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  • 2w, 2d
    Art Search!

    Good morning, all!

    As some of you may know, I'm a really big stickler for detail in my stories. I try to hold back on work until I know it's the absolute best I can make it, and that extends to all aspects of the story, art among those. The few things I'll be releasing in a while fall under that criterion I've set up, and so I find myself once again on the lookout for new artists that I might be able to commission covers from.

    I feel it gives something back to the fandom if I sponsor an artistic piece, plus the uniqueness of the image tends to draw in more people than you might think. My first big story, Lines and Webs, didn't get particularly well-known until I had Hinoraito do the coverart. This being before Hino's prices went a bit above my price range.

    So, if any of you know of any good pony artists out there who are open for commission, let me know! I'd prefer them to have experience in workin with brighter colors, as I've noticed stories with more "pop" in the covers tend to perform a bit better. Plus, most of the stuff I'm writing is going to be fairly lighthearted anyway, so it would match thematically.

    Either post links in the comments section, or use the more preferred method of PMing me the info. I'll even sweeten the pot for you all. Not only will the ones who link me artists that I end up commissioning  be privy to information about the next book in the Sunfall series, I will go so far as to write a short (3-5,000 word) fic on a subject of the winner's choice! Credit to be made in the description and all!

    So get out there and give it your best! You haven't let me down before, and I know you won't now. See you on the flipside!

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  • 3w, 1d
    Coming soon!

    First off, sorry about the delay on the epilogue on Stormsinger. I was going to write that out today, but I've been hit with a hell of a cold and just haven't been up to it.

    I suppose you all would be wondering about what is going to happen next! What am I going to do after Stormsinger? Will I jump right into the next book in the series, called "Courts of the Magi"? Will I take a hiatus? Will I do something new? Well...

    Here's the deal. After Stormsinger, I'll have written nearly six hundred thousand horse words in this universe, not counting side stories, which account for another couple of tens of thousands. That's well over half a million words on one given subject. Well-beyond the word count for Lord of the Rings, approaching that of the Harry Potter novels (I think I've matched the first four or five books), and getting into US Tax Code territory. So first things first, there's going to be a brief hiatus whilst I get my head back together, and start in on my "read later" list, consisting of 1015 stories consisting of horse words, three years' worth. It'll take me less time than you think.

    I'll also be focusing on getting my associate's degree, reading non-horse fiction, and a few other things which remain to be specified. You know. Life. The thing that you sometimes neglect when constructing a massive horse fiction.

    Fret not, however! I'll be releasing other things as the mood takes me, things unrelated to the Sunfall Universe. Slice-of-life fics about tea, for example. Shipping fics both of the friend-ship and relation-ship kind. Maybe I'll do something involving werewolves with twelve-pack abs or shiny vampires, I don't know.

    And then we'll get back to the Sunfall Universe. I can't wait to see how this turns out, because I've got some really cool ideas I want to toss around, and some stuff that's going to straight blow your minds. I'm excited to use it, but I'm also tired. So I need a break while I let these things simmer, and we'll be back soon.

    Until then, I ask only for your patience. I WILL return, and when I do, it will be well worth the wait.

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  • 6w, 6d
    No but seriously

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  • 10w, 4h
    Updates and scheduling and chapters, oh my!

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  • 17w, 1d
    On scavenger hunts and schedules

    Sorry about the late update, all. I've signed up to be a part of the Greatest International Scavenger Hunt the World Has Ever Seen, or GISHWHES for short. It's a week-long adventure requiring cunning, skill, photography, a familiarity with the Queen of England and tea ceremonies, and numerous other skills. It promises to be quite fun, and also the only thing I'll have approaching a summer vacation, so I'm quite looking forward to it.

    Unfortunately, GISHWHES has the habit of monopolizing all of your time, seeing as the list of items numbers in the hundreds, and there is only one week in which to score as many points as possible. As a result, I wasn't going to be doing much writing next week, and I wanted to push two chapters for you at the same time so you could have something to chew on while I was gone.

    I could only get the one chapter done, though, which is disappointing. So expect that either tonight or tomorrow, and the next one a day or two after the ninth.

    In the meantime, have some quality entertainment!

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  • ...

It has been ten years since the defeat of the Changling Queen, and Equestria is again at peace. Twilight Sparkle and the Elements of Harmony have reached their prime, and have begun to settle down. Love and life abound in Ponyville, especially for Twilight's friends, but she has nopony to call her own.

There is a reason.

A series of events lead to a horrible revelation, and Twilight is thrust deep into a terrifying web of secrets and lies. Her peace is over.

This time, however, she won't be fighting monsters or madponies. What she faces will be much, much worse.

Act One of Two.

Act Two is here.

First Published
12th Jul 2012
Last Modified
30th Sep 2012
#1 · 123w, 6d ago · · · Prologue ·

Rather interesting, I'd like to see where this is going...

I get the feeling this is going to be a good story. please continue as fast as you can. :pinkiehappy:

Consider starting a new paragraph when you change speakers, it is the common practice for dialogue.


Thank you. I've never been very good at dialogue, and that is exactly the kind of advice I need in order to improve. Any further comment? Drop me a message if you have more advice.

The plot thickens

Well, this is indeed an intriguing story to come. Proceed.

The plot thickens


You haven't even seen me thicken the plot yet. Stay tuned, sh*t's about to get crazy.

