Seems like a nice introduction. Good that you got away from fandom impression of Lyra and made your own personality of her. Admittingly the dialogue is a little bit stale, but different. It shall be interesting as the story progresses.
“If you were hallucinating, you wouldn’t be talking to yourself,” Lyra responded smartly, shuddering and then relaxing, closing her eyes. “Now shush, stop making noises. Head hurts.”
Lyra rolled her eyes slightly. Her horn glowed, and she levitated the human a full foot off the floor.
Reaction One: Wow. Lyra's a bitch. Reaction Two: I'm pretty sure they have refrigerators in equestria. Reaction Three: I don't know if I like this story...
I can't help but wonder...did you call this human Jason because of famed FIMFiction writer JasonTheHuman, author of "Anthropology", arguably THE Lyra and humans story?
out of ALL HIE or POE stories i have a deep fondness for ones where humans arent depicted as knowing mlp :3 so thank you on this next chap!! lyra is best pony!
Hate to say it, but my biggest pet peeve about Lyra fics and the fannon human obsession(BTW, I AM aware that this fic doesn't include the human obsession thing) in general is the whole hands thing. While her fascination with them is generally hilarious and funny, if she was really that obsessed with them, you'd think she'd have kidnapped Spike or some random griffon, cause, despite probably being called claws, in Equestria, they work the same dang way! So yeah...lack of hand knowledge make no sensy.
I, what? That's the most idiotic mistake I've ever seen in a story. Ever. Why is that not fixed yet? It's even been pointed out multiple times.
And Lyra seems incredibly OoC for what we know of her. She breaks into his house, acts like a complete jerk the rest of the time she's there, and tries to assault/interrogate him after finding out she was basically breaking into his house.
The idea behind the story is pretty interesting, but those issues (minor as they are) are really hurting any enjoyment I'm getting out of this.
I liiiike it, but, Lyra talks like she's Luna... The dialogue doesn't really mesh with any other incarnation of her that I've ever read. Points for originality on that end, but then it evens out because I'm not overly fond of it. Still It's a clop fic so that kind of deep isn't want people come here to read anyway.
"Lyra’s head tilted to the side slightly, and he grinned. It had worked?!" Did Lyra just change gender there for a second or was 'he' always a stallion in the first place?
Well this is fun. Took me long enough to get to it. Magical portal into a human's house, I can dig it. I like your descriptions for things she doesn't understand. Like the lava lamp. That made me chuckle. Still haven't figured out what all of those objects were, though.
And as for the not-knowing-about hands thing...maybe Iron Will hasn't come to Ponyville yet and she's just a shut-in? LOL.
Well, what can I say?
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Dis gon be gud....
This is gonna be a bumpy ride
lol, this should be entertaining. Though I did notice some typos in it still. Now comes the part where I demand moar of this glorious originalness
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Eh. Dialogue is a little trite.
Seems like a nice introduction. Good that you got away from fandom impression of Lyra and made your own personality of her. Admittingly
the dialogue is a little bit stale, but different. It shall be interesting as the story progresses.
I don't like human stories..but I'll give this one a try, you've impressed me before Anony, I have a feeling you're going to do it again.
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is this going to be a long story?
i like the story so don't stop......if it ok whit you....
this will be awesome!
You're in the sidebar, and I expect you to move into the featured box soon. Excellent start!
I want some MOAR!
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here, you earned this
oh also
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Dear Celestia.... This is awesome
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Country.
Or on another continent if you prefer.
Tsundere Lyra is best Lyra. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Bonbon_gaze.png
and america is a planet the writing seems a little stiff something you'd expect from an intellectual like twilight not from a musician like lyra
I like it! Interested in reading more!
Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!
I'm gonna need some more of this, Author-Man. Chop chop.
Yep need more.
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What's the fic about ?
"china is another continent"i really wanna punch you for that but besides that this story is quite interesing
Reaction One: Wow. Lyra's a bitch.
Reaction Two: I'm pretty sure they have refrigerators in equestria.
Reaction Three: I don't know if I like this story...
Not bad.
I can't help but wonder...did you call this human Jason because of famed FIMFiction writer JasonTheHuman, author of "Anthropology", arguably THE Lyra and humans story?
1411758 THANK YOU! I was going crazy that no one had said that yet.
out of ALL HIE or POE stories i have a deep fondness for ones where humans arent depicted as knowing mlp :3 so thank you on this next chap!! lyra is best pony!
1319821 Same here, brother, with the exception of point number 3.
I don't like this story.
I love it. Love Lyra!!!
Hate to say it, but my biggest pet peeve about Lyra fics and the fannon human obsession(BTW, I AM aware that this fic doesn't include the human obsession thing) in general is the whole hands thing. While her fascination with them is generally hilarious and funny, if she was really that obsessed with them, you'd think she'd have kidnapped Spike or some random griffon, cause, despite probably being called claws, in Equestria, they work the same dang way! So yeah...lack of hand knowledge make no sensy.
ANYHOO, this is a great start, want moar. *favs*
That moment when those things are totally coincidental and I check to see if this was written by JasonTheHuman.
I, what? That's the most idiotic mistake I've ever seen in a story. Ever. Why is that not fixed yet? It's even been pointed out multiple times.
And Lyra seems incredibly OoC for what we know of her. She breaks into his house, acts like a complete jerk the rest of the time she's there, and tries to assault/interrogate him after finding out she was basically breaking into his house.
The idea behind the story is pretty interesting, but those issues (minor as they are) are really hurting any enjoyment I'm getting out of this.
Just saw you featured. Grats.
So far so good.
I shall continue....
So begins Lyra's fascination with humans.
Um, yeah, sorry to be late to the party with this, but...
...what?
I'm sorry, I just had to do that!!!
Dammit!!! Why must I wait so long to start reading the good stories??
just one thing...
Is Lyra a hermaphrodite?
You got the order wrong, it's supposed to be yellow-red-green-blue-black-white.
The 'oi' fucked me up. Now jason has a British accent
I like the story so far, just one thing, and this is just a pet peeve of mine but:
“Griffon’s, hydra’s, pegasi, basilisk’s...” Lyra hummed thoughtfully as she ticked off names.
And y'know, FUCKING MINOTAURS THAT HAVE HANDS! I'm sorry, the hands thing bothers me since hands aren't a new thing in Equestria.
I liiiike it, but, Lyra talks like she's Luna... The dialogue doesn't really mesh with any other incarnation of her that I've ever read. Points for originality on that end, but then it evens out because I'm not overly fond of it. Still It's a clop fic so that kind of deep isn't want people come here to read anyway.
......................no.
*Ahem* Cup-holders
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¿Estás enojado?
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Behold the majestic majesty of this wonder of nature!
... did Lyra just open a portal to the Shivering Isles in her wardrobe?
"Lyra’s head tilted to the side slightly, and he grinned. It had worked?!"
Did Lyra just change gender there for a second or was 'he' always a stallion in the first place?
Well this is fun. Took me long enough to get to it. Magical portal into a human's house, I can dig it. I like your descriptions for things she doesn't understand. Like the lava lamp. That made me chuckle. Still haven't figured out what all of those objects were, though.
And as for the not-knowing-about hands thing...maybe Iron Will hasn't come to Ponyville yet and she's just a shut-in? LOL.
...Lol? This has been pointed out a lot, haha, sorry to bring it back up! But it...IRKS...me...
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I'm okay with this...have a fave and like!