Oh I like where this is going. To be quite honest I like the idea of Twilight learning to become mysterious even-more-badass Twilight a lot too. I do hope we'll be having a good deal of that in addition to the sexytimes. (Not that the sexytimes is unwelcome, I just enjoy the overall premise of this story quite a lot. And it would be a shame to not explore all parts of it.)
>secretive luna >Twi sure as life ends with death wouldn't jump into this unaware >her letter couldn't be any more terse and uncharacteristic of twilight >'feel free to break laws champ' Urge to stop reading rising, but this could still be good remain calm. >"previously unused sections of the castle." Translation: Luna is being a loner still, or in this fics case sketchy stuff. >"maybe she'll even let me read them." >rude luna >forceful commands >forced sex, yippie for rape >luna's associations are ridiculous. Sex a major part of the night? really? Dislike, time for the next chapter. inb4trainwreck.
I guess me starting on a "Luna is OOC" rant would be kinda pointless... but this still seems much more fitting as a Moonlight ship rather than a Twiluna ship, but I guess I'll give it a shot and see where it goes as am not much of a clopfic fan, quite the opposite actually...
991084 oh yeah... i recall that... it made me thumb down the story...
I enjoy this.. it shows that like humans.. the mood is viewed as a sexual thing. dont ask me why but even without needing to look it up wasnt the roman and greeks goddess of the moon also the one who controled like feritliy? so... sex... I like this! I really care that is a clop since i want the story. Unlike most clops this is the most plausible i have seen.
>>Twilight tried to read the letter a second time, but her eyes slid over the words without taking in any information. You may break any Equestrian law.>>
"Hot damn!" exclaimed Twilight Sparkle in sadistic glee. "In Luna's name, I am SO going to have Trixie drawn and quartered!"
>> “Ah,” Luna said. “I see. Making love is a part of the night, Twilight Sparkle. It is the oldest ritual done in darkness. It is part of my godly domain. Becoming a skilled lover will comprise much of your studies.”>>
And NOW we see why Luna wanted the night to last forever! She's such a pervert!
(Hee hee! So much troll fuel in this story! I love it! )
>> Twilight imagined what it would be like to have Luna hold her. To kiss her...>>
And then when Luna turned to look at her, it was the muzzle of that creepy pony, Alondro, who kept stalking her burst into her daydream! Twilight retched for an hour straight and NEVER HAD SEX IN HER ENTIRE LIFE!!!
(BWAH HA HA HA!! Please keep writing lines I can corrupt! Hmm? Oh! Lord Discord is also pleased. )
I was reading the "arts" part and I thought exactly what Twilight thought plus "I'm probably just tired but a re-read won't hurt." and then I got to Twilight's part and was like "Woah, déjà vu"
Now this is an adequate first chapter, but it comes with an inconsistency. The Letter. I understand Luna would want secrecy for the rite and Twilight would be hesitant to go through with it, but why doesn't Twilight question it in the slightest? It has been made very clear in the show that one of Twilight's greatest fears is disappointing Celestia (Lesson Zero anyone?), The fact that she doesn't is very baffling and out of character without proper motivation or buildup.
Now I've seen some people complain in the comments that she's being trained to act rude or she's being coerced and that's all incorrect. She's been given time for the sole purpose of thinking the deal over. I've read a shitload of books, so this is not the first time I've heard of Tantric Magic, but mutual willingness tends to be a key feature of those rites and she's been given time to think it over.
And I'd be disappointed if the guards did leave when Twilight first asked. They're trained to respect authority and command. Why should they listen to this meek and timid filly? Luna made it clear that it would be part of her training to help her (possibly) rule. Twilight needs confidence in her own command abilities.
Well shit, now I'm hoping that there ends up being more to thing Dark Apprentice thing than just the sex. Of course, that's nice too, but I can see a lot more potential in this than just a bit of clop.
In fact sex was a ritual used in the olden time's when it was believed a kiss was a way for demons and angels to seal a deal or contract on humans. But when a powerful deal came, a kiss was not strong enough to hold such a powerful contract only sex was powerful enough to seal the deal. A very old ritual done in the ancient religions i just can't remember which?
