For two hundred years humans have been enslaved by ponies. With a Apple family reunion and a old friend of Granny Smith coming to visit brings a human slave to their farm. Things will take a turn towards freedom or war.
Nightfire sat on the train heading to Ponyville. Her mind set on getting Matthew and taking him to the ruins of the old kingdom of Avalon “ I must not fail the Queen. Matthew must be ready for the war ahead. ”
“I mean my dad knew what it was life, he was an ex-slave who worked in a blacksmith shop. When my mom freed him from his chains they left for overseas.” Blaze said “Dad said loving a pony was never his plan till he met my mother.” He chuckled at his father's words.
“Y-Your a half breed!?” Twilight asked shocked. “Yeah, half breed.” He said proudly.
Does that me they can’t make him a slave?
“Do you have magic as well?” Twilight asked.
“No, my mother was an earth pony and my father wasn’t born with magic even tho they made him wear those wrist things.” He said taking a seat and eating his fish.
Don’t earth ponies have magic?
“I will tell them when the time has come.” Moonlight said walking up to Nightfire and handing her a piece of paper “Give this to Sawdust, this will help you get Matthew out of there.”
Holy shit this just got awesome!!
Oh boy.... this can't be good.
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I mean war never sounds good
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Does that me they can’t make him a slave?
Don’t earth ponies have magic?
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And so it grows ever closer