I... I dont even know where this came from...

Enjoy and feel free to rape it whit some constructive criticism

that was a pain to read. Good concept, but there was too much focus on the fact that she basically forgot everything, and not enough on the fact everypony is dead.

if you want to do the whole "concussed into forgetting everything" then she build up a vocabulary far more quickly. I wanted to tear my eyeballs out every time you said "Thinking thing".

I am so confused and so am I. Have a green thumb anyway.

Thinking thing

DAFUQ

It was... so sad...

This was surprisingly funny for me to read. Absurdities make me laugh, in which if you were going for something serious you failed. As far as the premise goes, since it was tagged as random I treated it as such. It didn’t seem very dark if you meant the ending of the story. But I can see why you added the tag in itself. Of course, it felt relatively rushed considering how hard it would be for one to remember and then suddenly throwing in that ending there. I had a few problems with the grammar at the beginning, though if it was intentional or not I can’t say. I’m not exactly a grammar Nazi.

All in all, it was…interesting to say the most and would certainly cause headaches at the beginning.

>>10935081093508 yea i guess. im no good at grammar and like i said: random idea is random

i have to admit it was rushed but i wanted it to be published before i wet to bed so yea

im glad you actually liked it though

>>10935741093574 No problem.

You know...this could make for a really good story if you fleshed it out a bit.

But as you said, it was random and you just wanted to get it out there. Still, from what you did write. This intrigued me on a deeper level that it started giving me an idea. Blah. But never mind that.

Still, I liked it.

>>10936311093631 you know i honestly had an idea about it aswell... I may make something out of thit but itll have to get in line whit the other 20 fic ideas i have

>>10936971093697 You have a lot of ideas. But which ones are closer to realization? Or you just haven't had time to work on your ideas?

>>10937181093718 you have no idea

some are just ideas that could work but im not very fond of them, say a oneabout sparkler. Then thres a hunger games one but im just over that phase. Now im working on a harry potter style one... not to mention my existibg story... than theres one that im just a bitstuck on... then one that needs editing but i cant be arsed... The list goes on ferevah...

>>10937861093786 Well, you should just pour your effort into one story instead of scattering yourself about. You'll be less productive that way. Work on the one story that has most of your attention and keep working on it. Because I know how when you have many ideas and you want to tackle them all at once. But that ends up being overwhelming. You know, if you need some help or anything. I could try and help you out.

Also, you should just focus on one to two stories. Two, if you can manage both and not feel overwhelmed.

>>10938381093838 yea thats what ive been trying to do but being me when ideas are coming out of everywhere (and i sereously mean everywhere(i see a movie: idea! I see an add:idea! I see a bird:idea!!!)) its kinda hard being a multitasker helps i guess... I lack discipline when it comes to these things

thans for the offer though if i everr need some help ill drop you a pm but now... Off to sleep