1738735 -blinks back- It does. The Sex and Gore tags don't show up with the Comedy, Dark, etc. tags. They only appear on the story briefs, like on the author's profile page. Why, I couldn't say -- they really should appear among the other tags.
1738693 Thanks, glad you liked it, I certainly will!
1739249 Thanks, yeah, the editing's top-notch, and I'm glad it shows. We'll have to see what happens with Di and that letter
1738735 Oh no, you didn't... aw. Sorry about that. Nah, this is romance with all the naughty bits, Fimfiction's tagging system is a bit silly, like Jot said.
I loved the ending, that letter, it will either mean, that Diamonds days of keeping secrets are over, or, Her relationship with Silver is over. anyway, cant wait for the next ch.
1760016 Ahh, thank you so much! It's unfortunate how much good literature gets ignored because of subject matter, I've come across fics that I would absolutely recommend to people as great reading - and sometimes do - but the graphic sex creates a bar that many people just aren't willing to move past.
You're also right about the benefits of writing fanfiction - having characters that will have immediate meaning outside of themselves is a huge benefit. Although it's complicated by the fact that you run into situations where you'd like to write a character a certain way or include extra details about them that can clash with the pre-existing idea that the reader has about them.
Damn, that felt painful... Like a spear to my heart... Absolutely perfect! Emotions, scene, everything was executed perfectly! And I do mean EVERYTHING! Perfect fic! Please add another chapter!
Hm, I might be mistaken, but didn't Rarity say Tiara wasn't allowed to act like a brat for the sole purpose of being punished in one of the earlier chapters? Wouldn't that apply here? Though, it could also be an exception, seeing as they both were a "little" stressed.
Anyway, nice chapter. I just hope Di and Silvy will make up. Even though they're both bitches in the show, they're just too good friends to throw everything away.
Oh my goddess! The stress of waiting for another chapter is going to kill me! Did Silver Spoon follow Diamond to Rarity's? Did she see? What can her note mean?! Oh Luna this is good writing!
Oh wow... Just read the first six chapters. This story is very very good. While it is very different this reminds me a lot of The Scootaloo Diaries (Was it perhaps an inspiration?) The thing I never liked about that one is how darn repetitive it was, but this... You have thus far provided the reader with a smoothly transitioning flow of events that has yet to stop moving forward. Sometimes letting a chain of events get stuck in a cycle is good. But seriously, it gets down right boring if the cycle just keeps on going around in circles.
At first I was worried that I was going to have to deal with some never-ending struggle of an adolescent trying to maintain two relationships. And while there is still a very slim possibility of that situation striking up again, I can't imagine it being anything like what was happening in The Scootaloo Diaries.
1803843 I take it upon myself to respond to this. I hope my opinion is valid.
You are right that Diamond Tiara was acting like a brat, however... She was acting like a brat in the sense that she was taking a rather immature approach to getting her point across. And her approach was probably rather appropriate at the same time. For one, she was - understandably - very frustrated with everything that had been going on around her. For two, she knew that she had to assert herself to make Rarity understand the urgency; it's a lot like seeking sexual relief from your lover, only she was seeking punishment.
Keep in mind there is a huge difference between acting like a brat in hopes that you would get punished for your misbehavior and doing what Diamond did. She was trying to show Rarity that she sincerely felt that she deserved to be punished for a series of actions she had already taken and knew that she could not take back.
A rather simple example: Being an immature brat: Diamond Tiara kicks over a vase right in front of Rarity so that she could be punished. Being rational and mature: Diamond Tiara admits that she had accidentally knocked over a vase and feels that she should be punished for it.
1828237 You know, I've never actually read that, but I'll add it to my list - can't have enough highly-rated foalcon. Maybe it'll be my next big read now that I'm done with Romance Reports. I hear what you're saying about repetition, though, I've definitely run across fics with just that issue, and hopefully this one will avoid it!
I'm glad you're enjoying this, thanks for the praise!
