Chapter 5
Twilight stirred from her unconscious state, the sweet scent of breakfast filling her nostrils. Her eyes fluttered open, looking around to see where she was. The room was easily identified as the cabin’s living room, which meant that she was on the couch. She couldn’t recall how she had gotten there though. The last thing she could remember was that snake, shuddering at the terrifying recollection.
Trying to push the memory out of her head, she looked into the kitchen. She saw me standing over the stove, but she couldn’t see the stove itself on account of the fridge blocking her view. However, she concluded thatever I was fixing smelled delicious.
About this time, I flipped the last two pancakes onto the serving plate and spread butter over them. Setting the plate to the side, I reached past the foldable griddle to unplug it. Gathering up the utensils, I piled them into the empty batter bowl, and I put them all in the sink before filling the bowl with warm water. I’d have to let the griddle’s cooking-plates cool before washing them, so I moved on to put the tub of butter back in the fridge.
As I closed the refrigerator door, I turned around to see how Twilight was doing. She was laying there with her legs folded beneath her and her head held upright, looking at me in a sort of blank expression. To know she was awake and presumably well brought a smile to my face, though my stomach turned a bit as I recalled how foolish I had been earlier. Trying to focus on more positive thoughts, I stepped back into the kitchen and grabbed the plate of pancakes.
“Wakey wakey, eggs and bakey,” I said light heartedly as I stepped into the room. Her eyes instantly focused on the plate piled with three stacks of four pancakes. I grinned again at the surprised look on her face.
“I didn’t know what kind you liked, so I went ahead and made them all regular, or ‘classic’, as I prefer.” I set the plate on the small eating table, which was pushed into the corner to the right of the couch.
“You eat pancakes, right?” I asked. After all, I honestly had no idea what she ate. We had not yet reached that topic in our earlier conversation before things went pear-shaped.
Twilight nodded, looking from the pancakes to me. “Y-yes, of course. They smell delicious… thank you.”
“No, thank you,” I said politely as I nodded my head a bit. I turned and headed back to the kitchen to get the rest of the food, as well as the utensils. “What about eggs? You eat scrambled eggs?”
“Sometimes, but not that often. Why, did you make some?”
“Yeah, I made a few,” I said clearly so that she could hear me from the kitchen. I lifted out a couple of plates from the cabinet and set them on the counter. “…Don’t suppose you eat bacon though.” I grabbed two sets of silverware and set them on the plates.
“What’s bacon?” Twilight asked plainly.
I grinned as I picked up the serving plate with eggs and bacon in one hand, and the eating plates in the other. “Oh, it’s only the second half of what is considered an average breakfast,” I said as I walked back into the living room and set the plates on the table. “Though, if you’re looking for specifics, it’s fried strips of pig meat.”
Twilight’s curious expression shifted drastically to one of horror, her pupils shrinking and her jaw dropping. Guess she was a vegetarian, just like the ponies here were.
“Now, before you go jumping to conclusions, allow me to explain,” I said abruptly in hopes she was still open to listening to reason. “Humans, as a species, are omnivores, meaning we eat plants and animals. But don’t fret, because we have considerably picky tastes when it comes to our meats. In this region the most preferred meats are cow, also known as beef, pigs, aka pork, chicken, aka… chicken, and turkey.” I took a step toward Twilight, however she recoiled her head slightly at my advancement. “So don’t worry. We don’t eat horses or ponies. …and yes, there are ponies here, though they hardly share any resemblance to you aside from having hooves,” I concluded with a shrug.
Twilight closed her mouth and broke eye contact, looking down in contemplation. I grabbed a strip of bacon and folded it into my mouth, chewing on the savory strip of meat. My actions caught Twilight’s attention. She looked back up to me with a concerned look on her face. An awkward silence fell over the two of us.
My chewing slowed to a stop before I rolled my eyes. “Look, I’m not going to eat you, okay? That is literally never going to happen. So do you wanna take a seat and have some pancakes before they get cold, or would you prefer sitting there staring at me for a while longer?” I said in a playful tone.
An audible gurgling noise came from Twilight’s stomach. “…Yeah, okay,” she said, looking down to her tummy. “I really am hungry now that I think about it.”