Never expected to find myself reading a clopfic, but the humor is quite good. And the bluntness of Luna's sex comments, and how she sounds so calm about it, caught me off guard. I'll be monitoring this
pshaw goddess sex having isn't a real area of study...oh wait..yes it is..right here between underwater basket weaving, and psychoanalysis...huh. :P I like where this is going!
you know when I was told to read this or else they would reveal my identity I wanted to smack that person but now I know what they were talking about when they said it was humorous with marks of a good story and not just a clop -fic even though it really really really is one but still I'll go through with it
"Becoming a skilled lover will comprise much of your studies.”
now if only real life worked that way....
i like the idea and everything :D
989089 ikr
despite this being a clop-fic i find it pretty funny.
I swear to Celestia, this better not end up like Romance Reports. (i.e. Building up the Twiluna, and then never getting to it.)
Oh I like where this is going. To be quite honest I like the idea of Twilight learning to become mysterious even-more-badass Twilight a lot too. I do hope we'll be having a good deal of that in addition to the sexytimes.
(Not that the sexytimes is unwelcome, I just enjoy the overall premise of this story quite a lot. And it would be a shame to not explore all parts of it.)
"Do not make me use the voice, Twilight Sparkle. I was doing so well this week."
Fucking. Gold.
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Oh, she'd need to be careful though. Personality changes like that can loose friends.
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Favorited. I really want to see where you take this man.
Wait a minute...............so Luna is a sex goddess?!
Not bad...
>secretive luna
>Twi sure as life ends with death wouldn't jump into this unaware
>her letter couldn't be any more terse and uncharacteristic of twilight
>'feel free to break laws champ'
Urge to stop reading rising, but this could still be good remain calm.
>"previously unused sections of the castle." Translation: Luna is being a loner still, or in this fics case sketchy stuff.
>"maybe she'll even let me read them."
>rude luna
>forceful commands
>forced sex, yippie for rape
>luna's associations are ridiculous. Sex a major part of the night? really?
Dislike, time for the next chapter. inb4trainwreck.
I guess me starting on a "Luna is OOC" rant would be kinda pointless... but this still seems much more fitting as a Moonlight ship rather than a Twiluna ship, but I guess I'll give it a shot and see where it goes as am not much of a clopfic fan, quite the opposite actually...
991084 oh yeah... i recall that... it made me thumb down the story...
991874
That image says so much!!!
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I agree with him completely!!!! Instantly followed!!!!
I enjoy this.. it shows that like humans.. the mood is viewed as a sexual thing. dont ask me why but even without needing to look it up wasnt the roman and greeks goddess of the moon also the one who controled like feritliy? so... sex... I like this! I really care that is a clop since i want the story. Unlike most clops this is the most plausible i have seen.
>>Twilight tried to read the letter a second time, but her eyes slid over the words without taking in any information. You may break any Equestrian law.>>
"Hot damn!" exclaimed Twilight Sparkle in sadistic glee. "In Luna's name, I am SO going to have Trixie drawn and quartered!"
I loves ta troll...
>> “Ah,” Luna said. “I see. Making love is a part of the night, Twilight Sparkle. It is the oldest ritual done in darkness. It is part of my godly domain. Becoming a skilled lover will comprise much of your studies.”>>
And NOW we see why Luna wanted the night to last forever! She's such a pervert!
(Hee hee! So much troll fuel in this story! I love it! )
>> Twilight imagined what it would be like to have Luna hold her. To kiss her...>>
And then when Luna turned to look at her, it was the muzzle of that creepy pony, Alondro, who kept stalking her burst into her daydream! Twilight retched for an hour straight and NEVER HAD SEX IN HER ENTIRE LIFE!!!
(BWAH HA HA HA!! Please keep writing lines I can corrupt! Hmm? Oh! Lord Discord is also pleased. )
I have a feeling the sex isnt needed, Luna just wants it. Trolluna.
