn't that bad..."
So I bit the bullet, strapped on the Macro Safety Armour and went in.
Prologue: ...And I thought I had some trouble starting things sometimes. Still, rocky start doesn't mean it's a bad fic. Moving on to next chapter...
Chapter 1: Things get better here. I'll admit as well your the superior charecter writer. Also liked some of the nice touches, like Applejack's deadpan reaction and the "censor bleeps" for want of a better term.
Chapter 2: Another good chapter, even if not quite as good as the last one. Still showing some good writing when it comes to the mane six.
Chapter 3: Incomplete title? Oookay, I'll bear that in mind...
*reads Chapter*
Gah, too short. Alright, I'll do a proper assessment when it's finished.
Bottom Line: An MLP Macrofic I might be interested in reading again. Whichever side of my brain made the illogical conclusion that I was expecting PAIN needs to be shot. Right now.
sooner or latter by accident or choice a ponies going to swallow one of them... i hope its soon...
Can't wait until Harry and Angela get out of their pod.
You're out! This is gonna be great! Let's get to know each other...FOR SCIENCE!
I need more
NOW
Interesting read, although you should note: Unicorns can do more than one thing at a time with their horns & magic. They can open doors and still levitate multiple objects at the same time. Just thought I clear that up for you so that you can edit the first four chapters a bit on that.
Anyways, I want to point out that I'm a huge fan of Irwin Allen's Land of the Giants, and am quite please someone finally took the motive to created a pony version of my favorite classic sci-fi series.
Judging from the size of the human in compare to the ponies, I take it you base the size ratio on the concept work on LotG, as the little people in the concept sketching were about an 1-2 inches tall compared to being 5-7 inches in the final production. Good choice, the smaller our travelers are, more of an obstacle the giant Equestrian world will be.
Keep up the good work. I expect to see some interesting interactions with the characters of both worlds as this story develops.
Anyways, here's some inspiration:
1143893 Actually I've been attempting to place the humans as between ¼" and 1" tall compared to the ponies. The basis is that 1 clip is the average length of a pony's eyelash.
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I would say 1 inch tall, since 1/4 is too small for me. 1" tall would make them as small as the little people from "Meet Dave," which sounds perfect.
1150367 That can be possible. You've seen how long somponies' eyelashes can be
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I just fell that 1/4 is too small, and at that size, the humans would be too small to be heard - you're thinking on the lines of "Honey I shrunk the Kids", not "Land of the Giants." At least at 1" tall, they can be heard clearly enough, are still big enough to stand a chance of surviving in the giant Equestrian world.
I wonder: The giant white shape that one of the little people runs into - that could only be either Angel, Opal, or Sweetie Belle.
Guess we'll find out soon. I hope.
1156912 As to HISTK, although they use the term ¼" that is incorrect since ants are smaller than that and the scale makes one of those appear as big as a horse, so 1/16th of an inch would be more accurate there.
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Just stick with them being 1" tall. 1/16" is too small for the ponies to hear them.
1167195 I had no intention of they're being anything less than ¼" but from that to 1" should be satisfactory, one way or another.
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Well, even 1/4" is too small for me, but still, it's your story, and I want to continue to see where it goes from here.
When will the next couple of chapters be ready?
1171565 It's gonna be a while, I'm afraid. Even when I've taken on (for want of a better word) contributors it's still taken a whole month to come up with two paragraphs and I can't find a good title for the next chapter.
any updates or ideas? =3
1764529 Apologies. I've been devoid of inspiration for this story so the next chapter's gonna be a while yet.
I remember that series it was funny [Instat fav
Oh, an update on this story? Well this is a pleasant surprise!
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No kidding. I had actually forgotten about it. Now if only Stargate: Equestria would update, too. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Luna_lolface.png
Wow I didn't even remember this story. Nice to see it being updated.
FINALLY!!!! >=3
Hope you can update this more often.
Good job on the chapter so far. Wish you could write longer ones, though.
Keep up the good work.
I thought this Story was dead! It's good, to see i was wrong!
I just realized something. I never uprated this yet. *Uprates* There. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png
1858110 I intended it to be longer but I keep getting writer's block and then I notice either a good scene ending or cliffhanger, so figure that it can be published as is.
Woah, woah, woah, woah....this story isn't dead?!
I had long since given up on this bad boy and now it's back!
Life is good!
I haven't logged on in forever, so an update to this was a doubly nice surprise!
Can't wait to see how Celestia, Harry, and Angela all interact: that'll be something to see.
This story is AMAZING!!!
Please make more. I can't stand there not being more, I really want to read more.