I set a plate with silverware at her place on the table before pulling the seat out and motioning to it formally. “Then by all means, please, be seated.”
Twilight carefully got down from the couch and walked over to the chair, hopping up on it. She sat on her rump with her forehooves in-between her legs. I heard a comment in the back of my head at how cute she lookedwhen sitting like that as I pushed the chair back to the table, making sure to leave her enough room. However, seeing that neither the chair nor the table were made ponies, the table was considerably tall for her.
“I could get a pillow for you to sit on, if you want,” I asked her.
She looked up to me with a small smile just noticeable on her face. “I’d appreciate it.”
I reached over to the couch and grabbed a thick, firm pillow from beside the arm rest. “Here,” I said, pulling the chair back out. I placed the pillow on the seat once Twilight had hopped down. I helped her back up on the pillow and pushed the chair back to the table.
“How’s that?” I inquired.
“Much better, thanks,” Twilight said sweetly.
I tipped an invisible hat politely in response before moving to the chair adjacent to hers and taking a seat. As I reached my fork out to snag a couple of pancakes, I heard a clatter as Twilight winced. My hand froze as I turned to Twilight, who was rubbing her bandage. A rather dismayed look was on her face as she looked down to the fork, which was laying half way between her plate and the pancakes.
“…Something the matter?” I asked, genuinely concerned.
“Ugh, I can’t even levitate anything!” She looked up to me, blinking at the perplexed look on my face. “…Levitation is one of the most basic spells of magic,” she said matter-of-factly.
“Right… so, you need a hand?” I asked, looking down to the fork.
“I can’t make a hand without my magic, remember?”
“No, no,” I said, grinning at her misunderstanding. “If someone ‘needs a hand’ then they are in need of help.”
“Oh, you mean like lending someone a hoof?”
“Well, I guess that makes sense for ponies…” I zoned out for a second, wondering how many more ponified puns there must be where she comes from. …Would ‘ponified’ even count as one?
Anyways, I pushed the pony-pun-conundrum to the back of my head for later. Using my fork I skewered a couple of pancakes and gingerly moved them to her plate, after which I put my fork down and moved hers back beside the plate. I retracted my hands and smiled hopefully.
“Is that enough pancakes for you, or you want some more?” I inquired.
“That’s enough for now, thank you,” she replied kindly.
“Okie dokie then. Would you like some eggs? Maybe some ba-” I stopped myself, remembering who I was talking to. “Oh… right.”
Twilight’s nose scrunched a bit. “Yeah, no… thanks,” She said, trying to turn down the awkward offer.
“Yeah…” I reached over as subtly as I could and turned the plate so that the bacon was facing me. Picking up my fork again, I stabbed a stack of four pancakes and brought them to my plate. I looked across the table for the syrup, only to mentally slap myself and sigh.
“Derp-it-all, I forgot the syrup,” I said as I stood up from my seat. As I turned I looked down to Twilight, sitting there looking at her pancakes. Her forehooves rested against the side of the table. Again, I slapped myself as another realization hit me.
“Hooves, you fool! How is she to eat without hands?” I thought to myself agitatedly. I stood there a second to ponder the question before sighing and heading towards the kitchen. I just hoped that she wouldn’t eat by shoving her… face, I guess, into the food and snarfing it down. Of course, I had already pegged her to be more civilized than that… then again it was still technically an animal.
“Gah, I don’t know,” I concluded, rolling my eyes. “I just hope she doesn’t make a mess.”
I opened the cabinet and grabbed the nearest open syrup bottle, eyeing it for a brief second to make sure it had enough for the number of pancakes I had fixed. I closed the cabinet and turned to head back to the living room, but froze. I thought I could see Twilight using the utensils. Not just flailing around with them either, oh no. She was clearly holding one in each hoof.
As I got closer to the table, I was sure I wasn’t just seeing stuff. I stood by my place at the table, my face exhibiting a stupefied expression as I watched her cut her pancakes.
“Uhh…” I uttered unintentionally.
Twilight looked up to me, raising a brow. “What…?”
“What, um…” I paused, rubbing my chin scruff as I tried to piece together how I was going to ask this question. “Well, if… if you don’t mind my asking, how are you holding that without hands?” I finally spoke up, pointing to the silverware.