I smiled through the entire chapter, I can't wait for more.
This is great!
I must read the rest ^_^
989089 indeed
[Our training in the sexual arts will no doubt strengthen your resolve and make you—”
“Wait, what?” Twilight asked. “What arts? I didn’t get the bit about the arts.”]
When I read this, I squirted tea out my nose... thanks a lot. Keep writing
IT BEGINS!
I was reading the "arts" part and I thought exactly what Twilight thought plus "I'm probably just tired but a re-read won't hurt." and then I got to Twilight's part and was like "Woah, déjà vu"
I'm not sure just what the fuck I'm reading, but I'm enjoying it. A lot.
989089 Indeed... (Also, LOVE the pic of the Shim Sham Sisters! xD)
991874 I shall see your Running Jack, and raise you a Screaming in Excitement Jack!
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When I read "Sex, Twillight Sparkle. I imagine you and I will be having quite a bit of it." My reactions in order...
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“Sex, Twilight Sparkle. I imagine you and I will be having quite a bit of it."
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989089
If only.
Now this is an adequate first chapter, but it comes with an inconsistency. The Letter. I understand Luna would want secrecy for the rite and Twilight would be hesitant to go through with it, but why doesn't Twilight question it in the slightest? It has been made very clear in the show that one of Twilight's greatest fears is disappointing Celestia (Lesson Zero anyone?), The fact that she doesn't is very baffling and out of character without proper motivation or buildup.
Now I've seen some people complain in the comments that she's being trained to act rude or she's being coerced and that's all incorrect. She's been given time for the sole purpose of thinking the deal over. I've read a shitload of books, so this is not the first time I've heard of Tantric Magic, but mutual willingness tends to be a key feature of those rites and she's been given time to think it over.
And I'd be disappointed if the guards did leave when Twilight first asked. They're trained to respect authority and command. Why should they listen to this meek and timid filly? Luna made it clear that it would be part of her training to help her (possibly) rule. Twilight needs confidence in her own command abilities.
From just reading this chapter,
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"You may break any Equestrian law."
...Even murder? Because if that's true, I'd totaly go on a random killing spree.
...Huh?
Please tell me that I wasn't the only one to think of Darth Zannah from this chapter.
991893 my responce is the same!
Yes yes twilight yes Do it say yes
Well shit, now I'm hoping that there ends up being more to thing Dark Apprentice thing than just the sex. Of course, that's nice too, but I can see a lot more potential in this than just a bit of clop.
In fact sex was a ritual used in the olden time's when it was believed a kiss was a way for demons and angels to seal a deal or contract on humans. But when a powerful deal came, a kiss was not strong enough to hold such a powerful contract only sex was powerful enough to seal the deal. A very old ritual done in the ancient religions i just can't remember which?
Cadence may be Princess of Love, but we all knew Luna is Princess of the Luvins
Luna sounds like a sith lord. She can only have 1 apprentice and is teaching her the ways of the dark side... Of magic.
I can't wait to see what juicy new powers Twilight gets, but now every time Luna says "my dark apprentice" I'm going to hear it in Palpatine's voice. Twilight will be best sith lord! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png
998570 Opening a folding chair like a bawss
I... don't know what to think of this...
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Never expected to find myself reading a clopfic, but the humor is quite good. And the bluntness of Luna's sex comments, and how she sounds so calm about it, caught me off guard.
I'll be monitoring this
That was rude.
Insta-fave.
pshaw goddess sex having isn't a real area of study...oh wait..yes it is..right here between underwater basket weaving, and psychoanalysis...huh.
:P I like where this is going!
you know when I was told to read this or else they would reveal my identity I wanted to smack that person but now I know what they were talking about when they said it was humorous with marks of a good story and not just a clop -fic even though it really really really is one but still I'll go through with it
TwiLuna story?
7 chapters?
Dark secrets?
Clopfic?
Pinkie be a dear and help me here.
ALL MY YES!
No one else commented on Phobomelos' name?
A good song, that.