1803843 I hope they can make up too, although what that would look like is definitely up to question. Also, thank you for the continuity check. I feel like the encounter in the latest chapter was more about accountability and punishment for her previous wrongdoing with messing up everything for Rarity - sorta like what ColtZero was getting at.
1817377 I know, sorry to put you through the wringer, there's nothing like getting into something in progress. But hey, on the brighter side, it's... about halfway through, as I'm planning it?
Okay, it's been a couple of days since I've read this chapter, and it's early morning, so I hope I remember it correctly. I know that diamond Tiara only did it because she felt she deserved to be punished. However, the first thing she did was misbehaving on purpose only to make Rarity angry, instead of talking about it with her. As I said, they were both stressed in that situation, so I guess Rarity and I can excuse that behaviour. Maybe I was just worried that it'd always go that way... Diamond's way. In the end she'd be getting what she wanted, which would be defying all that Rarity taught her.
Oh, how about this. I just said, Diamond felt she deserved to be punished and urged Rarity to carry it out. She shouldn't force Rarity like that to make that decision. They're still in a relationship, and Rarity needs to give her consent as well and not be forced to make decisions because of the heat of the moment.
Comment posted by bjorn2345 deleted Nov 22nd, 2017
well after the Humbolt incident it's no wonder Diamond became a bully. He never got the chance to rape her but he did use her and she suffered terrible redicule due to the rumors that something happened between them.
Also I see Diamond was always trying to grow up before her time, not really taking the time to enjoy foal-hood. I'm glad her dad is not an absentee parent just slightly negligent when it comes to discipline because of the one spanking incident.
and "It's over" doesnt bode well. Can't wait to read on
AUUUUUUGHHHH!!! This chapter was really really good! The ender was just... perfect! D:
Now I'm excited for the next chapter, keep up the great work.
Shouldn't this have a "Sex" category on it? -blinks-
Seems our little debutante always had an attraction to the older crowd, eh? This letter could be a boom or a bust to Diamond.
Excellent writing. That time with your editor payed off. Hope to read another soon!
1738735
-blinks back-
It does. The Sex and Gore tags don't show up with the Comedy, Dark, etc. tags. They only appear on the story briefs, like on the author's profile page.
Why, I couldn't say -- they really should appear among the other tags.
1741202 Oh.
1738693
Thanks, glad you liked it, I certainly will!
1739249
Thanks, yeah, the editing's top-notch, and I'm glad it shows. We'll have to see what happens with Di and that letter
1738735
Oh no, you didn't... aw. Sorry about that. Nah, this is romance with all the naughty bits, Fimfiction's tagging system is a bit silly, like Jot said.
UH. Wow never thought that I would feel sorry for D.T.
Damn, she must feel like a real pile of shit right now.
1739249
The good (?) News is that Silvy doesn't seem as conniving as she could be.
She could have followed Diamond for proof.
I loved the ending, that letter, it will either mean, that Diamonds days of keeping secrets are over, or, Her relationship with Silver is over. anyway, cant wait for the next ch.
Took me forever to gather time to read this, it was worth the wait. Cannot wait for next chapter Nackte
1751905
Thanks, glad you've enjoyed it so far!
1760016
Ahh, thank you so much! It's unfortunate how much good literature gets ignored because of subject matter, I've come across fics that I would absolutely recommend to people as great reading - and sometimes do - but the graphic sex creates a bar that many people just aren't willing to move past.
You're also right about the benefits of writing fanfiction - having characters that will have immediate meaning outside of themselves is a huge benefit. Although it's complicated by the fact that you run into situations where you'd like to write a character a certain way or include extra details about them that can clash with the pre-existing idea that the reader has about them.
Anyway, thank you! Also, your OC is adorable!
Damn, that felt painful... Like a spear to my heart... Absolutely perfect! Emotions, scene, everything was executed perfectly! And I do mean EVERYTHING! Perfect fic! Please add another chapter!
1780705
Thanks a lot, I appreciate it! Work's already started on chapter 7!
