won't let me add this to my favorites list >:c but i just did a quick skim through, its pretty damn good so far if i may say so myself keep it up!!

I will never ever get tired of TwiLuna fics.

>>11379321137932

Agreed

I really like where this is going! Cant wait for next update!

I like what you're setting up here.

Anyways, cool story. Not a huge fan of TwiLuna, but will do.

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Oh god Celestia hinting at things is never good foreshadowing!

And>>11379321137932 NEVER ENOUGH!

Umm, if full power Alicorn magic causes dread and fear in all who witness it.  How does the Summer Sun celebration work where Celestia always raises the sun in front of a large crowd?  If you'll recall it even inspired a certain little filly to study magic

>>11402091140209

{HEADCANNON INBOUND}

When an Alicorn performs powerful magic like raising the sun or the moon, it causes dread and fear to those who are within close proximity, but also admiration and respect because, well, they're really powerful

There can never be enough twiluna and twilestia

Good work by the way   I'll be sure to follow.

Before I start reading, I want to know if this story ties in to your story The magic of Love at all?

Yay!  More Twiluna!  My favourite pairing that people actually write for!

... Nobody writes Twysalis...

Anyway, I like what you've done so far.  There are a few places where your phrasing of certain sentences comes out rather awkward, and several portions feel slightly rushed.  Not terribly rushed, but there are a couple places that I feel could've used just a bit more detail.  

There's also the bit with alicorn magic inspiring dread, but that's just a personal issue with my own headcanon.  You are, of course, entitled to your own thoughts on the subject, and if a little fear is the price of another great Twiluna fic, than I feel like I might just be robbing you.

Anyway, keep up the great work.  I can't wait for your next update.

>>11451001145100

Soft of

This is great so far. The only issue I have is that you have some unnecessary commas.

>>11482761148276 If you want a good Twysalis, I suggest How I learned to stop worrying and love the Changeling. It only has two chapters and hasn't updated in a while, but it's funny and the interaction between Twilight and Chrysalis is amazing

Reads the first chapter, favorites, sees new chapter five minutes later.

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Wow. first my other story is featured, then this one? I have only one thing to say;

TwiLuna.....HUZZAH!

Why are there no Luna emoticons?

>>11494251149425 Or Vinyl and Octavia either.

You've definitely worked on these chapters, they flow with far greater ease than before. Can't wait for the next one.

>>11495161149516

I knew you'd like them

>>11495301149530 Hell, I liked your story before, I'm definitely gonna like it when you improve it.

Me want more.

>>11494251149425

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Luna_apple.png

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Luna_lolface.png

>>11495161149516

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia.png

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia_O_O.png

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Vinyl_Scratch.png

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Vinyl_Scratch_lolface.png

Whoops, forgot to add actual comment. Great chapter. Though I have to ask... How does a mane like Luna's get knotted. It is the starry/flowing one isn't it?

>>11497191149719

[HEADCANNON INBOUND]

The mane is crafted and made from pure Alicorn magic, but it's not powerful so it doesn't cause fear, when a Princess thinks stressful thoughts, erotic thoughts or thoughts about a physical activity, the mane becomes knotted as if they were actually doing those activities, hence the reason the mane was knotted.

This has been a Headcannon announcement brought to you by Senoria~De~La~Nieve

>>11490371149037

Heh.  I've read it.  Twice.  The problem is that the authour has three featured in progress stories and is juggling them all about.  Updates are slow on all of them, but it's worth it.

>>11497191149719

How do I get those?!?!

>>11498221149822

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia_O_O.png

>>11498221149822  Copypasted from another comment that I got the information from:

"I Just Installed An Add-On For More Emoticons On FimFiction.net

It only works if you have Google Chrome or Firefox.

It's Called FiMFiction Enhancements 5 and it can be downloaded on Dropbox.com , but I forgot the link, Sorry

Hope It helps!"

Also found this link, and I remember using this website: http://userscripts.org/scripts/show/131623

You do need Chrome or Firefox though.

