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Hey all I'm Spy AKA SFL AKA whatever you wanna call me, anyway I like to write and draw, and here's where you can find my pony stories! I hope you're entertained and if not oh well I tried!
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I hope she isn't the one who does all the crying and stuff, it sounds more or less like she is a bit unchallenged here anyway.
I try out the new chapter in an hour or two when I have more time, I just found it now for some reason.
edit: unchallenged, but really annoyed and bored out of her mind.
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Nah, Tempest won't be crying. But some of those others... oh boy. Good luck, Fizzy
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Oh poor Tempest, I can already seeing her doing some stuff she is not comfortable with, I maybe mix up two versions of her since I have four or five stories of her, but the one I'm thinking of is still not that mushy.
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Lol, I'm sure Discord will ask if he can show up to see her real quick and she's just like "pls no I don't want to get in trouble"
If he does the bed thing she's likely to have an instinctive reaction of "NO LAYING DOWN BEFORE LIGHTS OUT >:U"
But I'm sure he'll find some way to sneak in, maybe long enough to give her a lil smooch and talk shit about other trainees.
Ohh man the wedding's gonna be fun, idk if it'll be part of this or its own standalone thing but I'll definitely write something for it. Thanks for the comment. As for how the others feel about Tempest being with Discord, I'm sure it'll come up :3c
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Alright, I just love some funny reactions from others and I can't get rid of the idea about some friendly fun from Discord, but I guess you know me till now.
I can't wait for the new chapter, I have to wait and see how her living in the guards barack is going to feel like.
Well okay then, maybe one of them like her best friend or something can see Discord there?, I like situational humor the most and I guess that is something you could count in there.
You were/still are Air Force, aren't you
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I am indeed, I guess I gave it away the moment I referred to 'dorms' and 'flights'. :') yeah I'm gonna be pulling a LOTTA stuff from my own basic training. I mean I'm not an officer but I'm gonna put Tempest through basically what I went through, just a bit adjusted for Equestria and with more focus on leadership. Should be fun times
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I actually just saw the term Tech School.
And of course the classic CAC necklaces. Good memories.
But I'm looking forward to the rest of the story
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Ooh yeah. The mention of tech school is definitely a giveaway. And haha, I couldn't resist the opportunity to put the ponies in ID card holders. But at least they have an excuse, they don't have pockets when their armor is off. :')
(As for the four in the back, they threw theirs out of the way before the scuffle. That's my story and I'm sticking to it)
I already image the guard members to make hugging competitions and calling themself a badass if they win.
To many stories about the guards being idiots make me imaging scenes like the following one. Do you remember when Maud appeared the first time and Pinkie was screaming "OVER HEAR MAUD?"
I image "commanding the Equestrian way", looks like she would scream "I BELIEVE IN YOU" in an overly dramatic and caring way.
I like this, to me this also felt much better or was looking more right this time, you maybe still know what I mean.
He could probably wrap his neck five times around her and put his had on the same height as hers if he wanted to, can't he make himself longer and all the stuff?
This was a really good chapter. However like in the last story I hope for something funny when she is in the guards barrack. I like to think there are still some ponies that either haven't seen Discord or aren't comfortable with him. I want a direction that isn't exactly just "oh hello Discord".
I think I found out that I'm especially fixated on situation comedy (or how it's called in english).
edit:
Not sure if you need a respond to the sex part, but I liked it. Like I already said, for my taste it felt right enough and I think I will be comfortable with pretty much everything with this couple.
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Yeah Tempest will probably be a pretty firm commander anyway. They keep telling her to reel it in and she's like "Hey, what I'm doing works right? RIGHT. Let me do my job" She won't be mean for no reason but she's not going to take any crap.
As for the sex, Discord COULD shrink himself and he absolutely would if she asked, but I imagine she likes it when he stays the way he is. He's all bendy, he's fine either way. :'D I'll probably write more NSFW one-shots with them though, they have a really fun dynamic and I have ideas. :3c
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I actually only meant wrapping his head somehow so that he maybe wouldn't need to try t o break his neck or something while looking at her. I just meant for him there is not exactly the need to have the same problems like Capper.
Okay that sounds nice.
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Ohh I see what you mean. Ye him wrapping his neck around her would also be a good choice
If the main OCs in this story were voiced, what would they sound like?
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That's a good question, especially considering how many OCs there are and besides Zinnia I'm not entirely sure who's gonna be featured more yet. And I'm not good at describing voices. But I imagine Zinnia having somewhat of a valley girl accent but it's not like stereotypically high-pitched or anything, it's just a normal tone.
