Starting now, everything is officially on hold. Whatever it is, it can wait until after ponistories are done.
Edit: The shortest path between a Twilight Sparkle and a Pinkie Pie is always a straight line, no matter what furnature or architecture may choose to intervene.
Great chapter, but I'm honestly more excited for plot developments than actual sex. Not saying the sex is bad, it's really good, but I'm way more interested in seeing where the plot goes.
But seriously, how does a pony ride a tricycle, anyway? ... And the only thing that comes to mind for this scenario are the handlebars, which sounds excruciatingly painful, especially for a young filly. Gah, bad thoughts, bad thoughts!
Distracting myself, small typos I noticed:
want you see badly
In context, this should be "so" or "soo".
"And I thought, you said you had supplements, earlier, so, if you have a... collection and you didn’t mind staying in little longer."
"a little", and it seems like it should trail off with "...."
I really hope that was an intended pun, if so you deserve five mustaches: Either way this is truly an awesome chapter. Poor Twilight will have alot of stuff to fix.
Genius. I loved it. Want more. Not only is the sex phenomenal, but I'm enjoying this story line as well. There are plenty of twi/luna fics out there, but something about the particular mood of this one... The way Luna's somewhat aloof about how Twilight goes about things, her uncaring emotional status... Half of the others are about Twilight and Luna falling in love... This... Luna's just trying to teach Twilight how to be the best lover on the face of Equestria. Genius.
This story is brilliant! Funny and hot too! It's weird how some clopfics actualy end up being funnier than most comedy fics. Therefore, I must conclude that: If you want a funny story, put some sex in it.
A oblivious needs to secretly put Twilight through the faithful student ritual to help keep her safe from the Dark apprentice. The sheer irony would be delicious. Especially if Twilight doesn't tell Luna.
I don't know why, but the first thing to come to my mind as I was reading the chase scene, was that Twilight has turned into a Sex Tank. Can't wait to read more.
Hmm, this story was pretty disturbing to me in the first four chapters. I've finally come back to it and find it's... less so. It almost feels like the author was taking reader's comments into account; there's some stuff about ethics and free will that I certainly appreciate. And even a bit referencing Celestia calling Twilight a whore (which apparently rustled a bunch of people's jimmies).
I'm still not quite comfortable with the whole thing, but it looks like I'll be following this story to the end.
I spotted one mistake in Chapter 6: a couple of times the author refers to a "naval" when it's supposed to be "navel".
Can you explain that? My first impression was that its a ponification of the colloquial expression for 'slut' (since ponies would have difficulty riding a bicycle), but according to the story, that is not the case.
If it was an actual tricycle. HOW?!
Actually, if it was. I am not too sure I want to know.
1471830 I could give you a lot of ideas as to where the plot goes. ;3
Hehe but seriously, I agree! The clop in this fic is great, but I am so interested in continuing the main plot! If the plot is to follow Twilight on her sexual endeavors that is all well and good. x3 But I am so interested in what this new title does to her relationship with her friends, and more importantly; Princess Celestia. Keep up the good work, dear writer!
With how easy Pinkie was to get in the sack... haha, literally, I've got a feeling one or two of her friends is going to outright reject her at first. Can't wait to see Rarity and Twi have a seduction showdown.
Yay, more sex apprentice twilight, great chapter as usual, looking forward to more
An Armory? Pinkie better have a whole damn fuck-factory full.
Aaaaaaaaaaaannnnnnnnnnnnnnddddddddddddddddddddddddd it's good.
Lol
By Luna... so many toys....
Yay! A new one! Made my night~
I'm doomed.
Yes, yes you are Rainbow.
EEEEEE! Update! THANK YOU!
EDIT: I loved how Pinkie just knew what was going on. And this:
makes me think of this.
Also,
I think you meant:
Thank you!
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Awesome chapter. The chase scene was fun, and the clop was good. And that last line... Well, you saw my reaction to that.
Dayam. Pinkie came prepared.
...
Heheh. 'Came.'
Anyway, I'm definitely glad I followed this story.
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Thanks! And fixed!
Oh hey I wonder what this update is for…
Starting now, everything is officially on hold. Whatever it is, it can wait until after ponistories are done.
Edit: The shortest path between a Twilight Sparkle and a Pinkie Pie is always a straight line, no matter what furnature or architecture may choose to intervene.
I think I only got 10 or 12 paragraphs in before I died of laughter. It was the “Success! You seduced me! Congratulations!” line that finished me off.
an update. Ready for more
Great chapter, but I'm honestly more excited for plot developments than actual sex. Not saying the sex is bad, it's really good, but I'm way more interested in seeing where the plot goes.
