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Night--Mist


Son of Princess Luna. A Bat Pony Alicorn who's small for his age.

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Night Mist's the name and he has been dropped into the realm of Equestria, well, the pony realm that is, from another realm he cannot recall. His appearance causes Princess Luna to take him in as her son. When he am told of all that is going on, he finds out his new mother was not controlled by the dark side known as Nightmare Moon. Nightmare Moon is her own pony. Well, that's an interesting twist. Let's see how events play out.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 13 )

I like it so far, but I think the reaction of Celestia and Luna was a bit... Too normal. A bit of surprise, shock or in that direction would've been nice. Still, interesting Chapter.

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Well, seing a pony falling. I think maternal instinct kicks in at that point. And I am sure this is more of a normality compared to the crazy things that happend 1000 years ago.

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Ok. I'll just see it as a 'I've seen weirder stuff moment'

How many stories do you have going now?

"In a manner of speaking, yes. It is a spell I usually use on criminal ponies who wish to have a clean slate, not return to their old habbits. And it's worked. Now I can take away your memories, and give you new memories that will make you feel like this is the only life you knew, your memories of events from another reality will be gone. But also understand this. Luna and I will also have to undergo a certain spell ourselves, to let whatever events may come, run their course, without our own minds being conflicted with this knowledge, and possibly worsening the outcomes of said events. So are you sure you wish to do this?" Celestia asked, with sincerity in her voice.

Wow, that she can do that is creepy and disturbing, to just take away what you are and make you something else, a fate worse than death in my eyes.

Comment posted by Night--Mist deleted Sep 21st, 2018

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Made some changes to the ending of the chapter. I hope it's a lot more to you're liking. Read over my own work a few times, and the more I looked at it, the more it felt off. So I hope the change is better for you.

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Sure thing, a little critique never hurt anyone............ right?

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I am changing up the chapters and how things play out in this story, and switching it to third person.

Love in the remake so far. Funny thing is I read this and favorited it but somehow it said I did not have it favorited. I fixed that right away. Will be watching for the next chapter. Oh will you be adding any art pics of your OCs?

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