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  • 9w, 5d
    Character Shipping Q&A

    8 comments · 188 views
  • 29w, 4d
    Well, that's that.

    5 comments · 224 views
  • 38w, 7h
    From Concept to Completion: The Commission Process

    9 comments · 432 views
  • 45w, 6d
    What is a (wo)man? A miserable pile of secrets?

    Note: (wo) in parenthesis was meant to imply this blog's title can apply to either gender, not that this blog is going to be a rant against women.

    It should come as no surprise to anyone who's spent over an hour with this fandom that a noticeable vibe of misanthropy exists. That's not saying that everyone who likes this show hates people, but more that there's a certain amount of fantasy that some people speak a little too fondly of. That's also not saying this phenomenon is distinct to the My Little Pony fandom, either; in fact, this post was inspired in part by a CNN article about Avatar.

    Still, it's no secret that when compared to Earth, Equestria seems simpler, brighter, more tolerant, and all in all, happier. Maybe these ponies, in their simple society, have figured something out that humans forgot once we moved from rural towns to bustling cityscapes...

    But at the same time, their society is fairly technologically advanced. Sure, they don't have skyscrapers growing out of every settlement, but who needs a multi-story high-rise when a third of your population can literally live in the sky? Similarly, they don't need to focus much on agricultural R&D; earth pony magic handles that—a single pair of self-motivated siblings can run an entire orchard without any crafted tool more advanced than a plough. So it's not necessarily that these ponies' personalities allowed them to make a more pristine, eco-friendly society; it's that their tools (i.e., magic) were better suited for that.

    I'll agree that Equestrian society looks nicer, but a society's appearance doesn't amount to jack shit. Google the Mass Games in North Korea—those look amazing, but I'm not sure they're indicative of North Korea's habitability. If we boil away the architecture and tools and focus on the citizens—the Equestrians—what are we left with? What makes their day-to-day so much different than humans', other than the circumstances they were born into?

    You could say that they're more tolerant—three distinct races with different abilities live in harmony! But yet, they feared a creepy outsider—Zecora (who happens to be African-esque)—until they got to know her. I'm not saying Equestrians are racist, but that fear of strange, different outsiders is the very mental seed that sprouts into discrimination of all types.

    You could say that Equestria has a friendlier society, but given that our lens for viewing this society is from a show that's called Friendship is Magic, I don't think we're getting a wholly unbiased view of life outside of the main group of six friends. When we do, we're given someone—usually Bon Bon—who's acting rude to the main characters. And let's not forget that the schoolkids have their own pair of bullies to deal with. It's extremely clear that these ponies have friends, acquaintances, and even ponies they dislike—just like humans do. They're left with the choice of how they act towards these ponies they dislike, which is something that everyone has to deal with at some point.

    You could say that Equestria, with its tiny settlements, fosters a closer-knit society that bands together when there are hardships. But at the same time, look at how many volunteers or donors are sending time and effort to the Phillipines—which wouldn't have gotten as much attention without computer-driven mass media. Humanitarian efforts are less about helping your friends and neighbors, and more about helping someone who's the same species you are. I'm not saying that Equestrians don't do that (though there's never been an episode about that), but a town is as close-knit as it lets itself be.

    Even their cutie marks aren't that far removed from human society. Sure, having a tattoo magically appear on your butt screams "pre-destination", but they're free to interpret their cutie marks as they see fit—just within a limited range. Humans have a similar limit of the range of vocations we choose to pursue; instead of a tattoo, we're given the experiences and capabilities that our childhood caregivers expose us to.

    What it all boils down to, for me, is that—despite being tiny, colorful ponies—Equestria is a very human society. I mean that a very positive way, though—just like in Equestria, there is friendship, brightness, and happiness out there, even if sometimes, you've got to look harder to find it.

    If you compare a show for six year olds to the nightly news (where they have to report things that are out of the ordinary and often violently so), then of course Equestria's going to look better. The important thing to bear in mind about any fantasy story is that it has a narrow scope, which is the plot. No one wants to read about Frodo's terrible constipation after eating nothing but Lembas bread for two months, and they shouldn't need to in order to enjoy Lord of the Rings.

    However, if you look hard enough, you'll notice that Equestria's got enough crime to warrant a standing police force and royal guards, international disputes that often turn hostile, sickness, and death; yet, despite all that—or perhaps because of it—they've got the inner fortitude and tools available to withstand and overcome their society's imperfections.

    But at the same time, humanity does, too.

    In the end, I think it's about perspective. If you set out to find good, you'll find good; if you set out to find misery, you'll see it everywhere. The only difference is what you're hoping to find.

    49 comments · 1,108 views
  • 47w, 3d
    Merry Christmas to All...

    6 comments · 186 views
  • ...

The thick growth of the Everfree Forest harbors many secrets. Some, it shares with the adventurous souls that seek them out. Others are well-guarded for a reason.

Lyra Heartstrings, a graduate student in Canterlot University's archaeology program, is no stranger to discovering lost civilizations. When she finds a survivor from one, however, she begins helping him to restore his culture.

