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No real plot.. just clop, which doesn't make for a good fiction.
'A/N: This was written for the Equestria After Dark speedclop writing challenge, but I totally failed since I was only supposed to write for 69 minutes, but this took me a couple of hours to write. It contains clop! I’ve never written anything and posted it on the internet before, and I’ve never written fan fiction or clop fiction at all. But I figured this speedclop event was a good place for me to start, since low quality content is sort of expected already, so mine might not seem so bad. Anyway, here’s my attempt. I hope you like it!
Prompt: A Pony Swapping Sexes
This story takes place directly after the events of “Boast Busters.”'
That kills the mood before it's even set. Also, in your story description you should have had that it was part of a speedclop writing challenge, not in the beginning of the story. At most, it should have come at the end; where author's notes belong. Also, the reader doesn't care if this is your first story, or that you thought this would be a good idea on how to start writing. Again, if you feel it nessacary to put that in, then it should be in the author's note at the end of the fiction.
Technically, a mare growing a member doesn't equate to swapping sexes. They'd be in between a mare and stallion; like she-males in real life.
Don't tell us that it takes place right after Boast Busters, and don't tell us before the story even begins. Show us in the story. Have Trixie still thinking about her cart, which was basically her home. Have Twilight still a little indifferent to Trixie. Something that shows us instead of telling us.
I'm reading this story because of the blunt description. Trixie is grateful, so they have sex! sounds hilarious!
This was alright, but I have to agree with zaczac. It could be so much better.
However, the "Dick magic!" line was hilarious.
I'm not going to lie, that was pretty damn awesome. My favorite part was "DICK MAGIC"! You get a like from me
"The sexual pleasure had been doubled."
THE FUN HAS BEEN DOUBLED!
Also, "Trixie's true magic... DICK MAGIC"
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Meh.
1 Like for u.
I'm liking this, though i'm not entirely sure why. Oh well.
I've also finally found a use for this:
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So it's a story about Trixie getting stoned and having sex with the first mare she meets afterwards.
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Typical.
"Trixie now had a penis."
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After twelve in development, hopefully it was the wait.
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Thanks for all the tips! I think I'll go work on that right now.
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Hahaha!
Ah... puns.
Man, if I'd thought of that while I was still writing, that totally would've been mentioned at some point.
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It's a magic trick AND the world's largest erection! Dick mages can do some cool stuff.
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Thanks! Your feedback means a lot!
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Thanks so much! Comments like this have pretty much convinced me to keep writing.
1072797 Not a problem, I love seeing new writers. Also, you might find a lot more help over here; School for New Writers. Hope to see you there.
There are two bits in this I love. The first paragraph and "That is how the Great and Powerful Trixie rests". You are one of the few writers who keeps her in character, clop aside.
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Aw, thanks! I try. 
Lulz at the penis monster!
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Good, that's what I was going for!
I expexted this to be totally shameless, and it was.
You have a like for the "dick magic" line. Probably because it's almost plausable.
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I'm not entirely sure if that's a compliment, but I'll take it as one. So thank you!
Oh dear...
There are not enough WTF gif. images to properly describe this fanfic.
You get a Magnum the Critic Rating of:
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I imagine that there's even weirder stuff yet to come!
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The doppler effect.
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Oh yeah, maybe I should change the font color to show the red shift and blue shift.
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I like the way you think!
Okay. A giant penis monster. Should I be questioning the psychological stability of the author?
1104291 Don't worry, I'm as psychologically stable as Pinkie Pie!
uhh what?
1128561 That's exactly what I was thinking the entire time I was writing this!
1135467 I meant to imply that the spell accelerated aging, and that it didn't just make the target bigger. Looking back at it now, I can see why you'd be confused, since I really didn't make that clear at all.
I'll probably fix that soon. Thanks for the help!
Now this is turning into a troll fic.
For some reason this comes to mind:
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1135837 Huh. You're kinda right. I hadn't even noticed that while I was writing that.
Seeing as the main conflict has been resolved, and I'm pretty much out of ideas for where to go with this, I might finish it up soon before it gets any worse.
1136377 I don't even understand what's going on in that picture, but it does seem to match my story quite nicely.
Boner. That is all
1144078 Thank you. Strangely enough, I actually find that encouraging.
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It felt like a normal story... which quickly turned into RenaissanceBrony(tm) signature weird shit.
1152081 Whoa! I've never seen my name Trademarked before. That's pretty awesome.
I'll have to see what I can do to actually Trademark it.
Buck you.
1209233 Hahaha
Thanks for reading!
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1209296 I wasn't kidding. Buck you.
1209393 Exactly.
1210796 I wasn't kidding either. Thanks!
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Lol, you mad, dude?