I can't imagine Eagle Eye sounding like anyone OTHER than my main MTI in basic training, who I really wish I had video of that I could show you because her voice is honestly perfect for Eagle. Confident, loud when she needed to be, but able to get calm and gentle when genuinely trying to help or complimenting someone. And then once she got more relaxed with us she would laugh a lot and tease, like she was tough with us outside but in private she was pretty fun, and told great stories and man I loved her
As for the others I'll honestly just have to figure it out more as I write them but I will definitely get back to you on that. :'D
In the beginning they speak a bit as if she could have a hard time in the military, i would be more concerned about the different uhhhmm leading styles.
I actually kind of hope that you show the difference between her and the others a bit, with her having experience, maybe she has to show her leading style as some sort of guest thing.
She could have one meeker guard trainee helping her with the "Equestrian way"
It would be so nice if she has different personalitys in her uhhhm how do you call it again?, group. One that admires her and maybe one that hates her or is at least not happy with being there.
I think I want her in Tempest's flight or how they called it.
I'm curious will she get someone looking her over the shoulder or just getting instructions to follow and she is judged by her groups efforts.
I love this chapter and the story so far, I think I'M close to another favourite. I forgot a detail, was this already about her being an officer or just training?
I really hope she can show that she is different then the others like it looked so far, while I still image Eagle Eye trying to make her look bad or something, I think I want Tempest to be the best here right now.
Yout know since this seems to be only the first step she needed to take, but a slip up or two wouldn't be wrong if it makes sense, you know like her changing her style or whatever else is different.
Sooo....either her chef is going to hate her because of her being a former enemy, or she is going to respect her in the end.
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Her friends know she can do it, they're probably just trying to be encouraging anyway. "Oh yeah it might be hard but hey you got this!"
And oh yeah there'll be a lot of different personalities in her flight, I've got them all named and a few have personalities associated with them already so I'm looking forward to writing with them.
This is just initial training but it is officer specific, everyone there will be officers upon graduation. After that they go to further schooling based on their specific duty assignment and then they'll be given a position in the active duty guard (probably in Canterlot but there's always a chance you get to work in another city or even tasked out to the Crystal Empire) and they can get to work.
I'll definitely explain how I see it working more as time goes on. :')
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Alright, I admit I wouldn't deny a showchase of her skills and how she rescues her teammates and all that stuff in the future, but you know that already. I can definitly appreciate drama and stuff, but I love my happy ends and awesome main chars.
I get the feeling that I'm going to enjoy the whole story.
I liked this chapter.
Also, for those who wanna know how I imagine Eagle Eye looking, I drew this. :3
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I'm suprised but I really get into this, I mean I like the whole army thing more than I thought.
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(Kicks door down) OH I thought of a good voice for Eagle Eye. You know Sgt Calhoun (Jane Lynch) from Wreck-It Ralph? Basically that except more hoarse while yelling.
"We are hugging everyone!"....sorry I can't get that image out of my head.
You have all the stories where they can't do anything and as nice as this is at the moment, you maybe can't take them seriously. It is a bit funny how serious they try to be.
The last part sounds weird and maybe this was slightly less exciting, but still a great chapter.
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Yeah, unfortunately I gotta get the ridiculous in-processing stuff out of the way, but once that's done things will get much more fun. But I'm doing my best to make these chapters entertaining too. :'D
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Uupppss I maybe made it sounds weird, I meant I know a lot of stories where they can't do much and not sure how it sounded the way I had written it.
I haven't noticed it before, but I meant there are a lot stories like that and while I would like it if you show the difference between how serious the badguys fight and how the canterlot guards often do it in other stories, it would be fun.
I think I made it sound as if I said in your stories all that stuff happened. I haven't really thought in that direction so far.
Nothing wrong with that, but I like it if they also get teached that some battles don't end as peacefully as they want it. I mean without someone dying.
I really liked it again, I haven't thought I would read a soldier story well done, even if it is a pony military. Not sure if you know what I mean if I just say that most soldier stories have some weird flaws in my eyes like a badass soldier that tries to hard to be liked by the readers, has otherwise a weird personality or something similar.
I think from now on I put it in my favourites folder.
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Some of the classes they'll be going to cover the history of the Equestrian military, so I'm sure they'll be learning about plenty of battles that didn't end peacefully... :3c
And tbh I probably won't have anyone trying to be too gung-ho, those kinds of people are generally looked down on and they just make themselves a target for the instructors. That kind of cockiness tends to get beaten out of you. If any of my characters do try to act badass, well... let's just say Eagle knows how to deal with that kinda nonsense.
Thanks for the fav, I appreciate it. :D
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nice picture, but I noticed nearly all of them are Unicorns.
