• Member Since 11th Mar, 2012
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Crysis Commander


You do you the best you can do.

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No matter how high a pegasus flies, they are bound to fall one way or another. For some, the fall is far less literal than others. Sometimes a pony can fall on the inside.

Such can be said for Spitfire who, after a botched routine, thinks that perhaps her days as the Wonderbolts captain are numbered.

Fluttershy sets out to prove her otherwise.

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Comments ( 4 )

I loved it, it was adorable, we don't get to see many fluttershy and spitfire interactions

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So true, damn shame there aren't more stories like this.

Sometimes it's always best to take a step back just to relax yourself and clear your mind.

This has been a nice little read, one quite surprising in being a SoL focused on Spitfire. I don’t think I have seen that done before, but it works really well, especially when combined with a more assertive Fluttershy. The pacing, grammar and spelling were fairly solid as well, with my only nitpick being that rather than a single hyphen, a double hyphen (--) or an em dash (—) should be used to indicate a dialogue line being cut off abruptly. But that’s really just a tiny complaint. Thank you for this story!

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