Abadawhaaaaat? Uncle? That's a new one.

Woohoo, two updates in a day.  (nevermind how short one was.)

I never knew Celestia was such a huge bitch. Neat!

Oh, and you got a bit of an italics problem there.

>>10829021082902

Thanks, I fixed it.

MAKE THEM LONGER !!!

...

Wait, is the Princess loosing her colors ?

“The contrast in size makes thine flank appear quite copious," Burn.

>>10841561084156

>>10829021082902

A magic migraine mixed with a concussion makes anypony grumpy.  Hopefully, I conveyed her foggy and inattentive POV mixed with agony that she couldn't show.  Since she lost to Chrysalis any sign of weakness would seriously harm her remaining authority.

Say what?

It's a very interesting story.

And I'll keep reading the updated chapters.

Nice try.

Interesting... very interesting.  Could the power of the Sun be moving to a new holder? IIRC, Celestia was the original holder of the Elements of Harmony; now the Elements have new Bearers, possibly her other powers must be handed over too. If so, it is something that I'm sure will have consequences, severe consequences, for the Mane 6.

wow

thought of morality

I think you meant mortality. Other than that, nice chapter!

>>11179341117934

thanks for the typo catch, fixed now.

... Really? Thousands of years of politicking, and _that_ is how she breaks the news? She must still be in shock - there is no way that _that_ came from the mind of a perfectly rational Celestia.

I assure you there would be some more surprise in my reaction most of the time, but apparently it turned 2am a while ago, so fatigue is somewhat suppressing that.

Anyway, having managed to catch up in one sitting, I now look forward to seeing more. But first - sleep.

Luna was wearing that smile again.

Wow.. A strong ending of this chapter..

Athough I don't know what is "that" smile exactly..

I'll keep reading!

I wonder if Luna has been waiting... maybe for a millennia... for all of Celestia's sins (mostly of omission or good intentions leading you-know-where) to come home to roost.

Did *not* expect that tag set from that description. TO THE WATCH LATER PILE!

Haha, I was like that the first time I was anaesthetized- apparently I was ranting on about coconuts

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Anyway, this is getting veeeeeeeery interesting...

>>11876851187685

Anyone who's had to go through a root canal and getting a crown should find this chapter familiar.  For those of you who are not familiar with this procedure, keep brushing.

>>11877291187729

Colgate approves

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Back in the "Featured" box.

http://flutteryay.com/

nice story

"He was the black sheep of the family."

Ba Dum Tss!

The bit with the doctor at the beginning had me smirking. I love how quick you put out these chapters!

hahahahaha flower, flour I get it (I think same pronunciation?) another lovely chapter with a painful cliff hanger. However I know the next chapter would be released in two days or so so I can wait

I checked chapter3-Luna again.

That smile may be a "I'm going to make a joke" smile or some cruel or grim smile.

Both smile in this situation makes me chilly.

Waiting for next chapter ^^

>>11928941192894

It is intended to be the "I made a jest" smile.  Should I change it to make it clearer?

>>11930571193057

You mean "That" smile which Luna wear at the end of chapter4-Celestia?

Thanks. You don't need to change.

I just wondered  what kind of smile she wear when she start to tell Twilight "black history".

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Faved for Grogar. Can't wait for more.

People always talking about being groggy/acting silly whatever while under anaesthesia but nothing like that happened when I got my wisdom teeth out. I was just, out like a light and a bit foggy headed(and sore) when I woke up.  

*continues reading*

"Yes, we did.  Despite the many battles you've fought in the last two years, you are a child of peace Twilight.  You never had to fear dragons strafing your village with flames and then eating the survivors as they fled.  You never had to face a platoon of armed and armored griffons bent on tearing your city from the sky itself.  If you hear enough screams and smell enough blood, you will find that there are things which...There are things you think you cannot and must not do.  You will find that you were wrong."  

Probably the best bit of exposition in this story so far.  Twilight is looking back at a savage time of kill-or-be-killed, enslave-or-be-enslaved with a modern pony's refined morality, something that simply did not apply and had no relevance back then.

Apparently, Celestia doesn't see the need to explain the theory of the closed-loop universe to Twilight Sparkle at this point.

So, it appears that the working theory is that Chrysylis damaged Celestia's horn during their duel? It's possible and it would certainly explain the dysfunction of her magic as Unicorns and Alicorns use their horns the way human mages in the Potterverse use wands - as power channels and foci.  However, that wouldn't explain Celestia's certainty that she is no longer divine in nature.  That could only happen if that power had been given to someone else and...