“Oh, well you see, there are a series of neurocells that run through the inner-most circle of our hooves that allow us to…” Her expression flattened slightly when she noticed the extremely confused look on my face.
“…Because magic,” she said bluntly.
I nodded slowly. “Riiight… you want syrup, right?” I asked, trying not to think of her freaky hoof powers.
“Yes please,” She replied.
I drizzled the syrup across her cut-up pancakes before taking a seat and drizzling syrup across my un-cut pancakes. She began eating almost as soon as I had poured the syrup, however I sat there quietly to let my pancakes absorb the syrup. Sitting there also gave me a few moments to go over my thoughts and make sure that what I was about to do went well. After a minute or two of staring at my pancakes on contemplation, I looked up to my guest.
“Hey, Twilight?” I asked politely.
Twilight swallowed her mouthful of syrupy pancake mush and looked to me. “Yes?”
“I… I’d like to apologize for earlier this morning.” I looked down to the table and rubbed my brow as I continued. “I know it was early, but I don’t usually go nutsy like that… Also, I’m sorry about all that with Brain. He really is harmless, but looking back I know that wasn’t exactly the best way to show it. Especially considering your phobia.”
The uncomfortable rumblies in my tummy inclined me to pause a moment to see how Twilight would react. Her gaze seemed to look distant for a moment, deep in thought.
“…It’s okay,” she said plainly. “As I said before, I had expected much worse, considering the foreign nature of this place. For all I knew, the first person I met could try to kill me. In any case, I was most certainly not expecting a hearty pancake breakfast.” She let out a single, somewhat nervous chuckle.
“Speaking of which,” she continued, “These are very good.”
I smiled meekly. “Thank you. I do like to think that if I was good at anything, it would be making pancakes.”
“Well that you certainly are,” Twilight said, stuffing another couple of pancake chunks into her mouth.
“Thanks, I appreciate it.”
My smile faded as I worked up the nerve to continue. Twilight looked at me, obviously taking notice of the concerned look on my face. Her chewing slowed almost to a stop before she swallowed.
“…What is it?” she asked slowly.
I. Looking back, I always have been a bundle of nerves when confronting someone about something that I feared would bring them displeasure. I’m not quite sure why, but it certainly didn’t help me in situations like this.
“Twilight, you need to know,” I began, in a calm tone of voice. “Last night, when you arrived… I hit you with my car.” I paused for a quick moment, figuring out what to say next. “Now, I know how it sounds right off the bat, but trust me. It was a complete accident. I mean, you literally teleported directly in front of my car. I didn’t even know I had hit something- er… you, until I stopped and looked behind me.” I held my hands up defensively. “It was a total accident for which I did, and do, feel bad for, and I truly am sorry for hurting you like I did.”
I crossed my arms, looking around the table in nervous anticipation of Twilight’s reply to the newfound information. After what felt like half an hour, to me at least, I was met with a response.
“…That’s alright,” Twilight said plainly.
I turned to her and cocked an eyebrow, my mouth hanging open slightly in a stupor. “Y-you sure?”
“Well, yeah.” She shrugged. “I mean, you honestly don’t seem like the kind of guy who’d do something like that intentionally. And even if you somehow were, you still took the time to doctor my wounds, and even make a hearty breakfast for me. So, considering the circumstances, I understand that it was an accident, and I appreciate all that you’ve done for me.” A genuine smile spread on her face.
I couldn’t help but chuckle at how well she had taken it. It certainly did relieve any worry of some enraged freak-out. I looked back down to my pancakes and grinned, enjoying the refreshed feeling of letting something off my chest without the situation devolving into some inflamed argument or rant.
I cut a slice out of my stack of syrup-soaked pancakes and stuffed it in my mouth, feeling like I was able to truly savor the sweetness of it. I chewed slowly to make it last before eventually swallowing. As I did, I couldn’t help but feel like it was going to be a good day.
To those of you who are wondering why Edward is describing Twilight's actions in the first two paragraphs, he's adding a few things based on how he thought they would've happend so as to improve the feel of his 'story'. 
also, upon readin feedback, allow me to elaborate upon Twilight's reaction to Edward eating meat.