Since Tempest already has Discord it wouldn't be bad and even if you shouldgive Zinnia a guy "which would probably not happen there right now", I would like it to be something similar like Tempest has with Discord and not the type of relationship where they pack everything Discord and Tempest had so far in one day or week. Long story short I want to get something that makes me like the guy.
Well anyway, my real question or suggestion for another Discord scene was something like this :
One of the guys in a rare moment they may have, he starts to make some advantages on Tempest no matter if he is pushy or just admiring her and then he is suddenly teleported away and come back in a horrible condition. (Discord).
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Yeah the excessive amount of unicorns will actually be addressed soon but basically I have a headcanon that most of the Royal Guard is unicorns because they're based in Canterlot, which is mostly unicorns, so that's the race that tends to be most inspired to sign up. There are definitely other races in Tempest's flight though and all of them will be described in time.
oooohhh carefull with that character, since she isn't a Luna guard yet it doesn't feels odd, but if Luna or characters like her just walk into others dreams and maybe figure out private or delicate stuff, I think they take their duty or whatever a bit to far.
okay I spoke to soon, I just hope she is not going to be one of those ninja ponies that harass the main char in many stories, sneaking up on him and watching the main chars having sex or going to the toilet in some stories. They are usually cocky, a bit perverted and act a bit bossy. Maybe they also annoy me because it seems so cliche, I mean not one of them in that position was exactly shy or different than what I described. I mean them being shy or stuff like that doesn't means they can't be good at that stuff.
I'll be honest, I want Tempest to get a leader position or maybe (forgot the name of their boss right now), well maybe she would rather make Tempest some sort of assistent to one of the "chefs" to give her a different experience and something like that.
I have problems with how to write it right now again, but I meant if such a position exists, I could expect her to put Tempest as some sort of helper to make her see how that is or just to make her some sort of All-star (if that word is a thing (allrounder).
Long story short, I also liked the idea as Tempest being a good assistent/bodyguard to a maybe weaker leader, that has that one skill but needs someone like Tempest to really work in that position. I hope that makes it easier to understand.
On one hand I don't see anything wrong with them and on the other hand they make me remember that awful incest twin pairing with no good backstory for why it came to that. Without that I only could dislike it. I'm stuck between curiousity for them and feeling like I don't want to risk it getting to know them.
Not that I expect you to do something like that, I just like to talk/write a bit sometimes.
Not sure what you told me about Discord making a suprise appearance or something like that, but I suddenly got the feeling that your Discord behaves himself a little bit to much in that regard. I mean I like him and this story is awesome so far, but he is strangely behaved and others don't get suprised about him anymore.
It's not exactly dissapointing, but I kind of wish there would be a chance that some have a stronger reaction to him or Tempests situation sometimes because I love those funny situations. I guess my favourite comedy is the "situation-comedy" or how it was called.
Like when someone enters a room, two typical idiots are doing something really weird that can be missunderstood easily and the one person decites it would be better to go away again to safe his sanity.
It happened again, my head made
Your location may be attacked by other creatures or even angry ponies who will be ready to push (hug) you. Will you hug them first?”
This is so funny since your military seems to at least work a bit even if they appearantely lost against Tempests army, but in many stories they are just useless, maybe you can include something like that in your story?
I mean you don't have to make them idiots, but if they should maybe do workout as their last duty for the day and only have to do a small amount of exercise. Then Tempest would just be the only one in the first few days who is doing much more than them.
With that I don't even mean that they don't have enough time for so many exercises, but I mean that they just really don't have to work as hard as Tempest is used to it.
However I think it wouldn't work if you overdo it with this stuff, since at least this place seems to not be a complete failure so far if I understood it right. Tempest may be used to much more, but I understood that this place fulfills the standarts.
uhhhmmm......okay.....there is someone easily impressed, this was not the commander right? Depending on if it is the Commander Eagle or not, I know how that was meant.
With Eagle I would think she is impressed by his pony way to think of the situation, but I'm not sure if there was someone falling in love a bit easily.
No problem there, but old habits die hard and I like to get to know more about important characters that get together in the future.
I have my favourites or kind of, but I don't have anyone I really hate so far.
Okay Nice cliffhanger, now please use that scene for an interessting situations, suprised reactions, some disliking her and some taking her side and stuff like that. If this talk goes by as if they where talking about what bread they want to eat this day, it would be a bit dissapointing again.
Maybe I didn't noticed the sign last time, but does Commander Eagle hates her?
edit: Oh god this is one of my biggest comments I think. Didn't had something this long in a long time.
