Son of Princess Luna. A Bat Pony Alicorn who's small for his age.
Luna takes in a bat pony named Night Mist into her care after finding him badly bruised in the streets of Canterlot for being different to the rest.
Let's see what happens as Luna enjoys the perks of becoming a mother, and what secrets she will find out as she raises little Night Mist
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Awesome start
7831122 Aaaannnd...... what about the story?
This story is great! I hope to see more soon!
I'll be keeping an eye on this for more chapters.
7831165 and story had lot of heart in it
7831410 Thank You.
7831415 as Maui would say you're welcome
Such a cute story, I can't wait to see more
7831122 I feel like such a melon head right now. I thought your first comment said, awesome "art", not awesome "start". Man do I need sleep. *Stardust blown into face.* Night Night *I collapse on my favorite pillow.*
Mommy woona is so adorable!!!! >_<
Wait, will Brothers of the Night be canceled?
7831716 No, this is just a story for only me being included. I needed something solo. I've been doing a lot of stories that include my brothers. I know it's a little selfish, but I've been holding back for a while. No need to worry. I will still work on "Brothers of the Night". When my brain feels a little less drained of course.
7831724 It's not selfish. I understand
But liked I said before, this new story is amazing!
SOOOOOOOOOOO ADORABLE more please
7831724 cute story
Have some errors! (ﾉ◕¤ヮ¤◕)ﾉ*:･ﾟ✧
This one isn't so much an error, as a wording choice; using "bat pony" might be accurate to describe them, but it sounds rude and ignorant, because bats are often deemed scary or horrible. Consider using "Thestral" instead.
This sounds like you're trying to introduce the foals who are bullying him, not Nightmist. Consider using a semi-colon, then, "he had" or "who had".
My personal rule is that one should use a comma before adressing another character in speech.
Also, the second highlight should be "the other"
Should be "than."
This isn't all of them, but I'll come back later to help; no offense, but it's difficult to read, having to jump between comments and story.
I really hope that batch of upper class rejects don't expect to get any calm restful sleep over the next ninety days or so. I have an idea that every time they drop off there will be things waiting for them. I sincerely hope so. Good start keep up the good work.
I've seen starts like this before, and while pretty good, most never continue. Here's hoping this is different.
Looking good. Can't wait for more
7847532 try it luna
Please more chapters, I need more cuteness overload in my life
*Sees child being bullied* *Cocks shotgun* I'll give you a ten second head start.
If Night Mist was voiced, what would he sound like?
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A little child, and having troubles with his r's and l's most of the time and having s's at the end of some of his words. I'd say what a 4 year old sounds like.
What did you think of the chapter?
The video clip you added was from Independence Day 1999
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Yep. Thought it was appropriate since it is the 4th of July.
8275715
Independence Day came out in 96, not 99.
IT'S ALIVE WHAHAHAHAHAHA!!
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Aaaaaand. What did you think of the chapter?
8276391>>8275715
What was your opinion on the chapter?
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I thought it was very good
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Good
I kinda feel Luna jumped on the Mother Train a bit quick here. Taking him in her charge and caring for him, even the nursing I understand. I just feel it's a bit of a rush for her to be fully in Mommy Mode for Night Mist this fast
yyyeeesss god job
ITS BACK! HELL YEAH!!!
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What did you think of the chapter?
Awesome chapter
I already love you due to having Blueblood actually be nice and not a jerk!! He has sooo much potential for redemption or a good excuse for acting how he does, that I immediately love stories like that :D Add a bat pony into the mix... and you got me hooked.
YES FINALLY WHERE BLUEBLOOD IS ACTUALLY GOOD FOR ONCE
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This is not my first story with him being a good pony. I really want him to show up in the show again and get some more back story. I don't want to be judgmental about him after 1 episode. I realized I made that mistake with Diamond Tiara when she got a redemption episode. Though she's still not a favorite pony of mine.
Great job it took a little while but great job anyway keep it up
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Na I'll give them a 5 second start "loads RPG"
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Hope you have time to read the latest chapter and let me know what you think.
Really hope to see more, and we get to see Twilight with the new prince. Update soon :)
Sky note needs to be rewarded. It was brave of her.
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DT's was a cop out.
and wow, that noble is stupid.
Haha when cadence is makeing the threats you know some one is screwed
Oh please Luna I don't have any fears or nightmares
So what does EBI mean, and stand for?
I'm guessing it's similar to the FBI correct?