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The English Channel splashing around the landing craft. Bullets whizzing past and boys clutching their guns. Doors lowering. Lead meeting flesh. Blood spraying and water running red. Take the beach -- take the beach! Hand-to-hand combat and explosions. Darkness and then light. How did he get here...?
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Not bad, not bad at all. Very entertaining, and a fun read. I give you a wub.
Wow, now thats a new take on WW2 and ponies. It seems slightly rushed but I definately enjoyed it. Fave and thumbs up for sure
It was pretty good, nice grammar and spelling. Premise was interesting too. One thing that I have to say though.
Back then, a majority of Germans did actually support Hitler, he was so charismatic that he actually had most of them pretty much brainwashed. Even later in the war when they were losing, a lot of them still supported him.
And Hitler actually did get Germany out of a depression by making a system where everyone had a job. By 1937 I want to say, there were no jobless people in Germany. Those were the only problems that I had with this story.
Ah, the humanity of it all, the meekest of the bunch being taught to praise the deaths of his fellow human beings, who he considers less than dirt, only to feel the emotions of losing a friend, who was once his enemy.
Bravo, sir. I applaud you, and you have earned a like, fave, and watch!
You heart twisting bastard. You really ripped my heart out, and for that, this story is PERFECT! Though, Ryan was a bit thick minded with his plans, I mean, HELLO! WAR GOING ON, he should have held Fredrick down and at least LOOK like hes killin' em....okay, now its just my aching heart talkin'
number two(if there is going to be)needs to be longer if its 1 chapter long.
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It's a one-shot. There's only one chapter.
1629131
That was the intention. I'm somewhat glad to see that it worked.
1629040
Crap. Stupid history books...lying and giving misinformation...
Thanks for informing me, though.
that was very good you get a like from me
1629115
Huzzah! Glad you liked it!
GOD DAMNIT I CRIED! DO YOU HAVE ANY IDEA HOW HARD IT IS TO MAKE ME CRY?!
This is a great story!
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That was the idea when I wrote this. I'm somewhat glad it worked.
Nice, I'm glad for all the fillers, unlike T.T.D this
actually made sense, and was a good read.
I enjoyed the setting, and liked how lancer got owned
by the English channel. (GO BRITTEN)
Also, good work, the whole 'I'm in EQUESTRIA' thing
needs some work, but the rest is plausible.
Also, I did not cry, because I am heartless when it comes
to other peoples pain.
Ed
1632310
Why did I have a feeling it wouldn't have an effect on you?
1632322
Hmm, no bad break up...
Dead ex girlfriend...
Most things pass through me.
Apart from her.
Ed
Short and fast, but a touchign story!
why not make a sequal?
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With the way it ended, I don't really think a sequel is possible.
1633337
you could just send the Ryan back to equestria
1633449
As old as he is at the end? I'm not sure.
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well i or we want to see the reactions of the ponies when Frederick died shortly after and stuff lol
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I'm afraid I didn't plan on someone wanting a sequel. Sorry.
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oh ok, but if you change your mind, notify me so i could read it
1633499
Sure.
1629509 you bastard why did you kill him. i dont even want to know what the main six reaction would be two that and i probably just gave you an idea didn't i but still you bastard!
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I'm sorry, that's just how I wrote it.
1634923 i got most of it out of me it was good though im still sad though
Only issue I have, is that if Celestia had any clue to what she pulled them out of (And she would have to), then she had to know that sending both back would be pretty close to a death sentence.
"I'm going to teach both of you a lesson in friendship. Then, I'm going to send both of you straight back into the middle of the war, which is almost certainly going to lead to either one, or both, of your deaths. In fact, if one of you survive, you're going to be in a worse state of mind for having been here, mourning over a dead friend, instead of moving on."
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Now that I think about it, that does sound a little absurd. Thanks for actually paying attention.
Sorry I didn't get to this earlier, Baglez.
I read it, and I have to say, I like it. I'd elaborate more, but I'm sort of short on time here.
Have an upvote!
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Glad to see you're still alive, bro!
Thanks.
Dang...that got me in the feels...nice work man.
2014164
Thank you very much, kind person.
*sniff* *sniff* that.... that's some emotional stuff right there.... I was really starting to enjoy the two of them getting along, but that ending.... It's so... so... so... *bawls.*
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Hiya Dances. I'm reviewing your story on behalf of the Good Grammar Directory, a comprehensive directory of grammatically correct stories on FIMFiction. Unfortunately, your story doesn't (currently) meet our standards. Fortunately, it's possible to fix your grammatical errors, make your story more readable, and have your story added to the Directory. So here we go.
It's means "It is" or perhaps "It has". If you want to show ownership, the word is its.
It's easy to learn how to use the right "its" once you've learned its rules.
Okay, two things. First of all, "mexican" isn't a word. It's Mexican. Second, corporal is not being used as a proper noun in this case, so you shouldn't capitalize it. It's his job. Would you say "a Mexican-looking Plumber"? Of course not.
Again, same issue.
Yeah. I think you can sense a pattern here.
Okay, not a grammar thing, but this is bullshit. They would have known long before then that they were invading Normandy.
Let me know if you fix these issues (except for the factual one. That's fine, I'm not gonna force you to edit the actual plot of your story) and I'll add your story into the Directory.
south park refrence
That was not heresy.