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Don't worry about Dream, she's a good person and doesn't snoop around anywhere she's not wanted. It's kinda like Luna in that she can feel if her help is needed, if not she just stays in her own dreams and has a great time because they're always lucid.
As for Tempest, I do have plans for the kind of role she'll take in the flight.
The twins... I'm still working on those two actually but I'm probably going to leave a lot about them up to the imagination.
Discord is pretty well-behaved, I'll admit. I'm still working on how I want to write him, but I imagine he tries to at least not upset Tempest and him trying anything now with her in training could get her in serious trouble, and not any kind of fun trouble. But he'll definitely mess with her, I'm kinda planning out more along those lines actually.
And at the end it was just Storm, another trainee, commenting "I think I love you" in response to Sword's little speech about killing if needed. It was just a joke, she's just acting infatuated because how else are you gonna respond to that kinda thing? :') Eagle isn't gonna say anything like that to a trainee, it's unprofessional, but she doesn't care if they screw around like that. Occasionally, and behind closed doors.
Eagle's feelings about Tempest will be laid out in the next chapter. It's not hate, but I think they'll have a very interesting dynamic.
Thanks for the comment, and I don't mind if they're long, I like discussing my stories.
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Well just be carefull with them please. I also try to not missunderstand anything.
Well I guess at some point I imaged he would just be the "I easily find my way around it" kind of guy and still tries to sneak in some reare jokes and tricks once in a while.
Naaah that was more a joke, I like to just say what is on my mind here.
I like him like this actually, but sometimes I wish for a rare Discord moment if you know what I mean.
Now I image him doing something that is slightly embrassing Tempest and at the same time teleporting the first pony who is laughing to the sun.... or something less harmfull.
Do you mean joking around and being less...auhhmm the soldier they are supposed to be or the other having a fling once in a while? I'm honestly not sure if I understand that right. I thought it meant two things, the adult meaning and that joking around thing which doesn't seems to be the chase, but there is also the translation for them being lazy which doesn't seems to fit here.
Well it is just one pony and I don't mind it. If they are more important for another sequel and stuff like that however, I just have to be honest if her friends have one partner at least. I know it doesn't always work like that, but I just love my romance stories like that.
I know a few weird people myself, but as far as stories go i just know what I prefer and like I always say, after a few bad examples I try to avoid certains stuff since I don't really believe in it being written in a good and interessting way anymore.
Long story short, if this was meant that they maybe get together alright then, you write the characters nicely and I trust you with them too, but I couldn't stop my imagination from going trought all of the possibilities and image some of the unlikeable situations.
edit: I hope i made sure to tell you that I think like that mostly about characters that start to become main characters for this story or even the sequel.
Well yes I she is actually starting to become one of my favourite characters here, Eagle I mean.
Thanks for the comment, and I don't mind if they're long, I like discussing my stories. Well if you get the feeling I focus on some stuff or themes, then that's most likely me trying to describe exactly what I mean, because I'm often enough missundertood sometimes.
It would be so much easier in german sometimes, to better get the meaning across I mean, this way it just looks sometimes like I would dislike those sex/intime scenes in generall, but I just know exactly what I like as far as books go. I mean isn't it natural to try and get the most out of something you like? I admit I try to read it as soon as possible, because there is always the small change that your wish get's fullfilled in the story and sometimes the suggestions are even wanted.
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Oh I just mean like, Eagle doesn't care if her trainees wanna joke around, as long as they do it while in the dorm and not out in front of the other flights. Since they're supposed to have military bearing in public. But she's not petty enough to squash a little bit of joking as long as the trainees don't get too wild. You'll see more of that as time goes on.
But ye I like Eagle. Mostly because she's based on one of my old instructors but also like. She's just so much fun to write.
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Ohhh so I wasn't totally off with my own translation okay then.
Depending on what happens next I would like them to actually be oficially friends or something in after their training it that is allowed.
edit: I was talking about Eagle and Tempest
Well, it's close enough to say you know what boot camp is like, but enough is off that it goes into the territory of the uncanny valley. Lots of little stuff that I think "that doesn't sound right" but it's been years since I've been there so i can't tell you why it's not quite right.
Either way, not terrible, sometimes the interactions feel a little stilted with exposition that doesn't make sense to say aloud for a character in that position since it should be obvious.
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That's fair, I can go a bit overboard with the exposition I'll admit. I'll try to be a bit more careful with it. I don't want readers to be confused about stuff but I also don't want characters to talk about things that they should all just know. It's a fine balance I gotta walk. And I haven't been in basic training since 2014 so I've probably forgotten a good bit of stuff but eh. Thanks for the comment.