She is not 'freaking out', so much as she is concerned by the revelation that he does eat meat. After all, if you met something that was twice your size that told you "by the way, I eat meat," right before a meal, the i'm sure you would be a little concerned as well. On the other hand, if she was freaking out, she's be trying to get away and/or begin screaming. 
so do with this information what you will, dear readers. 
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While this is overall nice...
I once again find that carnivore freak out. I can't help it, that always bug me. Ponies live in a world with other sapient carnivores (griffons, dragons, possibly minotaurs), so they're well aware of meat eating as a culture, custom, and/or necessity. Not only that, Fluttershy feeds meat to her carnivorous animals on a regular basis. And yet this never bugs any of them.
However, in every story I've ever seen where ponies encounter humans, the moment they learn humans eat meat, they freak out. It makes no sense. Even in this situation, Twilight should at best have been a little nervous with a conversation like this-
"You eat meat?"
"Yes, humans are omnivores, which means-"
"You won't eat me, will you?"
"Absolutely not. I'd never eat another sapient creature."
"Oh, that's alright then."
...sorry, but the "ponies terrified of humans for eating meat" cliché really pisses me off. Still, other than that, good chapter.
An understanding.
This friendship shall surely blossom until the darkness makes their attempt; victorious they stand.
For now, they must strengthen themselves for the tragedies to come.
Awaiting further releases.
i hope this updates quicker next time
3915467 Perfection takes time young one. Like designing an engine. Things must fit together perfectly, if not then the machine will fail.
3915440 I personally think it was downplayed a lot. I mean there really wasn't any conflict. Usually it's paragraph or two long and the after affects are felt for chapters to come. But this?
"If you think I'm gonna eat you, you're a fool. Now shaddap and eat your breakfast."
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You make a lot of valid points, but I assume most fics run off of the following assumption:
A fairly large creature that no one had ever seen before suddenly appears (and 90% of the time, it also comes from the Everfree). If and when they learn that the human eats meat, it's not too out of the question that they would be cautious, or even freak out, since most things from the Everfree are quite carnivorous and deadly.
The same argument mostly holds true in reverse, as well, if a pony ends up in Earth, like here.
Also, ponies are large supporters of the "mob mentality": one of them freaks out, then the others freak out, etc.
Yes, it's a somewhat overused cliche, but it's also one that, realistically (or as realistic as we can get talking about cartoon horses), would be rather accurate.
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Yeah, about the only thing she had to freak out about was when he said he ate pigs and cows, and that is only because those things are sapient in Equestria.
To the author: I was going to comment on those first two paragraphs until I read the note at the end, but even then, you should put something in the paragraphs to specify that he is in fact guessing. The author notes are for sharing thoughts about the chapter, not relaying important information. All important information should be in the story itself.
Also, though I don't recall fully what the beginning was like, it is definitely an odd story device you are using... Not necessarily story breaking, but... odd. Usually when a story is started sometime after the beginning to were the protagonist starts telling everything that led up to present time, it is not very long before the reader is 'caught-up' and the story progresses from that point on. You, obviously, are still going through Edward recalling his story and it seems it is going to remain as such for quite a while longer. This is a rare way to do a story, but not unheard of; Emperor's New Groove was something similar, after all.
Anyways, good luck with the next chapter.
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In fairness, the character assumed it was meat in general. We know that pigs and cows are both sapient in equestria. While such a conversation would have eased her tension more, hinting that this is a further cry from her home than intended, it did not take place. Instead he simply stated that ponies were not on the menu. While doing so, he listed several creatures that were. Among those creatures was cow, rather beef. A little freak out is justified in that context. For all she knows, ponies share control of the planet and are therefore off the menu. When the president or prime minister has a foreign dignitary for dinner, it is typically frowned upon to actually have the foreign dignitary for dinner...lol
... I really started reading this one hour ago, and then it it updated xD
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I feel I need to argue with it being realistic. Ponies have been shown to be highly intelligent, despite mob mentality. While I could easily see many ponies starting a panic over a meat eating creature out of the Everfree - or freaking out over being in a world of large meat eaters - the two who I would never believe it of are Twilight and Fluttershy, even this situation.