And I really think that the time has come for someone to talk to Discord about his discoveries.

Cool stories, Celly. Tell them again?

me and Luna

>>12136391213639

Fixed, thanks for the catch.

>>12136531213653 Wow that was fast

To be honest, when I read the word gobsmacked, i laughed. I never heard the word before and it just made me laugh.

Well fuck... Celestia is going to die

Nice chapter :D

That cow plot idea is blowing my mind

I really like the "World's Myths and Fantasies" angle you're taking with this.

And look forward to the next installment of your tale!

i hope luna and twilight's relationship gets fixed

>>12176421217642

Hur Hur Hur, he said cow plot.

Ye gods, my jokes are as bad as Luna's

My eye has been captured.

This is going to be good, alright.

Before i read this what are the pairings?

>>12258321225832

Pairings?  As in shipping?  There is some light Twiluna, no clop.

Wow!

Really good chapter.

The dialog between Twilight and Luna is pretty sad..

And the reaction of Luna.. The words are awesome. (and a bit shock)

Interesting fiction, GJ!

Incoming night court shit storm in 3... 2... 1...

The background settings are really interesting and legit.

Luna rumbled. ”Do you dare call modern Equestria an empire? I have CO-RULED an empire! I have ORDERED my country to spread! I have ORDERED legions to march, and fly, and witch-leap! I have ORDERED non-ponies enslaved or slaughtered! I have LAUGHED on battlefields and DRUNK to massacres! Thanks to the infinite wisdom gained through ages by my sister Celestia, Equestria is no longer an empire! We are also no longer as stupid and cruel and vain as we were in your beloved good old times, King Ukko!”

From chapter 6 of a nice advanture fiction "Under the Northern Lights"

Back to this fiction, it looks like Luna need to make it up for what they did herself (That's a good  and mercy situation is the past but may be a cruel thing in the present).

However, it will be interesting for us to read what will happen.

For Equestria, Celestia was sick, the sunlight was limited. And Luna wanted to free slaves. Many ponies may be scared.

For Luna, she changed a form. Not a cutie young innocent sister but a stronger ruler.

For Twilight, she need to find a way to save her mentor.

This is an interesting story. Love and fav. GJ!

>>12296951229695

Thanks a ton, I always look forward to your comments.  It's great to know that folks are really liking this story,

derp, derp, derp derpy derp

>>12300581230058

Well, maybe not all the comments are constructive.

This is going to get very, very ugly, very quickly.  Who could have guessed that Discord could have so much influence even whilst petrified?

Oh shit.. OOHHHH shit. OOOHHHH-

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Twi, this is a bad idea.

This isn't going to end well...

Oh fuck, Twilight don't do what I think you're going to do.

I'm not sure if I'll read this entirely or not, but...

“Well, I shan’t be leaving you in the throne room to add colorful commentary to every ruling we make.”

Had Discord still had his powers, I'm sure he'd make this less figurative and more literal.

Glorious. Discord, you magnificent bastard, I salute you.

I have to say I LIKE where this is going, I've always had a love of stories were characters who display such massive amounts of hubris and/or arrogance get bitten in the ass HARD by it, possibly because I find those traits so infuriating and disgusting in most characters. There are exceptions to this of course (like a character manages to still be likeable, fun to watch, and their hubris and/or arrogance does cause them problems quite a few times [Ex:Doctor Who], or a character who tends to act full of themselves and arrogant to mask their insecurities), but for the most part the kind of blatant "matter of fact" hubris and/or arrogance displayed by Celestia (I couldn't possibly be unaware of the existence of any other gods, and I'd rather try to erase my "unpleasant" actions and/or morally abominable ones from history then try to correct them), and Twilight (Of course it will be perfectly safe and no problem going to Tartarus, getting in, finding Grogar, and convincing him to help the student of the god who IMPRISONED HIM AND ENSLAVED AND CURSED HIS PEOPLE yes absolutely NOTHING could go wrong with that and Celestia will be ever so proud of me for doing this outrageously stupid thing) are firmly in "they had it coming" territory with me.

Personally I'm hoping that when Twilight eventually finds everything about the past out it will force her to completely reexamine her world view and her opinions on Celestia, Discord, ex.....

Keep up the good work!

Dat bell magic concept.

Daaaaamn.

I understand that Twilight can't become an immortal, so I hope that Twilight eventually learns other kinds of magic...