The question burning in the back of her mind is, "At what cost?"

This story was written as a commission for genuis101. We both know that the "Lyra and Humans" thing has been done to death, but I wouldn't have taken this project on if I couldn't breathe some fresh life into the trope.

Cover art is by Gaiascope. Follow him on Tumblr if you like his artistic style; you won't be disappointed.

Special thanks goes to my shrinking pool of pre-readers.

First Published
22nd Jan 2014
Last Modified
31st Jan 2014
#1 · 43w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Really good start. Actually interesting and original for once.

First person, don't usually see that. I'm not sure how long the fic is going to be, but I hope epic length. This has potential.

#2 · 43w, 4d ago · · 14 · Chapter 1 ·

Cool can some one tell me how to make a story im trying i got the first part and now i cant type it. derpyderp2:

#3 · 43w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


It is just over 46k words, so more like... novella length. I plan on releasing a chapter every two or three days, to give people a chance to digest them.

#4 · 43w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Curious commission piece. Never been one to jump on a "Lyra meets human" story, but I'd genuinely like to see where you take this one.

#5 · 43w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

I generally don't like HiE's, but I love your previous stories so I'll trust you.

#6 · 43w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


Chance of a sequel?

#7 · 43w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


I generally don't do sequels for commissioned pieces... but if there definitely were or definitely weren't, wouldn't saying that in the comments of the first chapter count as some sort of spoiler? :rainbowhuh:



Lyra's a little different than Gilda, but I hope she grows on you the same way.


It's almost like the ending of the first paragraph is meta! :twilightoops:

#8 · 43w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


Yes. Still, just wondering.

Nice, you write commissions? Did he pay you for it :P? Or just ask you to do it?

#9 · 43w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


This was paid, but it doesn't mean I didn't enjoy myself while writing it.

#10 · 43w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


Nice. Well, either way, I'll look forward to the rest of this, however brief the story's going to be.

#11 · 43w, 4d ago · 4 · · Chapter 1 ·

"Lyra and Humans" thing has been done to death, but I wouldn't have taken this project on if I couldn't breathe some fresh life into the trope.

Seeing how you got da skillz to pay da billz, I'll see how this pans out. :twilightsmile:

#12 · 43w, 4d ago · 3 · · Chapter 1 ·

Ususally I have low expectations for stories about Lyra and humans; however, I completely trust  in your abilities to make something original with it. Im gonna read it and find out. :ajsmug:

#13 · 43w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·



You guys are too kind. :rainbowkiss: No homo

#14 · 43w, 4d ago · 4 · · Chapter 1 ·

I don't read a lot of stories about humans interacting with ponies, for the same reason I don't read a lot of stories about humans interacting with anthropomorphic animals--a lot of the authors who write them are really supportive of the fictional species and alarmingly hostile to the real one. You've written good stories before, so I'll give this a watch and see where it goes.

#15 · 43w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


You earned the praise.

So far I think Im gonna like this. I really want to know for how long has he been in his task, and how old he really is. The fact that he is distant is another thing I like, I guess years of isolation can do that to a person.


Mysterious! Gonna take a wild guess: Chaos Something Something Something?  I am going with chaos based on this:

“The Chaos War”

As usual, looking forward to the next chapter! :twilightsmile:

#16 · 43w, 4d ago · 7 · · Chapter 1 ·


Oh god I hate that!

"Humans are corrupt, crazy, warmongering monsters. And ponehs are beautiful, peaceful and the best thing ever. I hate humans!"

I just Ugh :pinkiesick:

#17 · 43w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Reminds me a bit of 'The war of the fallen race'...

#18 · 43w, 4d ago · 1 · · Chapter 1 ·


I generally don't like HiE's, but I love your previous stories so I'll trust you.


Ususally I have low expectations for stories about Lyra and humans; however, I completely trust  in your abilities to make something original with it. Im gonna read it and find out.


I don't read a lot of stories about humans interacting with ponies <...> You've written good stories before, so I'll give this a watch and see where it goes.

I certainly agree. Normally I avoid [HiE] like a steaming turd.

(The fact that it is first person [HiE] is like a generous topping of soured milk). :pinkiesick:

My knee-jerk repulsion is tempered by the fact that Nicknack is writing this. If any one can polish this genre to a glossy lustre and make it interesting to read...

Let us see how far this rabbit hole goes. :pinkiehappy:

#19 · 43w, 3d ago · · 2 · Chapter 1 ·



#20 · 43w, 3d ago · 1 · · Chapter 1 ·

Right off the bat, this has three things I really hate; Lyra and humans, first person, and commissioning.

However, I'm reading quite a few comments that say practically the same thing, but willing to give it a chance due to your reputation, not to mention that this first chapter is well done. Therefore, I shall also give it a chance.

P.S, a quick prediction; all of humanity was turned into ponies, and he's trying to turn them back.