Twilight - she knows she was unconscious and injured and could easily be dispatched at that point. However, the human took her into his home and tended to her injuries. If he was at all inclined to eat her, she would never have woken up to learn of it. And even if he might be future inclined, simple cost/benefit analysis of the abundance of food in his house shows she's not worth the effort.
Fluttershy - she knows carnivore behavior excellently. Her first reaction to seeing a vicious, angry carnivore in its natural habitat (the manticore, episode 2) was to make friends with it. In point of fact, the only time she's shown any fear of carnivores was due to a phobia (Dragonshy) and when one was actively hunting her to eat (Feeling Pinkie Keen). If a human came out of the Everfree, she would communicate, learn his/her dietary preferences, and explain the rules of not eating her friends, and then provide him/her food just like she does her carnivore animal friends. If she wound up in the human world, while she'd be more scared in general, this scenario wouldn't scare her at all because taking in an injured creature and tending to it is exactly what she would do.
My main issue with this cliché isn't its existence or frequency. It's that, nine times out of ten, the two ponies who I could never believe would freak out over carnivorous human/humans are the ones starting the panic or quite easily joining in. And Twilight and Fluttershy, by their natures - one a heavy intellectual and the other more sociable outside her own species - most resistant to mob mentality get swept up in it.
So, hang on, Twilight can't levitate anything, but she can still use the magic in her hooves? Does she have magic or doesn't she? I suppose it will be addressed eventually if you already have an idea for what you want magic to be like in this story.
3915734 inert magic that all ponies have
and then... brain is all over the pancakes
3915709 She is not 'freaking out', so much as she is concerned by the revelation that he does eat meat. After all, if you met something that was twice your size that told you "by the way, I eat meat," right before a meal, then i'm sure you would be a little concerned as well.
On the other hand, if she was freaking out, she's be trying to get away and/or begin screaming.
so relax, bro.
3915413 do you even see how many likes this story has?
3915413 By the other people not sharing your opinion.
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Here's the thing, though. Humans are (mostly) an entirely new culture, species, etc and considering that the omnivorous species they know of (Griffons, dragons, etc) aren't as... 'nice' as ponies are, a sudden realization of "being killed and maybe eaten is a possibility" is startling, at best.
Also, something worth considering, is that ponies are prey animals. As much as it would logically be otherwise, the herd and prey mentality of ponies would mandate (in Twilight's case, anyway,) at least a small freak-out.
In Canon, the only two Griffons who are shown: A bully in Gilda, and a chef (specifically, a baker) in Gustave, are never shown consuming meat. The closest thing would be eggs in either case.
Finally, this was planned around Season 2, so Twilight may or may not have actually met Gustave depending on when, exactly, this is in the canon, so her only experiences with other omnivores would be Spike, (who eats vegetarian and has probably never had meat) Gilda (whom she never really spoke with, save perhaps at Pinkie's party) and perhaps Iron Will, (with whom she also never really spoke at all, if not at length) so her experience with carnivorous species is extremely limited if not nonexistent. (Note that this ignores the grown dragons, as they are likely by-choice purely lithovores by that point.)
So, yes, while it's cliché, it's a good cliché, and that's what makes subversions interesting as well. It may be tired, yes, to have it always go freakout -> "don't eat pone" -> "oh that's okay, just don't eat me" but that's what makes new and interesting (but still played-straight) spins on it new and interesting.
3915734 my headcanon is that she hurt her horn when Edward hit her. Everypony has magic in the series, pegasi for example, how would you explain a filly flying with wings at that small size? Magic. Unicorn's horn just redirect the magic to more controlled tasks.
Well, that's just my headcanon.
First or Third Person, make up your mind.
Your literally NEVER going to eat twilight?.... Well see how you feel after a few chapters bro...
How are you holding those?
Because Shut up.
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giggity! giggity!
3916128 As opposed to figuratively eating her
3915969 I am with you for the most part in that it would make them uncomfortable, especially in a small town like Ponyville where there is no resident griffon population, but you are very wrong on Twilight's personal exposure. She grew up in Canterlot which would have exposed her to griffons on several fronts and made her relatively comfortable with the concept of eating meat.