>>11492181149218 yay twiluna is right up there on my favs next to rainbow sparkle

Interesting idea: To make Nightmare Moon the voice of Luna's insecurities... of course, she always was, in the end, wasn't she?

nice work. And first post

I noticed 2 capitalization errors. The first was when Twilight waved at the cakes (unless she was actually waving at the baked goods).

The other was.     it'll be nice to spend some time with Twilight.

Other than that this was great.  Were you influenced by Sharing the Night? The star sight sure feels like it.

>>11505011150501

For that particular aspect yes I was influenced by Sharing The Night

>>11505061150506

I feel better now I'm not just imagining things.

>>11484661148466

How is it sort of?

>>>>11505481150548

I'm saying nothing, have another Rarity Wink Face

The sun claimed too much of the lad for her to see,

Should it be 'land' instead of 'lad' ?

>>11498561149856

Thanks!

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Luna_lolface.png

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png

Why didn't I ever look for these before?

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Twilight_Sparkle.png

Maybe I was too lazy.

Image: http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Spitfire_lazy.png

>>11506821150682

<_<

>_>

Yes.....

>>11507491150749

Man im loving this story!

Every TwiLuna I've read lately has NMM appearing at some point in it. I'm not saying that's a bad think (I think it adds a lot to the story usually) but I still think it's a weird trend I never noticed before.

Still loving the elements you've added to this.

Just one thing though. In that last paragraph, shouldn't it be 'Celestia spread her wings' rather than 'wigs'? Never thought she'd wear a wig.

I can't wait to read more

D'aww! Luna's so cute when she blushes!

MOAR!!!

At least Twilight can get a couple hours sleep before the fun starts.

she is gonna need it.

Can i get a yes yes yes yes yes yes yes?

Image: http://twilight.ponychan.net/chan/arch/src/130981456390.gif

Celestia totally knows what's going on

>>11556171155617

Future plot points include Shining Armor being a possessive brother, Celestia being a possessive sister, and a relationship struggle

>>11556471155647 Celestia and Shiny? Possessive? ... This i gotta see/read

Already updated? Just sitting here playing Command and Conquer and then get an emaol that it updated. Time to read!

>>11563491156349

Well enjoy it :3

I'm liking this pace as well as the changes.

>>11563631156363any better than the last three I bet I will

A few ponies watched her with a mixture of sock and awe

>>11564481156448

*RAGE* I was so careful!

You might wanna check it for typos before posting it. The typos are littered throughout this chapter.

>>11564851156485

Where are they? I shall hunt them down with the abilities of a bloodhound

>>11564771156477

Don't worry, I actually had a good laugh when I realised what I just read

town? t felt good to fly again,

go nd feel the air

yell of happiness, heard for mines around.

turning in a perfect ach

pants, her wins ached slightly

and one she was loathe to break.

she walked towards hr door and

I only skimmed through it a second time. So there might be more.

I did however enjoy the story. And the 'sock and awe' was hilarious.

Hey if you have twilight stronger than luna can she move the moon?

Good stuff, good stuff.

OP Twilight is destroy Twilight.

Still liking this story, that makes me wish we could like stories on a chapter by chapter basis, I feel it would be better than lots of I like this comments leaving the comments section clear for more in depth responses and (constructive) criticism. For example you missed a period and an i in it in the beginning section.

In the second section you missed a h in the (at the very end of the section)

In the third section an e in her (when Twilight's opening her door) when telling Luna her plans for the day it says "she sad" not "she said" when Luna tells Twilight she thinks she could do the fire spell there it says se not she said and at the very end an i in is.

Wow that's the first time I've ever gone on a correction spree.

Despite all this^ I enjoyed this chapter immensely and didn't find ^ distracting, also IN BEFORE ALACORN TWILIGHT, I mean she's more powerful than Luna

Commenting sucks on mobile devices.

The daaaaawwww's have been doubled! Ps love your work.

I think I've been reading this on fanfiction, correct?

>>11566561156656 Alicorn Twilight? Nah, I won't go that far. Not in this story anyway. I'll go on a correcting spree myself right now.

