Good morning, afternoon, night, or whenever you're reading this. My name is Edward, aka 'patient 42', and I am currently residing in an insane asylum.
Why?
I suppose it all started When the ruler of this place called Equestria tasked her personal student, Twilight Sparkle, to travel to Earth and study the human race.
Unfortunately for Twilight, when she teleported to our world she, well... she appeared in the middle of the road. Right in front of my car. Needless to say, this put a pretty big dent in her expedition. ...as well as my car's bumper.
Sounds crazy, right? But hey, maybe thats the reason why I'm in this cell.
Point is, The story I'm about to tell you is the tale of events sparked by that ill-fated night.
note: In this plane of existence, the franchise "My Little Pony" does not exist. In short; this is not, nor will it ever be, a 'brony meets pony' story.
Also, on a more recent note, I had this idea and began writing way back in S2, so this is in no way inspired by EqG. (also, its non-alicorn twilight)
exploding turtles?
"Hello!" *BOOOM*
this is a great start! will wait for moar ^^
1826307 Darn, I wanted to do the mine turtle reference!
moar!!
More please.
dat last line
Dude when is the next chapter coming?
2617797 some time eventually. the story is still in the thought process
Honestly... I saw my feed and saw "Twilight" and "Car" in the same title... it peaked interest...
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This is amazing.
If you do six impossible things before breakfast, avoid relating any of them to a psychologist before going to Milliways.
Oh my you'd better continue this man! Such an awesome start! Please don't keep us waiting! And we need more LFD as well! Come on! your killing us!
You had me at "Whoppers". Those things are FUCKING DELICIOUS. Also loved the asdfmovie reference at the end! Have a fave and like!
Very good so far!
I like this. That is all.
Subject 42 had emergency towels in his car. You sly motherfucker.
more plz
More needed now please
3402996 Of course, man. you always need to know where your towels are.
I want more
I'm calling it now. He's in an asylum in Equestria and is a pony.
Okay, definitely watching this one. You've peaked my curiosity. So when can we expect an update?
Please continue this story, it holds immense literary promise.
Is it a coincidence that his patinet number is 42 and he has a bunch of towels with him?
Great job by the way! *faves*
It would have been pretty funny if instead you wrote, Needless to say, this put a pretty big dent in her expedition. ...as well as my Expedition.
See, if you've got Patient 42 and towels, then surely a Ford has to fit in there somewhere?
I noticed some strange word choices. Gauss instead of gauze. Whelp instead of welt. Rout instead of route.
*I'd*
A few errors, lovely concept. Excellent job, sire. I do enjoy a good bit of misplaced equine adventure now and again.
I wonder if twilight will talk here and maybe Edward can look it up on the internet with 'the unicorn' watching him....and then they see a whole fan fiction and episodes of M.L.P!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1 PRICELESS!
Im expectin' Twi' to think that she can't speak since Edward probably wouldn't understand her if she did say somethin'. FAV!
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Doubt that'll happen.
3403182 Edwards father drives a ford pickup. Does that count?
Looks decent. Already I could come up with some outcomes for the end already, but it would be daring to do that. I'll just lean back and enjoy the show...
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Key word: HANDS.
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This has potential. Too early to really say if this will be a great story, but the premise and writing quality are certainly there.
Unrelated, even before MLP, I'm pretty sure that if I were to meet a unicorn, I'd be more surprised if it couldn't talk than if it could. Unicorns in fiction always talk. Last Unicorn, Apprentice Adept, Narnia...unicorns are intelligent, and talking is just something they're able to do. I can certainly understand shock at meeting one, but being surprised that a unicorn talks makes about as much sense as meeting a pegasus or gyrphon then being surprised that they can fly. Especially in this case, since our protagonist has already seen that Twilight understands that he was treating her, helped, and nodded in response to something he'd said.
He has no excuse for not anticipating that she'll be able to speak.
EDIT:
...oh, this chapter is almost a year old, so I suppose it's unlikely to be continued. Wonder why it was featured.
Well, at least he's helping Twi. Good so far, I await the next chapter.
-I still think we should pull his spine out for running her over...-
~Can I turn him into a coffee cup?~
(Dache, Misconduct, how about you both be quiet.)
Thanks, Nihai.
(no prob, their ideas were really stupid anyway.)
EDIT: Aww, it hasn't updated for about a year? AAARRRRGH!!!!!!!
3403840 I submitted it today because I finally have a solid plot, ideas, and a few chapters written. I've been preparing for all that time, and, judging by the featured box, I'd say that preperation has payed off so far.
Hm, interesting. I am curious to see where you take this.
Fun idea. Can't say I'm a huge fan of the framing story, but the actual story has an interesting premise and seems quite well done.
Reading the framing story very carefully, though, it'd be rather hilarious if it turns out that the asylum in question is in Equestria, and the doctor is a pony. Nothing in the framing story gives any indication of the species of either the doctor or the patient.
3403955 (tl;dr) i'm sorry, but... why is that here?
This... I like it, ANOTHER!!!
Classic example of using photos to attract clicks and views.
MOAR :D
Though the idea of our hero eventually landing in the funny farm despite his good intentions tries to dissuade me (I get enough asylum stuff from the fan fic of the same name), I suppose there's always the possibility that you'll resolve that somehow, or maybe not. But I don't think they keep people in asylums just for telling impossible stories, even if they are convinced said people believe them to be true... it's only a matter of if the person is a threat to society or themselves, right? Then again maybe he has a mental breakdown at some point for whatever reason. Maybe Twilight rubs off on him.
Anyway I'll be following this. First chapter is a nice solid start that sets everything up, and there's some nice anticipation ("How high will our hero jump when he hears Twilight answer him?" "How peeved will she be that he didn't tell her how to use the toilet?" etc)
3403762 I still say they're in Equestria.