After all, you meet individuals from all over in a big city between work opportunities and tourism, and Canterlot is the capitol to boot so it would certainly have at least some full time diplomatic staff from other nations which guarantees at least a small griffon population. I figure there is at least one restaurant that serves meat somewhere in the city because of this, and the palace kitchens are almost certainly capable of preparing meat. One other thing you have to remember is that that kind of exposure will almost certainly result in at least a few ponies trying and enjoying meat because their systems are capable of digesting it, so there is probably something of a niche market for meat in the city which will make it at least familiar to all residents of the city.
The result is that Twilight, Rarity, and especially Rainbow are probably all at least somewhat familiar with others eating meat at the diner table, Fluttershy is obviously used to carnivores from taking care of her animals even if she clearly did not spend time around Gilda (which means she probably was not close to any griffons given her personality), and I cannot see Pinkie minding even if she has not directly dealt with it before. Really the only one of the mane six I can see having an issue is Applejack, although most of the population of Ponyville would be uncomfortable and the flower trio would probably start a panic when they found out.
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Twilight was also the kind of girl to spend all day in a library reading things, and interacting with others maybe once in a never.
There's also an (unfortunate) flaw in your logic: We can only know for sure what is actually shown in canon. Perhaps her first time meeting a Griffon would be Gustave, or maybe she knew a Griffon from her time studying under Celestia in Canterlot. My point is, we don't know.
As for ponies eating meat...
Ponies are herbivores. They can consume small amounts of meat with little-to-no detrimental effects, however regularly would be a very, very bad thing.
I would also assume that while the Palace kitchens can prepare meat (likely via a meat-eating chef) I doubt that they would do so more often than the average omnivore/carnivore ambassadors visiting, if such a thing happens at all.
...then again, all of this is speculation, as the closest thing to 'meat eating' we've seen in canon is Fluttershy (of all ponies) feeding fish to her animal friends. And maybe Chrysalis, depending on how you define 'meat eating'...
3916128 Bow chicka bow wow!
Eh...
Is it me, or is this story slowly... petering... ... out...
I mean, the biggest thing that loomed over the entire plot was that, "oh no, what will she do when she realizes I hit her with the car?!"
...And now that's over. All tension gone. Suddenly, everyone is cool and reasonable.
So, is the story gonna keep spinning its wheels like this, or is a plot going to happen at some point?
Also, the writer has a bad habit of making Edward go on long, uninterrupted diatribes that explain every nuance of a thing to Twilight with all her potential questions answered before she can ponder them for herself. Then Twilight goes, "oh, okay," and again, no more conflict.
I mean, at least break up his explanations by noting her expressions as she absorbs what he has to say. Otherwise it feels like Twilight just got handed an info pamphlet, and understood everything perfectly.
I mean... be it dialogue, or actual plotthreads... could something just be allowed to fucking HAPPEN in this story?
At first it felt like a slow burn, but now I'm honestly wondering if she isn't just going to go home and passively mention this to anyone who asks, like it barely interrupted her week.
I don't even feel like Ed and Twilight are building any kind of relationship, because they've mostly been explaining stuff to each other and have all but entirely eschewed learning about each other's personality, views or feelings.
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If it were that kind of story, there'd be a tag.
3916513 Or perhaps... 'Eat' her... huehuehuehue
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I shall! I shall stare at it, raise my eyebrow thusly, praise it, dress it up nice, and accept it.
Also, i will inform you what i thought of this chapter. It was most excellent. I look forward to more!
3917287 Hey chicka bum bum...
3916602 You do have a good point, although I doubt Celestia let Twilight skip out on everything and I can see Twilight interrogating ambassadors on other cultures so it is not like she would be totally quiet if she were to attend a dinner or something with the griffins. We also know that Celestia was grooming her to be a princess so I think it is reasonable to assume that Twilight has dealt with griffins in the past.
As for the diet and kitchens, I am with you on that one as well. It is not something that would be done "normally", but the palace kitchens do need to be able to provide for omnivores whenever they are around (which could be full time, although there is no way to know).