Hm, I might be mistaken, but didn't Rarity say Tiara wasn't allowed to act like a brat for the sole purpose of being punished in one of the earlier chapters? Wouldn't that apply here? Though, it could also be an exception, seeing as they both were a "little" stressed.
Anyway, nice chapter. I just hope Di and Silvy will make up. Even though they're both bitches in the show, they're just too good friends to throw everything away.
Oh my goddess! The stress of waiting for another chapter is going to kill me! Did Silver Spoon follow Diamond to Rarity's? Did she see? What can her note mean?! Oh Luna this is good writing!
Oh wow... Just read the first six chapters. This story is very very good.
While it is very different this reminds me a lot of The Scootaloo Diaries (Was it perhaps an inspiration?)
The thing I never liked about that one is how darn repetitive it was, but this... You have thus far provided the reader with
a smoothly transitioning flow of events that has yet to stop moving forward. Sometimes letting a chain of events get stuck in a cycle
is good. But seriously, it gets down right boring if the cycle just keeps on going around in circles.
At first I was worried that I was going to have to deal with some never-ending struggle of an adolescent trying
to maintain two relationships. And while there is still a very slim possibility of that situation striking up again, I can't imagine
it being anything like what was happening in The Scootaloo Diaries.
1803843
I take it upon myself to respond to this. I hope my opinion is valid.
You are right that Diamond Tiara was acting like a brat, however... She was acting like a brat in the sense
that she was taking a rather immature approach to getting her point across. And her approach was probably
rather appropriate at the same time. For one, she was - understandably - very frustrated with everything that
had been going on around her. For two, she knew that she had to assert herself to make Rarity understand
the urgency; it's a lot like seeking sexual relief from your lover, only she was seeking punishment.
Keep in mind there is a huge difference between acting like a brat in hopes that you would get punished for
your misbehavior and doing what Diamond did. She was trying to show Rarity that she sincerely felt that she
deserved to be punished for a series of actions she had already taken and knew that she could not take back.
A rather simple example:
Being an immature brat: Diamond Tiara kicks over a vase right in front of Rarity so that she could be punished.
Being rational and mature: Diamond Tiara admits that she had accidentally knocked over a vase and feels that she should be punished for it.
1828237
You know, I've never actually read that, but I'll add it to my list - can't have enough highly-rated foalcon. Maybe it'll be my next big read now that I'm done with Romance Reports. I hear what you're saying about repetition, though, I've definitely run across fics with just that issue, and hopefully this one will avoid it!
I'm glad you're enjoying this, thanks for the praise!
1803843
I hope they can make up too, although what that would look like is definitely up to question. Also, thank you for the continuity check. I feel like the encounter in the latest chapter was more about accountability and punishment for her previous wrongdoing with messing up everything for Rarity - sorta like what ColtZero was getting at.
1817377
I know, sorry to put you through the wringer, there's nothing like getting into something in progress. But hey, on the brighter side, it's... about halfway through, as I'm planning it?
1828313
Okay, it's been a couple of days since I've read this chapter, and it's early morning, so I hope I remember it correctly. I know that diamond Tiara only did it because she felt she deserved to be punished. However, the first thing she did was misbehaving on purpose only to make Rarity angry, instead of talking about it with her. As I said, they were both stressed in that situation, so I guess Rarity and I can excuse that behaviour. Maybe I was just worried that it'd always go that way... Diamond's way. In the end she'd be getting what she wanted, which would be defying all that Rarity taught her.
Oh, how about this. I just said, Diamond felt she deserved to be punished and urged Rarity to carry it out. She shouldn't force Rarity like that to make that decision. They're still in a relationship, and Rarity needs to give her consent as well and not be forced to make decisions because of the heat of the moment.
well after the Humbolt incident it's no wonder Diamond became a bully. He never got the chance to rape her but he did use her and she suffered terrible redicule due to the rumors that something happened between them.
Also I see Diamond was always trying to grow up before her time, not really taking the time to enjoy foal-hood. I'm glad her dad is not an absentee parent just slightly negligent when it comes to discipline because of the one spanking incident.
and "It's over" doesnt bode well. Can't wait to read on