#21 · 43w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>3824912 i read somewhere that most novels are from 20k-40k words so unless im mixing up the word novella with something like vignette i believe its longer

#22 · 43w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>3825638 yes,yes homo:coolphoto::trollestia:

#23 · 43w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Pretty nice start. :pinkiesmile:

Oh, and also. (Can't help it)

Human after all. First thing I thought.

#24 · 43w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·


It's almost like the ending of the first paragraph is meta! :twilightoops:

Last paragraph, more like. :raritywink:

But aye, it's one to keep an eye on. Being only the second first-person HiE story I've taken a chance with (the first being more than two years ago and a far more impressive story than expected). And of course I'd like to see the man behind Two Beats and The Farringtonverse take a stab at it.

#25 · 43w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

So when are you going to post the next chapter

#26 · 43w, 3d ago · 2 · · Chapter 1 ·

[insert Daft Punk song here]

#27 · 43w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Oh, this is interesting.

One obervation, though. You seem to overuse semicolons.

#28 · 43w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·



So when are you going to post the next chapter

Right the hell now. :rainbowdetermined2:


I'll definitely give humanity a fair representation by the end of this. :twilightoops:



Hah, and now the social experiment portion of this story: to see how many Daft Punk references I can get in the comments section!


Overuse for your tastes perhaps, but I don't see a problem with them.




Thank you guys; and I hope again to not disappoint. :twilightblush:

#29 · 43w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Well well well...

What have we here...?

You, sir, have my interest.

~Skeeter The Lurker

#30 · 43w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>3826926 Post TCB survivor? :rainbowlaugh:

>>3824818 I'm replying to you out of pity because nobody else did. Please refer to the FAQ or contact a mod about it. Don't do it on a story's page.

I'm just glad that, by what Nick commented before, the story is already completed (or nearly so), so there is little-to-no chance of this ending up in the dark, lonely corners of abandonment.

#31 · 43w, 3d ago · 8 · · Chapter 2 ·

My god this is beyond impressive...

Chaos War?

I sense Discord in this mess...

Also...  I'm gonna wager that Jesse is...  Not exactly in it for pony-kinds best interest...

~Skeeter The Lurker

#32 · 43w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I'm calling it now,  Jesse is an android, and his nanites are the parasprites. The master plan is a massive mind upload to a planet wide super computer where everthing serves humanity, as it should be.

#33 · 43w, 3d ago · 1 · · Chapter 2 ·


Son of a... really?

I mean...

Kidding. :rainbowderp:


Hear, hear. Genuis wants it all posted by the end of February; I'm hoping to have it all out by the first week of February.

#34 · 43w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I for one always loved the 'Lyra/Humans' trope

...then again, I might be a tad biased. :derpytongue2:

#35 · 43w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·


Your avatar is a tiny happy Lyra. Tiny happy Lyras make everything better.

#36 · 43w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>3830451 Make sure every Lyra picture comes with a warning, because they tend to unexpectedly melt hearts and other vital organs with sheer adorable radiation.

Also, you're paying for my medical bills once I get my heart transplanted. :trixieshiftright:

#37 · 43w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>3829944 And thats all I ask. :twilightsmile:

Also you got feature box'd!

#38 · 43w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·


Heh, so I did. Fun times. :rainbowkiss:

#39 · 43w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Good start, interesting story and thank the holy titans not one of the typical self-inserts - earned a fav :)

And congrats for being featured on EQD!

#41 · 43w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I think that "the self-replicating nanomachines" collectively hold his personality within them, the irrational thoughts that makes Humans flawed but perfect: ranging from imagination, practical jokes to cheating at boardgames (we've ALL left the Battleship pieces off of our boards to win a game at some point in life, I know I did :raritywink:). Because he's running solely on Logic and 5% Illogic, he's imperfect from completing his plans overall.

#42 · 43w, 3d ago · 2 · · Chapter 2 ·

so, he's a robot and humanity got turned into ponies by discord and he's going to turn them back to save humanity?

#43 · 43w, 3d ago · 4 · · Chapter 2 ·

This guy is giving me a serious BORG vibe.  All his talk of unifying cultures to benefit both without asking if they want it.

#45 · 43w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·


Heh... I listened to that album many, many times during the writing of this story.

#47 · 43w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I gotta say, beautiful art, alright.

#48 · 43w, 2d ago · 7 · 24 · Chapter 2 ·

What utter trash.

#49 · 43w, 2d ago · 7 · · Chapter 2 ·


If you're gonna call it trash, at least give a reason as to why.

#50 · 43w, 2d ago · 2 · · Chapter 2 ·

Mmm, lots of big tech going on. I guess they can tap stars but drilling a second hole is beyond them. :rainbowlaugh:

Hope Lyra can sway this guy before he springs the unification on ponies in some backwards pseudo-version of TCB. Might be something to bring to the attention of the Princeses at the very least if Lyra can figure it out in time. Still, as Lya explained, sometimes ponies like their old trusty stuff and don't need new tech for the sake of it being new. I'd say, "you can lead a horse to water, but you can't make them drink" but that might be offensive to ponies.

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