For two hundred years humans have been enslaved by ponies. With a Apple family reunion and a old friend of Granny Smith coming to visit brings a human slave to their farm. Things will take a turn towards freedom or war.
9095800 Considering this is an AU and a remake of the original where he was also a racist slave owning and trading jerk, it fits well. Any other Braeburn across the multiverse would probably stand up for Matthew and beat up their disgrace of a counterpart for how he acts as it goes against the Apple Family way. Then there's the King who if this follows the original story as the author originally meant it to, is a racist sexist monster who'd see his daughters in the dungeons as slaves and prisoners than in power undoing everything he's done. A reckoning is a coming and the KIng might die by Celestia and Luna's hooves for his crimes.
The story is a good one and I look forward to seeing what changes between the original and this one.
I enjoyed the first chapter quite a bit. Even though you only have the one chapter it's shaping up to be a wonderful story. I look forward to seeing what you do with it next.
Two thousand years ago humans and ponies lived in peace. The land of Avalon was pure and rich with life, humans built a great kingdom within the mountains of Othrys. They claimed the Goddess Lucy watched over the lands and protected the kingdom of Avalon. It is said this mountain was the birthplace of humans and where humans were given magic.
Do they have different types of magic?
Yet our story shall focus on a young man named Matthew, born into slavery and forced to wear a magical collar around his wrist. His story will connect with a young mare whose farm will be one that will start the true freedom of humans.
If it’s around his wrist, wouldn’t that make it a bracelet?
While i enjoyed the original version, it will still be fun to read this remake.
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Hope you enjoy
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Agreed.
Not sure I enjoy Braeburn being portrayed as a dick here, but I’mma remain optimistic about this story and where it’s going.
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Considering this is an AU and a remake of the original where he was also a racist slave owning and trading jerk, it fits well. Any other Braeburn across the multiverse would probably stand up for Matthew and beat up their disgrace of a counterpart for how he acts as it goes against the Apple Family way. Then there's the King who if this follows the original story as the author originally meant it to, is a racist sexist monster who'd see his daughters in the dungeons as slaves and prisoners than in power undoing everything he's done. A reckoning is a coming and the KIng might die by Celestia and Luna's hooves for his crimes.
The story is a good one and I look forward to seeing what changes between the original and this one.
Shits about to get real.
Oh my god yes. This was one of the first 3 MLP stories I ever read (but on FanFic) and I can't wait to see what's up.
I enjoyed the first chapter quite a bit. Even though you only have the one chapter it's shaping up to be a wonderful story. I look forward to seeing what you do with it next.
Looking forward to seeing this develop!
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defeat
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Replace the comma with ‘‘that’’.
‘‘he's the toughest’’
The quotation mark at the end should not be there.
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The phrasing makes it seem like AJ is referring to herself.
These are not even all the errors in the chapter.
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Thanks, I'll fix those when I get a chance. Feel free to message me if you have anymore error's I've made.
Do they have different types of magic?
If it’s around his wrist, wouldn’t that make it a bracelet?
A rather interesting scenario, how not all is Black and white