But seriously, how does a pony ride a tricycle, anyway? ... And the only thing that comes to mind for this scenario are the handlebars, which sounds excruciatingly painful, especially for a young filly. Gah, bad thoughts, bad thoughts!
Distracting myself, small typos I noticed:
In context, this should be "so" or "soo".
"a little", and it seems like it should trail off with "...."
Ha! The best part, the absolute uselessness of Twilight's flowcharts! Had me rolling.
IT BEGINS
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Thanks! And fixed!
...But seriously, thanks. These errors ruin my shit.
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I really hope that was an intended pun, if so you deserve five mustaches:
Either way this is truly an awesome chapter. Poor Twilight will have alot of stuff to fix.
Well that was awkward: Sexy Twilight activate... and then suddenly deactivated.
And poor Twilight is going to be sore...
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I agree completely with this guy here. This story could easily be great w/o the sex, it's just that the added sex makes it f*cking amazing!
That is exactly what I'd expect from Pinkie. It was fun and cloppy and an all around good chapter.
You... you did it.
You found Pinkie's thing, her context! I didn't think you'd be able to do it, I guessed it right off the bat, but... MY GOD.
Did you ever pull it off!
I had to stop after the first few paragraphs because I had a case of mind=blown.
I'm going to finish reading now.
EDIT: Finished. There are no words to describe this. You get all my
That last line. It invoked this image of Pinkie as Gilgamesh from Fate/Stay Night, with her hundreds of ..weapons hovering behind her.
Wat.
yay another chapter! and totally wort te wait keep em coming
I was laughing more than... well, uh... zipping my mouth now.
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Hee! Great stuff!
“Success! You seduced me! Congratulations!”
That line killed me.... soo awesome.
Edit: Just finished and i gotta say it was well worth the wait.
Genius.
I loved it. Want more. Not only is the sex phenomenal, but I'm enjoying this story line as well. There are plenty of twi/luna fics out there, but something about the particular mood of this one... The way Luna's somewhat aloof about how Twilight goes about things, her uncaring emotional status... Half of the others are about Twilight and Luna falling in love... This... Luna's just trying to teach Twilight how to be the best lover on the face of Equestria.
Genius.
Just who seduced who?
Never doubt your ability to write horse-smut, because you are awesome!
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I swear to god, i can't read a single fic with out seeing you there.
This story is brilliant! Funny and hot too! It's weird how some clopfics actualy end up being funnier than most comedy fics. Therefore, I must conclude that: If you want a funny story, put some sex in it.
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Winning.
A oblivious needs to secretly put Twilight through the faithful student ritual to help keep her safe from the Dark apprentice.
The sheer irony would be delicious. Especially if Twilight doesn't tell Luna.
I don't know why, but the first thing to come to my mind as I was reading the chase scene, was that Twilight has turned into a Sex Tank. Can't wait to read more.
1472974 It's true, I have seen his name quite a bit... What about me?
And great chapter!
Oh, Pinkie Pie. I do love you so.
Hmm, this story was pretty disturbing to me in the first four chapters. I've finally come back to it and find it's... less so.
It almost feels like the author was taking reader's comments into account; there's some stuff about ethics and free will that I certainly appreciate. And even a bit referencing Celestia calling Twilight a whore (which apparently rustled a bunch of people's jimmies).
I'm still not quite comfortable with the whole thing, but it looks like I'll be following this story to the end.
I spotted one mistake in Chapter 6: a couple of times the author refers to a "naval" when it's supposed to be "navel".
An armory....
"Tricycle"?
Can you explain that? My first impression was that its a ponification of the colloquial expression for 'slut' (since ponies would have difficulty riding a bicycle), but according to the story, that is not the case.
If it was an actual tricycle. HOW?!
Actually, if it was. I am not too sure I want to know.
1471830 I could give you a lot of ideas as to where the plot goes. ;3
Hehe but seriously, I agree! The clop in this fic is great, but I am so interested in continuing the main plot! If the plot is to follow Twilight on her sexual endeavors that is all well and good. x3 But I am so interested in what this new title does to her relationship with her friends, and more importantly; Princess Celestia.
Keep up the good work, dear writer!
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Sailed over my head too.
Twilight might learn what it feels like to have things in all three holes.
MFW new chapter
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An armory??? Jesus.... I hope the Cakes have insurance on their house
FINALLY!
With how easy Pinkie was to get in the sack... haha, literally, I've got a feeling one or two of her friends is going to outright reject her at first. Can't wait to see Rarity and Twi have a seduction showdown.