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Konseiga


Just an aspiring writer. Not really anything special.

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Twilight finds herself enthralled by Princess Luna and everything she represents. As Celestia's pride and joy, Twilight struggles to repress these feelings. But an old and well-known evil surfaces again at the worst time. Can Twilight fight off the spectres of the past?

Chapters (15)
Comments ( 312 )

In Luna Eclipsed, when Luna first arrived all the Ponyville citizens bowed down immediately but Twilight was obviously not thinking of curtsing but just wanted to go over to the Princess. If it were not for Spike pulling her, she wouldn't have bowed, I think:twilightsmile:

[edit] that's why I found the "instincts screaming for her to bow" line weird.

Looks very nice i would like to see where this goes

Seems great, can't wait for more. :twilightsheepish:

I like this chapter the best out of all of them so far Keep it up :twilightsheepish:

Cant wait to read more! its really good so far keep it up

Oh, man. This is going to be so good. Keep up the great work!

There were a few grammatical errors (which I can't be arsed to point out right now), but otherwise it's interesting so far :pinkiehappy:

I am number five! Also, looks interesting. I have a thing for shipping fanfics, but no clopfics.

Nice work with this, can't wait for more chapters.

Must see more Luna Sparkle! So cute!!!:rainbowkiss::pinkiehappy::trollestia::moustache:

hey look im commenting on your story while talking to you:derpyderp2:

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TwiLuna. There is a group dedicated to those stories, consider joining. This story will be added there soon.

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Very interesting story. Tracking. :twilightsmile:

Drunk Luna? Check. Drunk Twilight? Check. Evil voice in head plotting world domination? Check. Looking forward to the next chapter!

Good plot and good story telling. Like that there is a good mix of humor to offset the darker aspects of the story. :twilightsmile: Faving and liking this story! Has been added to the TwiLuna group. :twilightsmile:

I saw one or so minor errors, but nothing that really detracts from the story. I may see if I can spot them again later.

I'm kinda startled that the voice isn't taking advantge of Twilight's afection for Luna you know using it as further motivation to asend to the top of the heap as it were if Twilight thinks that she can't be with Luna do to reasons of status raising her status could fix that issue.

How do stories get featured in the five slot box at the top of the page?:rainbowhuh:

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Give it some time. I think it's just too focused on its current goal to think of a new plan just yet.

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Has to do with views so far as I can tell, though there may be other factors. And it seems stories only get up there once.

Hat

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Someone in the chat told me it puts up new stories that have had an influx of positive ratings and views in a certain amount of time.
I'm only on the second chapter but I thought it was really good timing when you put in the letter from Twilight.
Edit: Read up to current point, great story.

"…Applejack and Rainbow Dash got into an arm wrestling competition, which was quickly sabotaged by Luna and Twilight as the floated feathers from Luna’s wings and tickled the underside of the competitor’s arms."

Should be 'they'.

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Stick around. You'll see what happens.
*evil cackle*

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Fix'd. Thank ye kindly.

Luna has hands? Whose are they?

:trollestia:

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I don't know what you're talking about. :moustache:
(Fixed. Holy crap, how did I not see that?)

More evil plans! Woooohoooo.

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Tch. I should just hire you as my beta reader/editor.
Thanks for pointing this stuff out.

starts reading this
"“That she and I put enchantments upon our necklaces. We call it “Royal Glamor”. It allows us to reflect the power we hold inside us.”"
finishes reading this

and this turns on

sorry is just Chekhov's Gun Alert

Am I the only one who reads the villain's voice in George Takei's voice? No idea why, but I do.

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I will think about it, though it would be best to have at least one other person looking over it. I have lots of time right now as a number of big things in school have been finished, but that could change depending upon how the work load for classes goes.

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I didn't proofread chapter 2 before I posted it, so yeah, there's bound to be more errors in that particular one than the others.

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*grumble*
You could have at least PM'd these to me, instead of posting them where the world could see them...
:ajsleepy:

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Posses, (PAH-sees) n.
1. Groups of homies.
Yo, me and my boy J-Shawn got our posses together and shot up dem m*****f*****s.

Hmmm, an interesting premise. It would seem that not only is Twilight drawn to Luna, but that something once belonging to the Princess of the Night is drawn to Twilight in return.

I would very much like to see where this goes :pinkiehappy: .

The plot thickens. Good thing Twi has Spike there to take care of her when strange entities may or may not be siphoning off her magic power :rainbowderp: .

And so the saga of Nurse Luna begins~
:rainbowwild:

It would take an entity like that to appreciate Discord's work :facehoof: . Oh well, I'm keeping my hooves crossed that Twi's friendship remains intact and undisturbed! :pinkiehappy:

While I was expecting drunk Luna to slip back into the Old Equestrian Tongue, she instead mocked Celestia, which I must admit did prove to be just as amusing, if not even more so :trollestia: .

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You assume many people read comments that are not replies to their own. Usually they do not seem to, or at least not before commenting themselves.

I sent them in a PM and will be deleting the posts later (sooner if you let me know it arrived and was not screwed up... there does not seem to be a preview feature for them which is part of why I prefer comments).

EDIT: Deleted those posts. Ze secret is safe.

Klue Jim, Konseiga true I guess i should give it some time to think on a larger perspective right now it seems to be just thinking short term.

257138if I remember correctly (could be wrong) I think that she doesn't even bow for Celestia usually. ...besides that scene was more like cowering LOL

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Yep, my impression is it would be more accurate to say "she knew she ought to be bowing" than that she felt an instictive need to do so.

... Luna has never eaten a sammich... WHAT HAS TROLLESTIA DONE!

Mean-pants sure had her day ruined by that which she thought was useless. :trollestia:

But now she is angry and scarier. :twilightoops:

umadshadow? :trollestia:

I can has Moar?
:unsuresweetie:

Twilight and Luna are too cute together! :twilightblush:

This update is very interesting...

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Interesting how? Good interesting or bad interesting?

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Interesting good. It was a good amount of relationship development. The twenty questions bit could have been a bit longer, but I thought it was a nice touch.

Overall, it was a good development chapter. :pinkiehappy:

Keep the updates coming!

As far as I am concerned, there are never enough Twilight/Luna stories out there.

Aww, is little Nightmare Moon upset because she can't have things her way?

...How did she even get inside of Twilight anyway?... that sounds wrong for some many reasons it's funny.

A Twiluna that I was unaware of?! Blasphemy! Aw... its to late to read it now... gonna read it first thing when I get back from school tomorrow! <3

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