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MadMan


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Late one night, Twilight receives a letter from an anonymous scientist to work on a top secret project with long-reaching implications. If they succeed, Equestria will be changed forever. But what if the mysterious benefactor has other plans in mind? Twilight has decisions to make: About morality and mortality, love and hate, friends and lovers.

Book two: The Ghost Of You

Chapters (22)
Comments ( 364 )

While Twilight is being portrayed as a bit cocky in this story, there is a whole lot of enormous potential in it. I look forward to the next chapter.

556800 I'd rather call her confident. And I'm working on it. :pinkiehappy:

Ummmmmmmm, all of Ponyville just went and accepted Twilight's new wings? I'm sorry, but I CALL BULL_____!!!!!!

777091 ohhh, just cause i said nothing about it, doesn't mean sh*t didn't get wild. :twilightsheepish: Remember, it's six months later, ponies have had time to get a little accustomed ti Twilight flying around.

Oooooooohh. Where did it say that it was six months later?

779742 "Until recently, most of her landing had ended on her face or flank, but over the past six months...."

:twilightsmile:

799331Ah. I missed that. Still, it would be kinda nice to see...You know what, with that explained, I think I can tolerate this chapter a lot more. Out of pure curiosity, does Celestia know about this knew development? I seems like Twilight and Axion are really trying to keep it a secret from her.

I'm pretty intrigued with this story. I look forward to find out what Axion is up to. The way she reacted about Nightmare was interesting. Now I don't mind skipping the wing explanation to many stories do that only to get bogged down.

I really look forward to where this might be going keep at it.

857540 I'm glad you're interested. :] I'm also glad you understand the lack of wing explanation. I tried to write some, and it just got annoying and slow.


And more parts are coming soon, very soon!

I just love scenes like this. When a author takes their time for events to flow naturally instead of just dumping emotions on the readers it just comes off so natural.

Now a question is Twilight a alicorn or is she a winged unicorn? Also if she is a alicorn is she immortal? Now hurry up with the next one I look forward to more on their relationship and on what Axion is doing.

926150 I'm glad you like it. :)

And I tend to think of Twilight as a winged unicorn, however I also think the definition of alicorn is slightly vague, and can also fit as well.

And I've been having a number of good writing days, so part V is coming nicely. Maybe another week and a half, maybe two. :raritystarry:

20k words and only 6 total votes? That's odd.

1019155 odd how? It just never caught on :twilightblush:

Darn these cliffhangers turning up in all my favourite stories. I will admit that I was hoping to see what happend between Luna and Celestia but i guess I can live with out it. Now I simply must know what going to happen next now that Luna is there. Now I'm not sure did we get to see what happened between Twilight and Celestia earlier or is this implied? Well untill next time keep up the excellent work.

Wow it's amazing the difference that adding a story to a group can make. I believe when I got the notification of this story being added to Twiluna and Alicorn Twilight it only had 6 positive votes and 3 negatives, by the time I reached the end, for now, and gave my thumb up there were a total of 12.
I have to say you seem to abuse the time-skips, first the reactions of the growing of the wings, then almost the whole romance of Twilight and Luna (when they realized their feelings, their first kiss is supposed to be a month later if I remember correctly and is missed too). Finally it seems like there was an incident involving Celestia and Twilight that I either missed or you left to the reader imagination. It almost seems like I lost half the story somewhere. The story is still interesting, and you probably had a reason to skip those parts, but I don't like feeling like I skipped a chapter or two.

This is a great story! Not sure how I missed it before but hopefully it'll get the attention it deserves now it's on some of the groups I frequent. I actually found it fairly easy to believe that Twilight would go along with a secretive researcher, (even from Celestia), being familiar with the university mindset.

1148541 Thank you, and worry not, the next part isn't far off!

1149116 Um, yeah. I didn't add it to ANY groups :rainbowhuh: I went to bed last night, woke up and has 21 fav's and 3 comments, not to mention a shitload of views. I dunno who added it, but I thanks them.
Yes, I do tend to abuse time skips. :twilightblush: I tend to do that when I feel I lack the ability to do a scene great justice, so I'll leave it to the imagination. I'll try to fix that! Also, the Twilight/Celestia conflict was never explained, so you didn't miss anything. I have something planned for that :pinkiegasp:

1149201 you missed it cause it was never popular :twilightsheepish: And I have no idea how it got onto those groups, or who added it, but if you find out, thank them for me!

1150085 Absolutely fantastic story! I'm the admin for the Alicorn Twilight group, and even though I don't know who added your story, it was certainly worth the read! I read every story that passes through, but I only track a few. Yours is now permanently a part of my Favorites list, haha! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png

And when I was telling my friend: " Nah dude, black magics can do all the cool stuff"
Told ya bro....

Hmm... For a while I thought Axion might be some sort of physical incarnation of Nightmare, but after checking the tags, I've dispelled those notions.


Now the time skips... They've been irritating yes. But at the same time, it's kind if nice to just have things there, and not make a big deal out of it. You show us the beginnings (transformation circle, Twilight and Luna leaning on each other) and then leave the rest to the readers imagination. So basically, I get lots of TwiLuna love, lots of action, and lots of intrigue. I have to say that tou've seriously gotten me wondering what happened between Twi and Celestia, and the only part of this story I might not be looking forward to is when that dark tag comes into play. It's not going to be grim, Twilight and Luna being wrenched apart in a tragic and/or horrifying moment type deal is it? Because I hate that kind of stuff.

Anyway, I'm starting to ramble now so I'll just finish this up. Keep up the great work, because I'm really looking forward to that next update.

1151422 I am fantastically flattered. :pinkiehappy: The fact that you read many stories and liked mine is a very big compliment.