Chrysalis <--> Discord <--> Cadance

I fell from my chair :D

(Celestia did not know the relationship of Chrysalis/Discord, but she may know Cadance/Discord)

Twilight made a dangerous decision to ask a fallen god whom was imprisoned by Celestia/Luna to seek the information to cure Celestia.

Just because she's embarrased to ask Cadance or Luna (although the later one might do everything if Twilight want).

But it is necessary, this fiction tags "Advanture".

GJ and keep writing!

"So, the Grogar info he led Twilight to yielded this?

"Sigh.  Arrogance, pure uncut hubris.  It was almost too predictable for Discord's taste, but perhaps he could liven this up at the same time as the matter with Luna.

"More than enough time to accomplish my mission, she thought with a touch of pride."

Discord, Cadance, and Chrysalis, huh?

I don't see the family resemblance. Maybe they're adopted.

wait wait wait so where does celestia fit into all this and who is the mother...

I'd like to say this is OOC for Twilight, but considering the pressure she's under, crazy ideas tend to rather IC.

I expect Tartarus will teach her some humility, and she will probably need help to get out... On the other hand, she may not exactly be a complete damsel in distress.  Discord seems impressed, and he should know better than most what she's really capable of when she 'forgets her limitations'.

Yeah, if Twilight actually goes crazy, (a possibility given the stress she's under), Grogar could be in for a nasty surprise. Of course, then dealing with whatever she's screwed up in Tartarus (or released from Tartarus) will be an issue in itself.

Tune up for next time when we will see what happens when you unbound The Architects of Reality from their prison.

>>12300011230001

You are really welcome.

It brings me tons of fun to read your fiction.

Your fiction is a bit like a SLG game.

And this is special one.

4 main characters acted in every scenario.

For example: In chapter 4.

Celestia's turn: a. Rest and under medical care  b. Watch Twilight fight with Luna  c. Tell Twilight some background story

Twilight's turn: a. Have a fight with Luna and kiss goodbye. b. Go to the library

Luna's turn:    a. Thinking about what's wrong b. Cry after the fight with Twilight and the kissgoodbye c. Transformation and declare her decision

Discord's turn: a. Tell readers that Shining Armor dated with both his daughters. b. Indirectly push Twilight to go to Tartarus for answers.

It's interesting, 3 players and 1 observer? GJ and MOAR!

Discord=best narrator ebay!

Five pinkies if you make him narrator

four pinkies for now

So is Celestia going to die or she thinking that since she didn't defeat the changeling queen. She thinks her god-like powers are gone, but they're not.  

"Touch of TwiLuna shipping."

Sorry, but that moved this story down a few notches in my reading list. Frankly, though, still pretty high up. I just hate Alicorn ships.

all that is happening to the Noble ponies

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>>12563521256352

So far, the shipping appears to be confined to conflicted feelings of mutual respect, in the same way one might feel attracted to a particularly loyal supporter, or a beloved public figure. In fact, I think that describes the nature of the "ship" perfectly.

>>12563521256352

NP.  That's why I put that in the description, no unpleasant surprises for anyone.

wow your development of the story astounds me

I'm sure that Discord is loving all the chaos that he is causing, even though all he's really been doing is dropping poison into various individuals' minds.  I'm still not certain that everything that has happened is due to him; it is quite possible that he's just taking advantage of events.

Right now, I'm worried about Twilight.  If she goes busting into Tartarus in an attempt to 'interview' some of the Princesses' kith and kin, it could easily set off what may be euphemistically termed as 'consequences' that are beyond her ability to control.  On the other hand, this might be an interesting experiment to see how much influence Discord has over her.  If she is no longer in his direct presence, his influence may fade and she may come to her senses and all this may bring her to question why she's coming up with these potentially destructive ideas in the library and that they are suddenly becoming very clearly bad ideas the further she gets from it.

>>12568901256890 Well, much thanky for that. I once read a story that had a human as one of the main characters, but had no Human tag. Granted, the reveal was a rather interesting plot point, but it would've been nice to know. Having it just come up out of nowhere kind of ruined the immersion.

>>12584011258401

Yeah, that's a tough one.  Tagging is just common courtesy but to give up a surprise plot point in advance would suck.  I've had trouble tagging this story myself, its a "story."  It has elements of all of the tags I put on it but none of them describe the story.  If I could make up my own tags they would be: suspense, intrigue, politics, world-building, and drama.

As for alicorn shipping, I'm a firm believer that an age difference of thousands of years would make things difficult if not impossible.  I do my best to avoid the sappy and trite.