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Late 2013 here. Got my ETS coming up next year and pretty sure I'm going to take it. Need to work on my family and private life some which is hard to do when you're being sent all over the place.
I had read yesterday so far already because of the cliffhanger and I loved it.
Nightshade/Blightshade was the future Ninja Pony right? Well I love it how they always think "I will beat up the one who won against everyone else who is to strong for me."
Which means in Nightshades head : Tempest winning against the princesses = NIghtshade winning against Tempest.
Not sure how to say it since my original sentence that I deleted made no sense, but even if I like Tempest as an overlord, I think in the future Nightshade could have a chance against Tempest, if she is lucky the suprise moment from the first fight would be on her side I guess.
Okay i didn't found out what Cali was again, but I started to liker her as the bitch she is at the moment.
Nice chapter, in the end I even felt sorry for Cali a bit. Maybe they thing that will help and in the army it's probably helpfull, but I guess for some it can be more harmfull or at least mean bad times when they aren't cut out for the army stuff.
I wanted to ask when Blizzard get's punished but they all needed to do something and that's normal I guess, that way they won't risk to get in trouble easily. I would love it to see that Cali breaks down at some point and is kind of the second best friend in the army to Tempest in the end, or secretely admiring her in the end.
Now my imagination took a step further but I'm not sure if that would ruin something else for me, which is why I'm keeping quiet for now.
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Blizzard's punishment is the same as all the others, she got smoked. Eagle didn't think it necessary to dish out individual punishment for this situation, since they just got here. She just did a group punishment because the humiliation tends to keep trainees from messing up again. I mean, they'll still make mistakes, but at least now they know there's consequences to fighting. :')
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I know, I just tried to explain that I had that reaction I think.
Couldn't this be noticed if to much soap is missing?
i know the Equestria ponies are all about friendship and Tempest is learning that, but when he said coold and was singing something along the lines or "were hugging trough the bad time and laughing in the good times", I nearly had to laugh a bit myself.
It's nice however.
Nice chapter again, this is like my first cup of coffe everyday, it just the thing I need.
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Eagle wouldn't notice something like that honestly, the bathrooms just have typical soap dispensers like ours do and you really only need one squirt per stall door, it's not enough being used to be noticeable. If the soap is being refilled slightly more often she's just going to assume her trainees are really good about washing their hooves. Which is the opposite of a problem. :'D (plus she's been a TI for a while so she can guess what they're up to but it works so if she doesn't see it happening, who cares)
And mm, coffee.
Not sure why I'm wary of some aspects they just throw in, but I liked them more as fables.
I mean I'm warming up to two or three of them already, didn't liked the epsiode witht he strong one, but I'm not always easily digg something (I don't like everything I see the first time right away).
I guess now that I think about it that guy was alright, but my first reaction was why it had to be him.
I know that I liked the one that has the pharmacy at the moment, but to be honest I'm not really trying to remember what it was that she did before again.
Well nice chapter, I think the second half felt a bit slow somehow this time, but then again I don't have much time for it tonight.
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I like the Pillars tbh, and I think it's really neat how they adjusted to life in modern Equestria.
Yeah the second half did kinda drag for me while writing it, I really just wanna get through some of this beginning stuff so I can get through the rest of the training and focus on the fun parts. :'D
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I think I disliked the stron one, Starswirl and there was someone else.
I like agyptian pony, the pharmacy one and (the shadow pony one).
Yep i enjoyed what they did with their life too, I think that was when I started to like them more.
I guess if the episode would have been better I would have liked the strong one too, well Yona made me not hate him at least.
I'm glad Dream isn't planning to use her power, I'm still wary about such powers after a few bad fanfictions.
I haven't tought about this for a while, but like I said yes she was going to far with that. In a few stories at least two years ago, I had several Unicorns going to manhandle other ponies, keeping them containted in their magic and everything.
That would not be a bad thing if some of them would get a real punishment for it, or if something would happen that would drive the point home, that they are not allowed to do that.
Nice chapter again.
Not sure who Ocean is and even if I forgot how Zinia looks like I kind of know who she is and her look is probably the one sitting beside Tempest in the picture.
Cali is the little princess of their flight right?
Nice chapter. Now I guess I take a look at the venom story depending on how long the chapter is, otherwise I already have plans and need to read it later or tomorrow.
How often do you plan to update for that? I just want to start reading it before there are to many chapters.
I'm enjoying the story.
But...
It's also made me realise that I don't want to have anything to do with the army... anywhere... Ever!
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Yeah that's a fair reaction
I mean when basic's over everyone's just like "lmao that wasn't bad" but while you're there. yeesh