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It's time I told you a story, Apple Bloom.
A story about your sister.
A story about your brother.
A story about you.
Winner of the April Sibling Incest Contest.
Edited by ROBCakeran53, AstralMouse and Snowybee.
Original art by WillDrawForFood1.
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This line was hilarious.
Aw, hell, why'd you have to go and do the Southern ponies like that?
Daww, this was sweet. Thumbs up!
A surprisingly wholesome read. Well done.
Congrats! You get a like.
This didn't go in the direction I thought it would, and I'm happy about that. :)
I'm not crying, you're crying!
Good story.
(Although I thought the switch to third-person narration in chapter two was a little jarring)
Now this right is some feckin' wholesome shit, gaaaaah.
Good show, Fregz, good show. Well written, nicely paced, and feelsy as hecc.
Keep it up mate, keep it up.
This was such a wholesome take on what a tradgety could do to a family in dispear. Realistic outcome, choices, and such a twist on a fan favorite taboo. Bravo.
...Wait a minute
...Is Big Mac dead?
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"Him" refers to Bright Mac. I was confused for a bit too.
Very well done.
The first chapter made me want a fic where the incest is subverted and it comes out it was Uncle Orange. I was kinda expecting that with the awkward hug and the premise of something that dark and secret is intriguing.
I don’t usually go for this basic premise, but this one was exceptionally well played.
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Then why not 'losing them all over again' instead of specifically him? Does AJ not like Pear Butter? Unless Bright Mac is actually the father of Apple Bloom, I'm confused
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The point is that Apple Bloom and Bright Mac have the exact same coloration. Yellow fur, red mane and tail. That’s why she focuses in on him there.
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because Apple Bloom looks like Bright. If AB had looked like PB, she would have been mentioned instead of Bright. There's a lot of psychological weirdness when people encounter lookalikes of something or someone they know, e.g. Harry Potter and everyone's constant focus on his mom's eyes.
Ow my feels
''SWEET HOME ALABAMA !!!!!!''
This story was amazing and heartbreaking. I don't often tear up as much as this when reading fanfic but I needed to give my Applejack and Applebloom plushies long hugs after I got done reading this. Thank you for writing it and sharing it with us.
I never thought this contest would get me misty.
Very well done!
This was a fantastic change of pace that I was definitely not expecting in the contest. Great writing!
There were only six (6) contest entries, out of 129, that weren't M-rated clop. And yet after reading this, I have a feeling one of them should win.
This was really quite beautiful, thank you for writing it.
Contest judge..
I have only two things to say, really..
One. The switch to third limited in ch2 felt a bit clunky..
Two.. This is a beautifully written story that I wouldn't ask you to ever change and I loved it.
Thank you so much for writing it.
Judge here! Kay! Ready or not here I come! (Pun intended, so SUE ME IF YOU DARE!)
What a wonderfully built story. Moving from different angles to capture the perspective of the characters involved. You didn't just write a story you took us on a journey and presented a landscape worth sharing. This is the kind of story I would reread or read outloud to others amidst the light of a bonfire on a sandy beach at night. This is the kind of story I would love to read right before going to bed and getting some sound sleep. It was quite an honor experiencing this piece. So filled with a rack of emotions. Of sadnesss, of anger, of blame, confusion, and then it all wraps up to acceptance. It is so humanely constructed that the ending somehow works with a satisfying blend of sympathy and happiness. Not a sad ending nor a completely happy ending. Overall I say excellent work.
Now to encourage the goal of the contest I do have to put aside praise and point out the flaws. Now the 2nd chapter took a turn for the worst, by having AJ willing take up what I believe to be an alcoholic drink. Knowing full well she is carrying. This was a bit disturbing for me but not too distracting as the comfort was need to progress the story. Which could have easily been resolved or replaced with physical contact via the father much sooner. Another thing I noticed was at one point you seemed to have thought you were making Big Mac talk way too much. His emotions went from utterly shocked to stoic and calm. Yet even playing the role of father brother and AJ's emotional support he seemed to have taken it all too calmly. His recovery from such a big ordeal seemed out of place after all the child is half his at least. No less than that so I'd imagine he would have taken it more seriously. I know many a man who wouldn't have offered alcohol to a bearing woman in fear that their nonparticipation, or what little they can provide, ends up being a part of the problem for the one bearing all the strife.
Overall one of my recommended. A very pleasant piece that plays a tune on a reader's heartstring.
D'awww...
That was so cute! And heartwarming. And thoughtful.
Really well done, I liked it a lot.
I've recorded reading this first chapter for the audiobook version to come soon. It was brilliantly written and that helps a lot to make the process of reading it aloud smooth and easy, with a lot fewer then usual bad takes I have to edit out.
I just noticed however, a plot hole.
How can Rainbow Dash be reading Daring Do at this time? This is from a time before Applejack is even born, Rainbow Dash doesn't read novels yet.
Whew-weee!
Got to take a break from imitating Applejack so much as a Narrator in this chapter. Recorded and will be edited soon.
and done recording. That was an adorable story.
But knowing Youtube, I think I'm best off not attaching the tag 'incest' anywhere on it. They don't need to know XD.
Man, this one still gets me...
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Maybe I really should join your new contest...