Not much is said about fluttershy when she was young, other then she loved animals. Did she have any friends? People always thought of fluttershy was an innocent pony who wouldn't hurt anyone, until people saw what she was really made of. How did she get that way? Was she always like this or did someone teach her?
Fluttershy has had a friend who changed her completely. From being shy and helpless, to having enough courage to take action during a problem. But this pony has been gone for so long, she forgot almost everything she learned. Sure she has new friends but, this pony was more then just her friend. This pony was like a brother.
After finding something that reminded her of him, she went into a depression. Friends tried to help, but she just wanted to be alone at the time to cope with her emotions. She never said anything about him. All that happened was time passes, and she slowly forgot her first friend.
(This is my first story, so leave some comments on how I could improve, and what I'm overdoing)
I don't consider this a romance, but my friend said it "sorta" is
Good so far. Let's see: Cheak should be check. Wepon should be weapons. Insted should be instead.
Apart from those, it's good.
I usually don't like sad, but this is good. Favorited.
Definitely good. Just way to many spelling errors. Keep it up though.
PLEASE hire an editor!
Other than that, awesome fic!
979999 to be honest, i have the spelling ability of a third grader... and i cheaked over it like 3 times before submitting ._.
time well spent :D
980270 I have a feeling I'm being trolled.
I only jest. There's nothing better than checking a book for errors 3 times.
Have a stache.
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I didn't see too many spelling errors...unless you edited it. It's not bad, but it's a little hard to wrap my head around, but that's just me being hypercritical. O verall I like the idea and I wanna see where this goes. Favorited
980270
That's a pretty good story! Other than the spelling errors, its completly good! Keep up the good work!
Try checking out my story sometime, too! You might get ideas for new stories!
Liked since it deserves it!
already started to tear up
980294 I'm not trolling its just I never really gave a crap about spelling sense my freshman year in highschool where I wrote an essay using text symbols insted of actaul words
Plus I only cheaked to make sure all of me *I's* were capitalized :D
"No," Fluttershy said. "Wilson was like a older brother to me. Always protecting and teaching me new things. If I never met him, I might have been dead."
Ah... I see. The 'friend stage.'
Incomplete?
1188684 well everyone said "omg make a romance fanfic cuz there awesome" (and by everyone it was like... 3 people)
i wanted to make a massive ball buster, thats kind of what i did with my other ones
I WAS going to make an epilouge... but was to lazy :D
Lets go cheak on her."
*check