1153786 dark majiks :pinkiegasp:

1153817 moar is coming! Fear not!

1160450 Tags? :trixieshiftright: Maybe I suck at using them....
And I'm glad you understand my abuse of time skips. I fear if I didn't use them, the story would get very bogged down.
And I'm afraid to say that the story will get fairly dark and grim, however I will also say that I want a happy ending.

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Grim and Dark is okay, as long as it isn't grimdark and so long as everything gets better in the end. In case you're unaware, which I'm pretty sure you're not but I'm going to explain it anyway, grimdark is usually incredibly dark stuff that involves characters doing things like killing all the mane 6/Ponyville/all of Equuestria. So yeah. As long as there's none of that, and no clop, I'm sure we'll get along just fine. Also, your OC tag further convinces me that Axion is not in fact Nightmare, as I originally suspected. You haven't introduced any other original characters yet, so... Yeah.

1165532 ahh I see. Nope, probably no grimdark, and no clop.

Ya know I had a feeling that Axion was hiding something big. I'll keep my thoughts as to whom I think it is to myself and just say I bucking love the SCIENCE!!! used in this fic.

1166536 I'm glad you love the science :raritystarry: as a Doctor Who fan, I take pride in at least the science sound right, and even seem right at first glance, even if deep down it actually can't work.

1166779 I'm a big fan of mad scientists who attempt world domination, and having read watched, and observed a good deal of fiction I tend to see where plot devices are hinted at, and where they potentially lead to. This isn't a bad thing at all, now combine this with a well written science-y fic where the characters feel natural, the romance is one you enjoy, and a small dash of cloak and dagger? and you have a recipe for one enthralled reader by the handle of Kate Bit

This is a good story, but I had a couple of irks while I was reading it.

The first one went kind of like this:
ONE DOES NOT SIMPLY ACQUIRE WINGS.
I see how it was essential to your plot, but it still came off rather poorly.

The other one is that cliffhanger. Not a problem on your part, but I always seem to start reading a story right when it hits the biggest cliffhanger so far. It gets a bit irritating.

Anyway, you have a favourite. If only for that cliffhanger. No vote yet, my vote depends on where you go with the rest of the story and how well you pull it off. I have faith in you.

1167274 I'm glad you are enjoying it. :twilightsmile: Stay tuned, more is on the way!

1167669 Haha I'm glad that the cliffhanger was successful, but I can promise this isn't the biggest cliffhanger of this story. Don't worry, many more chapters are coming, and the final end of the story will not be a cliffhanger.

Now, to Google "Amaranth". :ajsmug:

Oh, it's just some plant thing. How did you come up with that name? :rainbowhuh:

1190829 Just as it says in the story says, from a song. "The Great Dissapointment" by AFI. A lot of this fic is inspired by them, actually. Listen to the album "Sing The Sorrow" and you'll pretty much know my style. :rainbowwild:

And it's more than just a plant thing! It's a very special plant. name derived from Greek, amaranthos, "unfading." :twilightsmile:

Damn it! Now you've gone and made me all indecisive in regards to how little I trust Axion. She seems a LOT more trustworthy in this chapter than the others, but for some reason, my mind is interpreting that as more cause to not trust her. Your tags and the decidedly not dark nature of this fic insofar as you've written is messing with my head and now I'm expecting tragedy with every new paragraph.

Looking forward to your next chapter.

More Twiluna now please.

1191270 Maybe that was my intention? :pinkiegasp:

More TwiLuna? Maybe a good idea. Maybe I'll give it one more sweet romance chapter before I rip their worlds into tiny, bleeding, miserable shreds. :derpyderp1:

Morality means little in the scope of scientific progress, what matters is the ambition and will to drag the world kicking and screaming into the light of a new day and show it wiling or no the possibility that Day holds. Whether I trust Axion or not means just as little as the morals.... I do however like her for the Enigmatic character that she is.

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*shivers uncontrolably*

1191744 Man... That's good. I like that. I might just quote that in the story sometime!

I still think Axion is evil

1193288 Oh.. wow, Glad you liked it and hey if I gave you something quote worthy I feel honored.

1195640 You are free to think as you wish. :pinkiehappy:

1195698 Well, I'm honored that you're honored. :rainbowkiss:

So the cynical part of me is waiting for everything to fall apart. The optimistic part of me is hoping that all the pieces can be swept up and put back together.


On an unrelated note we haven't read anything new about Celestia. She didn't seem to be in a very pleasant state of mind.

You are such a tease releasing something so short. I would really like more information about how the others are doing. I don care if they don't become important to the story. It would just be nice to have a outside view on the behavior of Twilight also I'm really waiting for when Celestia meets axion. After how Luna reacted it probably won't end to well.

1207995 Indeed, she is not. But worry not! We shall meet back up with her shortly.

1208144 I know, but once I got the idea to do a really short intermission type thing, it wouldn't go away until I did it. :rainbowwild:
As for others, you mean mane 6? I suppose I can work them into the next chapter.

I'm with Lance on this one you are such a tease, but for some good Science Fantasy I am willing to endure itdl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Twilight_crazy.png Even if I get a little... crazy in the mean time

1208821 worry not, you're not the only crazy here. :moustache:

1208854 I certainly would hope not, it would get boring being the only fun onedl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Vinyl_sad.png

Wonderful letter! For some reason, I adore how it's kept as a separate chapter, haha. :heart:

Just a teensy-tiny nitpick, however—while "payed" is technically correct, most usages of that spelling have fallen to the wayside and replaced with "paid." It may behoove you to replace those instances for the sake of readability. :twilightsmile:

1210206 I am glad you adore it. :rainbowkiss:

And thank you for the nitpick! I wrote this at like, 3 a.m. so I knew there would be something like that.

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