>>12585131258513 Well, in my eyes, Comedy only applies when it's written for that purpose, now when comedy is just thrown in (like how, say, House is a drama, not a comedy), and Slice of Life is mutually exclusive with Adventure, Dark, Tragedy--most, except for Comedy and Random in some cases. Slice of Life is basically "It doesn't fit anything else."

Just my opinion, though.

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No, Twi, it's not worth it! Discord's trying to chaosify the world! Celestia's fine! Dammit, why won't she listen to me?

Damn overdramatic Celestial! Now shes got a got Twilight screwed up!

Fantastic story, though will Twilght become a draconequus like Harmony ?

Cover Img reminds me if this:

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>>12653961265396

It's just one I found.  If someone who was talented wanted to draw me a proper cover I'd pay them 16 quintillion Internets.

You might think that Celestia is out of character moping about her possible mortality and not about how all of her beloved subjects are going to die horribly in two months.  I think that she just has so much faith in Twilight's problem solving abilities she doesn't even consider the latter a real issue.  Kind of funny that the Goddess of the Sun has a mortal that she believes in absolutely just as said mortal's own beliefs are being shaken.

But you ask where was Celestia's faith in Twilight during the wedding?  I answer that's part of why its so unshakeable now.  She doubted once, never again.  Celestia is a "born again" Twilightist

>>12584011258401 What story is that?

>>12660271266027 Like I said, it was a rather interesting plot point, so saying it would be a little bit of a spoiler.

Just a little bit, though. It was Millennium Wake.

Twilights 'Do Not' Checklist cracked me up.

Now here's hoping the next Luna/Discord/Celly chapters will be just as awesome so we will survive this mother of all Cliffhangers.

Nice chapter.

I'd love to see Tia finally walk out her chamber and have a  reconciliation with Luna and try to sole those problems.

And I love the way that Celestia talk to Luna. She's not only a big sister, she acted like a mother! GJ!

"Why is," Celestia grabbed Luna's wing in her teeth and pulled her to the balcony, "THAT going on?

The scene is priceless! I love it!

There is an interesting conflict of the character, Luna in this fiction.

She's a goddess of Shadow (not only goddess of moon), she can be very fearsome and dangerous

(I know darkness does not equal to evil)

But  she acted really childish and innocent in this story (especially in chapter 1 and 2).

This is really interesting and entertaining. GJ!

(Luna, you have a great sister!)

GJ and nice work!

I'll keep reading! :D

Was just about to look this up and reread the previous chapter and then my email is all "Titanomchy updated" and I was happy, love the story keep it going please and thank you

>>12698081269808

I'm writing as fast as I can so I can get back to Twilight in Tartarus, Even as the author, the cliffhanger is killing me.

Two updates in a day! You're on a roll.

Ooh! Isn't he ebil? I'm wondering how much of this was his plan from the start and how much he's making use of fortuous events!

>>12698501269850 Moar! Moar damn you! Don't make me go get the whip!

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So what is this? An Equestriaifcation of Greek mythology? Well its got my attention, that's for sure.

"Could ask Tia to help me with Twilight?

"Discord."  Luna replied in shocked tone.

"Yes, that's me." he smirked playfully within her mind.  "Miss me?"

Prithee, whence to?" She asked

"Yes, nuncle but I am far more nice to you." She replied, buttering him up.

>>12698501269850 You know, you can write her (mis)adventures without publishing them, right?

Ok, I may just be smarter than everyone else in the universe, but had I gone through what the Twilight did with Discord the first time, I would IMMEDIATELY and INDEFINITELY always assume anything he said was an outright lie or manipulative half-truth.  I would never follow his directions, or at the very least ensure I had some way to make him HURT if he tried anything.

That's the most serious problem I have with every fic which takes place after the first encounter with Discord in which one or more of the Mane 6 willingly listen to anything he says.  They KNOW by that point nothing he says can be trusted.  Fool me once, shame on you; fool me twice, shame on me.  

And then there's always this mysterious ability, never adequately explained, of how he's suddenly capable of communicating outside of his statue when he couldn't previously.

Meh, I'm a massive stickler when it comes to internal consistency and logic.

>>12709191270919

Well, that shows me not to hurry.  Thanks for all the catches.

>>12706251270625

The show is already chocked full of Greek myth, you'd be surprised how little I had to add.

>>12710531271053

That's why I limited his ability to speak to just the alicorn sisters and a lesser ability to whisper into Twilight's mind (who doesn't have any idea that anyone is communicating with her, let alone Discord.)