The Writers' Group56,427 stories ·9,295 members
Twilight is Best Pony6,377 stories ·3,071 members
Twilight Sparkle12,283 stories ·4,755 members
Brony Horror1,378 stories ·1,111 members
Mentally Deficient Authors1,408 stories ·630 members
All Things Horror!298 stories ·189 members
Stories on Goodreads28,599 stories ·492 members
Starlight Glimmer2,903 stories ·1,540 members
In the Everfree, there is a river that runs backwards.
And foals can't swim.
A submission to RockstarRaccoon's Nightmare Night in April contest.
Pre-read by Undome Tinwe and MrNumbers.
Coverart taken from Ruirik. If you like my work, consider donating to my Ko-Fi.
Page generated in 0.098 seconds
Total duration
1,045 users online
68,581 hits today, 2,205,040 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
[REDACTED]
A RIVER IN REVERSE
WHEN ONE FALLS
DO THEY GO DOWN
OR UP?
CAN THEY BREATHE
OR DIE ON CONTACT?
WE DON'T KNOW.
FOR THE ANSWER IS IN REVERSE.
Muhhekunnetuk?
I don't get it. Explain please? Can't say much else at the moment.
Congrats! You get a like.
9570163
I could be wrong, but I think the implication was that when Starlight used the Time Spell in the Season 5 finale, it created an anomaly in time that trapped the filly in a recurring loop.
Dope
Short, sweet (in a way) and to the point. You didn't reveal too much about what everything was or why everything happened. Harrowing.
Really well written, not too much and not too little detail, and leaves the reader just enough information to guess what happened themselves
Excellent piece, very haunting. The most terrifying horror is the horror you can do nothing about.
Gosh darn it Starlight :(
Wow, short but a good read. I love it!
Utterly spinetingling...
Pretty good, Regi.
I wish you would've dwelt a bit more on a few things, though. Not much, but just enough to emphasise the underlying horror.
Showing us a bit more of how Starlight and Twilight felt would've made this much better. The uncertainty at the beginning, the shock of realisation, and the lingering dread after they realise they can't help the foal. Like I said, not much, but just some description of how they reacted to those things, both physically and mentally, would've made it pack a bigger punch.
Still!
It was an entertaining read, and an effective one at that.
Cheers.
Eh
I feel this got featured at one point. Congrats. At the very least it's in the popular stories list and I was curious enough to poke around.
That being said, I know this is suppose to be 'horror' but... I don't feel it, but I suppose that's because I'm using the human 'flaw' maybe of looking at the situation as a glass half full.
Putting the rest (hopefully) in spoiler tags. So yeah, I get the sense the Filly doesn't realize they are in a time loop given they grasped for the edge of the river, trying NOT to drown. I suppose one could say she's forced to go through the motions, but at that point I feel you're being depressing just for the sake of it.
The filly is stuck in a time loop where she drowns yes, but she just got discovered by the two most powerful unicorns in Equestria. Blindly trying to save her, didn't work no. However, she has the ear of every princess in equestria, Discord the spirit of chaos. I know the story is suppose to give this sense of underlying horror that nothing can be done, but really? I think given some time to study this, they'd find a way to get her out of there, and instead of a filly being stuck in an never ending horror, it's one soul that would have been destroyed, instead saved.
Oh I know there could be any of number of things that could 'potentially' make this not a happy ending but well I'm a fool with hope.
Spooky!
Also, I liked the little reactions that balanced the two; Starlight's more desensitized state and Twi's oh-so-tangible anxiousness.
Looks like the two of them ended up getting caught in the time loop as well.
Well written yet boring story that sucks as a horror entry. Thumbs the fuck down.
I don't get this, but good job anyway.
Chapter Two:
"Twi, we don't need the Elements. Jus' lemme get mah rope an' I'll toss her a line."
"Or, you know, Flutters and me could dash out there and pluck her from the water. We do have wings."
9630620
And then both get stuck in the time loop, feeding the anomaly and making it larger
This review is brought to you on behalf of the group: Authors Helping Authors
Name of Story: The River Reversed
Grammar score out of 10 (1 is grammar that needs to be worked upon as basic principles such as capitalization and spelling is an issue, and 10 is impeccable): 10
Pros
Interesting premise
Canon characters are consistent with cannon.
Location is described well
Cons
I didn't really get a feeling of horror from this
You described the actions of the filly, but not what she actually looks like
I didn't feel like there was enough elaboration on the characters emotions
Notes Section (how you can improve your fic, at the very least an elaboration of Pros and Cons section)
The terror should be described more. Go into more detail on how they respond to realizing there's nothing they can do. In addition, I thought it was odd that Starlight didn't just break the spell herself. She's good at that sort of thing.
Enjoy your review! Please help me out by looking at my story:
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/446417/foalhood-friendship-stellas-story
9785666 This review is brought to you on behalf of the group: I'm Posh
Name of Review: Cheeky Self-Promotion
Grammar score out of 10 (1 is grammar that needs to be worked upon as basic principles such as capitalization and spelling is an issue, and 10 is impeccable): Missed Possessive Apostrophe/10
Pros
Ostensibly Well-Intentioned
Nice Formatting
Plugs a Random Group
Cons
You seem to have missed the primary theme and genre of the story (existential horror)
You ended with a random plug for your own writing, which calls into question your intentions
You have posted cringe and will loose subscribor
Notes Section (how you can improve your review, at the very least an elaboration of Pros and Cons section)
Honestly, I'm tempted to just post the script to the Bee Movie, but I don't think Regidar would like that very much
Enjoy your review! Please help me out by looking at my story:
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/1337/oh-fuck-i-cant-believe-youve-done-this
9590025
I didn't catch that on the first pass; but wouldn't that mean the anomaly is large enough to cover a distance from forest to town? If they started at the crystal map...
Interesting. To see a endless deathloop. The horror is meant to be Twilight's and Starlight's realisation of it which makes sense.
Though I do agree with other commentors that now with this filly being discovered, the everypony from Discord to Princesses would do their best to save this filly.
Perhaps to improve on the horror is if you had shown that no spell, action ect. could save this filly and Twilight and Starlight have to dwell with the fact that the filly is forever stuck like that for ethernity
10022522
You're right! could definitely do with some expansion. I've been mulling this over since I published the story and people started talking about saving the foal and I'm thinking that having it be an element of a longer-form fic could be incredibly enticing.
10129909
ouch
i'm only 22 dude
10131022
yeah, but i still have time to break it
10132169
i'll bet you still keep reading them though :^)
10132498
cool, win-win
10132498
Not everything has to be high art you know.
I think this would be stronger if it was less explained. On one hand, I like that its a sad, random consequence of Starlight's actions. On the other, Its laid out so plainly that it cuts out the horror.
Dang, this was cool. :O
9788155
I am very sad that story #1337 doesn't exist :C
11028775
"oh fuck i can't believe you've done this" is one of the fimfic stories of all time
11029659 don’t tempt me to write this
11030289 bet you wont nerd pushes u
I liked this story before I read it, right before I decided I wanted to read it.
10129909
Lmao bruh what kind of spite is this