Human in Equestria, but no longer human. Instead, he takes the place as one of Canterlot's Elite.
Prince Blueblood, a pony most regarded as unbearable and incompetent, has seen a better part of a change overnight. Its like he's an entirely new pony. Why has he changed so much? What caused this change? Well, that's for him to know and nopony to know why.
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Featured 2019MAY12 at 0207. My first featured story and I can't believe it. Thank y'all so much for reading my trash :D
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Love it. Added to favs, can't wait for more.
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I'm glad you do! 😋
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Thank you, I'm glad you like it :)
Military, the left foot always goes first when marching, and by the chapter name I assume Navy.
This could be interesting but this looks too much like The Humble Prince by Lighting Ace you would need to make this story stand out completely from that one and fast otherwise you will constantly be compared to the other which will be very grading for you in the long run, believe me. I would suggest that you give him a clear goal to follow and not have him just wondering about (hard to do sense he doesn't know a thing about this world), for instance he is a clone of PBB (not possession ) and was task for a dark mission by some obscure force that needed a pawn to do his bidding and has clear consequences of if he reveals his identity to the royal ponies. I would suggest that you come up with your own twist on it and that this should not follow my suggestion. Still you see on a good start for your first story and I hope you will keep on improving in your writing. And if you are interested I also do commissions on cover art if you want to take a peek in my DA gallery at the link bellow.
https://www.deviantart.com/amalgamzaku
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There will be a goal, he just got here, trying to figure everything out. Don't worry, I have a plan for what direction I want to go in. Thank you for you input, it means a lot :)
I hope it takes a different path than The Humble Prince, i like that story, bit i would like to have variations on stories of similar premises, faved and like :D.
Do continue...
I must admit I do very much like what I see so far I’ll make sure to follow this gem
So far, so good. Keep up the dramatic irony.
ive seen a couple of fics like that but weren't well written due to the author being non english speaker so im looking forward to see where you goes with this
Much potential. Blueblood is an interesting character who isn't nearly as well explored as he could be. Too many writers only want to use him as a butt-monkey. Curious to see where you go with this.
just wondering have you abandoned this fic?
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I think not
-spy
Are you planning to contenue? If you had this that long and forgot, it means that you don't care anymore, what it'll be?
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Ghost wolf:
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Dude, don't be rude.
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Nah, its fine Firestorm808, but to answer your question Voltaje, its not that I don't care but more of not being motivated. I work. A lot. And it really drains me. I mostly forgot because I haven't touched on any of my stories. If you look, I don't have a good track record of keeping up with them. I mostly write when I feel like it, and this was just one of the ones I forgot about. I do plan to continue, but that could change based on how I feel. Hope that answered something.
FAVORITE!!!
It would be nice to see this continue but that's up to you.
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More please and thank you.
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You might want to stay away from MythrilMoth's stories, then. Most of his stories have shown zero signs of updating, and he always gets mad when people bring that up.
Didn't this used to be longer?
Hm... well, the grammar is a little bit... meh, but seems interesting enough.
For reference, don't use the number ('2') and instead use the word ('two'). Also, make sure to enter a new line when changing speakers.
For example:
Original:
Edited:
If you make sure to fix up those two problems, the only other thing I could see being a problem is the pacing.
Whilst this isn't as bad as other fics, make sure not to rush into moments. There isn't really any big exmples so far, it is a common ploblem with first fics.
Edit: Just noticed this isn't your first fic, sorry about the assumption.
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MythrilMoth passed away a few days ago, so those stories are not going to be completed unless someone picks them up.
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Thanks for the constructive criticism, I appreciate any and all comments about such things. I'm definitely not a professional writer in any sense, so any help is appreciated. :D
Nice!! Realy looking forward to new chapters!!
Damn, didn't realized that I missed the update and missed it for some many days. So far it sounds like he is either a soldier who was wounded in a mission, or a civilian that got hit during the crossfire. I wonder if this is going to be BlueLight shipping fix with how much you keep mentioning the new 'princess'. I wonder if this Blueblood was raised by Celestia or had his own family? I wonder what sort of duties he had for the crown or if he just lazed around all day attending parties and such?
I just found this and i need more.
I like what you have set up so far, but I really feel the need to point out that question marks are perfectly valid punctuations to end sentences in, you really don't need to tack on a comma or period after them.
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me 2
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Yeah, I know. Just haven't gotten to fixing it yet :)
Omg more please
You said "thank you"
... wonder how long it will be before he gets accused of being a changeling
It would be great to see you continue this wonderful story
More pls
Poke
really hope this story continues
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Me too
I give him 5 minutes of talking with the princesses or the elements of harmony before he is accused of being a changeling, a demon, or both.
Ojalá escribas del pasado de Blueblood