>>11566661156666 Glad you're enjoying it

>>11566691156669 Yes you have been reading this on Fanfiction.net, I was told to migrate here and operate this and my Fanfiction.net account if I wanted more fans, because I like to entertain people

>>11566861156686

Not in this story huh, well then looks like I'll have to stay tuned*pushes watch button*

>>11567691156769 My plan to gain watchers is 2/3 complete >:3

Please leave in the Sock and Awe, that must become a new meme!

So, Twilight, you said you was going for a walk in the woods

Should be were.

>>11575751157575

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I enjoy the criticism because it makes me better, but I keep. Getting. Rid. Of. Typos. And it's like they breed!

But seriously thanks for the constructive criticism

>>11576241157624 Haha no problem. I know the feeling

>>11576511157651

They just....

Dont.....

STOP....

More please?

Typos happen man. Don't get discouraged. All in all the story is great so far. And as long as you know the word It's supposed to be, typos arent that big a deal

Damn it, I read chapter 1, and you wrote three more! I was pretty sure that this was impossible. Seems shady, I'll be watching you, you will NOT get away just like that!

>>11482761148276 We need more (INSERT PONY HERE)salis, and that's a fact.

>>11597921159792

Whenever I see someone who has decided to watch me:

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>>11598131159813

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Well, I HAD planned on having a list of every typo... Then I saw I've been beaten to it be various other people. Oh, well! More praise for you, then! I love the story, and the writing itself is solid except for those typos. But, I understand those evil, evil things so... One day I will destroy ALL TYPOS FOREVER.

Also,

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Can't wait for more!

So awesome!

>>11564481156448

Them ponies sure do love their socks

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Oddly, I didn't really notice the typos.  The flow to this chapter was really THAT good.

MOAR!!!

This has potential for cute story

Eagerly awaiting another chapter

I just hope this story is actually continued soon, all the stories I like end up getting put on hiatus or killed.

I like the story so far. I'll be favoriting it in just a moment, there's just a few issues I wanted to bring up first. You seem to have a bit of a comma fetish (My best friend has the same problem in his writing) and use them in place of periods in a lot of places. I'll give you an example from this chapter:

Many ponies, until recently, thought of her as a shut in, socially awkward princess, she never went anywhere her sister went, and it wasn't until the Royal Court made an official complaint to her sister that a Ruler of Equestria must be able to socialize with the ponies under their command.

This should really be two separate sentences. It should read:

Many ponies, until recently, thought of her as a shut in, socially awkward princess. She never went anywhere her sister went, and it wasn't until the Royal Court made an official complaint to her sister that a Ruler of Equestria must be able to socialize with the ponies under their command.

Otherwise, it's a bit confusing and slightly difficult to follow. Also, the above example is incomplete. It should probably read, when finished:

Many ponies, until recently, thought of her as a shut in, socially awkward princess. She never went anywhere her sister went, and it wasn't until the Royal Court made an official complaint to her sister that a Ruler of Equestria must be able to socialize with the ponies under their command that she went out at all.

And...um...this one really bothered me.

Spike waved a hoof in front of her eyes, but they kept skimming over the page, so he rolled his eyes and went back to sleep, his eyes closing as soon as they hit the pillow.

Spike waved a hoof in front of her eyes,

Spike waved a hoof

wat

so he rolled his eyes and went back to sleep, his eyes closing as soon as they hit the pillow.

his eyes closing as soon as they hit the pillow.

WAT

Nicely done.

>>11707641170764

Thank you

there is an instance of feet instead of hooves

"Yeah sure, it's been too long since we've seen a good magic show" Pinkie Pie said excitedly, and Luna smiled.

So, what happened to you no less than a minute ago? You know, your best friend creating blue fire using her magic? That isn't a magic show?

>>11708451170845

You hush and let Pinkie be random

And she was referencing Twi as well

>>11709011170901

Whatever you say....

>>11709201170920

(INB4 COMMENTS ABOUT CONTINUITY ERRORS)

>>11709381170938

...wut

>>11709531170953

Lots if references to hands.

Beautiful chapter, much love.

I must say that was Very Beautiful.

i can't wait to see more.

Thank You.

>>11710731171073

who is this down thumber.. i wish to find this person...

"She felt happy."

Tragedy striking in 3... 2... 1...