I also cannot see many ponies eating meat with any kind of regularity, but it does not take many to become a small subculture and there are clearly ponies who are close to griffins so it is not unbelievable that some of the ponies could eat meat with the griffins. I think it is almost certain that Rainbow has at least tried meat at some point given her past relationship with Gilda, Celestia has probably had to do so on multiple occasions for diplomatic reasons, and there are actually decent odds that Twilight got curious at some point given her personality and easy access to meat. Also, just because eating meat regularly would be a bad thing does not mean ponies do not do it given all the destructive things humans do to their bodies.
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how did you get born?
3916602 Interestingly enough, the diet of the ponies that we see in the show more resembles vegetarian omnivores than that of true herbivores. They regularly eat eggs, make cheese, and other similar products that you wouldn't really expect to see in the diet of herbivores.
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So it seems that the expected reaction would be somewhere between a startling realization (perhaps causing an overreaction, and maybe not-so-little fright) to Twilight's version of "Cool story bro. Gimme the fuckin' pancakes, already."
Then again, considering that—in this fic—she had just woke from facing a large fit of ophidiophobia, perhaps it was hindbrain instincts on top of the realization? Toss in the unfamiliar setting, and the conflicting familiarity and kindness (and likely a bit of a hurt, betrayed feeling due to mistakes on both their parts, that could have been caused by Discord's machinations) and you get a skittish pony who just might be glancing around to make note of the exits.
Now I'm getting all irritated thinking about all of the possibilities and not knowing for sure whether or not things are canon...
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I don't want to die
I sometimes wish I'd never been born at all
Major tense confusion throughout, also with the grammatical person in the beginning. The story as a whole so far seems a bit interesting, although I would have liked to see a bit more development on the fact that he HIT her with the car. If I was Twilight, I wouldn't have brushed it off as if nothing had just been said. I would have at least had her a bit more skeptical. Overall, the story is...decent. At least the protagonist isn't a Gary Stu or anything along those lines. Good luck!
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Just as we've yet to see Griffons (a mixup of carnivorous creatures) consume meat (as far as I know).
Dairy products fit within the grey area between herbivore and carnivore, and seem to be more of a mammal thing, though honestly I only remember the eggs used in baking...
Lactose (the sugar in milk) is broken down by lactase (an enzyme that, in most mammals, has a large reduction in activity after weaning) which would normally be absent, so maybe they've kept eating lactose-rich foods, perhaps after being introduced to cheeses by omnivorous or carnivorous species?
As for the eggs, this could also be the result of interactions with other species, and they can actually be digested by horses and ponies easily and regularly compared to flesh.
All in all, vegetarian omnivore looks iffy, herbivore seems more likely considering their diets and the situation...
(But I'm not a biologist or scientist, so...)
3917961 Agreed on all counts. The expected reaction would definitely be mild surprise given that the predatory features on humans are not immediately obvious so a pony would be unlikely to realize it until told unless they took a close look at the teeth or saw us eating meat, but Twilight is dealing with a lot of shit at the moment which is throwing her reactions all over the place.
Cliché or no, this story is hella good. You need more updates.
OR SO HELP ME I WILL SEND THE OWL MAN AFTER YOU.
hmm,
wonder what'll happen next
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Mate, have you ever gone to someone's party and there's that one bloke who's having this incredible rant? And when you listen to him he's the funniest bloke you ever heard but after awhile he just seems to be repeating himself? And now you only give polite chuckles as he goes on?
Well this is kinda what this story is turning out to be, we've spent 5 chapters in a log caben (exception with start of chapter one) and now we're left waiting for something to happen. Which strictly speaking, should have happened awhile ago (and I mean something to push the story along, not a snake that makes her pass out and throws us back into the loop) so I'm just left wondering, when's this going to move forward?
Don't get me wrong, what you have is good, especially the very start of chapter 1 but this needs to go somewhere. Soon. Other whys it's going to be harder on the readers to keep reading and you as an author to keep writing.
Needs more romance.
At this point I cannot generate any interest in this story.
It started out interesting enough for me to forgive it's flaws, but after the first chapter it has devolved into an endless string of clichés.
3919492 I can only imagine how that will turn out
MFW this chapter:
Now listen with your eyes closed.
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Is that a Bohemian Rhapsody reference of all things?
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I think it's actually science, but it's just complicated enough to just say magic.
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you sir are horrible for telling me to listen to that with my eyes closed