This is becoming interesting...keep it coming! :pinkiehappy:

brace yourselves the plot thickens

Twilight's entire life has been a eugenics experiment. along with every other pony in equiestria ...

When the mind control fails (and it will fail) Twili will be Pissed. :twilightangry2:

Luna was right Celestia. You should have waited.

Sweet little Twilight is soooo not going to take this quietly. :twilightangry2:

Oh noes I smell the shit inching closer to the fan

Oh man can't wait:pinkiehappy:

#14 · 122w, 1d ago · · · Prologue ·


Lurve ya:derpytongue2:

Ooooooh snap the battle rages on :yay:

>>974160 oh noes I am even more lost now

How will Celestia justify this? :twilightangry2:

Had some Antichrist vibes from this chapter with that fox corpse. But I suppose it wouldn't be saying "Chaos reigns" in this case.

Either way, things are getting interesting. Horrific definitely. But interesting...

First comment, and a great story in one night. Perfect :pinkiehappy:

first comment, :moustache:  good story

I sense heartbreak in Twilight's future. :pinkiesad2:

The story gets more and more interesting. And because I can't resist...

*channels Linkara* ADAMANTIUM RAGE!

Twilight "Hi Celestia! Remember all that Mind Taking you were doing to every pony earler? Meet Chekhov's Gun!" :twilightsmile:

This may be the most gentel clifhanger i have ever seen.

It is almost like a horror movie where you just KNOW that around the corner is ther psycho with the bloody axe.

Poor Twily. There is nothing you can do to stop it now. Celestia is Very good at making plans and whatever it is ... well its definitely going to happen. :applecry:

And now we know why Spike is bound in chains under Canterlot. When that dragon gets free some ponies are going to be in a lot of trouble. :moustache:

Today's ceremony is inspired by three things. The first is the ancient Roman triumphus, a procession honoring great military achievement or exceptional valor.

The second is the Royal Wedding, which was largely overshadowed here in America because of the fact that Osama Bin Laden was killed just prior to the ceremonies. Nobody I talked to seemed to mind that much.

The third is the opening ceremonies from the first book of the Hunger Games, an excellent young adult series that I highly recommend.

We've had peril of a physical nature so far. Be sure to tune in next time as Twilight takes on her biggest challenge yet, the dangerous world of Court Politics!:twilightoops:

Great story i only found this today but I'm already in love with it. keep writing I look forward to wahts going to happen next.

Twilight now has all the tools she needs to bring the whole scheme down around Celestia's ears. All she has to do is retrieve the clue hidden in the archive and put all the pieces together. My estimated guess is about 4 months story time before the story gets back to where the first chapter begins. (six months original - one month pre trip - one month journey and recovery)

Things are abut to snowball and i do not think Celly is actually ready for the soid waste to hit the rotary air oscillator.

Twily reading her new books :twilightblush:

Twily understanding her new books :twilightoops:

Twily putting all the pieces toghther :twilightangry2:

Well, this is about as "erotic" as it gets. I'm trying to keep it PG-13 for now, so if you're here to complain about any "rampant use of cloppery", then simmer down and bear with me. For the rest of you, enjoy!:twilightsmile:

Another excellent chapter. It's gonna really hurt when Twilight learns the truth.


I'm gonna bring the whole corrupt system down around Celestia's's gonna be biblical.


Can't wait to see that bitch princess get what she deserves for messing with my favorite pony. :twilightangry2:

Getting intense. Maintaining interest. Can't wait to see the plot unfold...further. I await the bringdown of biblical proportions.

"And so the Great Spicy Soup Bet would be passed down in common talks, making a legend of Miss Sparkle with the iron stomach. Though gossip mangling and the telephone game would transform the Nova pepper soup into a pot of lava, thus increasing Miss Sparkle's valor and strength tenfold."


"Her stamina and skill were largely attributed to her part dragon, part Alicorn heritage. It was rumored that after she had finished off the entire pot, she had proceeded to laugh and violently beat Princess Luna over the head with it, while proclaiming herself 'Queen of the Cosmos'."


"And then, she further proved her valor by ejecting into the open night, screaming her proclamation to the skies above. And the legend of Miss Sparkle would live on."

Ah, what fun.


Indeed. I bid you a pleasant evening, my good brony. The hour is late and my battery runs low.:twilightsmile:

So Luna knows about the conspiracy against Twilight and has the lunar guards watching her. Glad to hear somepony is watching her back.

God, I'm dense. It took me eighteen chapters but it finally clicked. Morning Star? Morning Star?! If that isn't foreshadowing, I don't know what is. (inb4 it's not foreshadowing at all and the author just likes the name.)


Aaaaand we have a winner. That's intentional, btw. Well done.

>>1090423 >>1091551

I knew he was a traitor but WOW ...

I never suspected THAT.

You Sir are amazing. :heart:

poor Twily. This is gonna hurt. a lot. :fluttercry:


I'm lost...Someone care to explain? :derpyderp1:


The Morning Star is a very important figure in Christian mythology.

Lucifer. God's #2. The original traitor.

I did not even think of it until TSG mentioned it. :derpytongue2:

Oh, I would't know anything about that...i'm not exactly the most religious of people. :facehoof:


He was the most beautiful and perfect of God's angels, until he fell from grace. "Lucifer", the word for the Morning Star, became Satan, from an ancient Israeli word, "shaitan", meaning enemy or adversary.


I did not think about something until after my other post.

Who will Lucifer betray? Twilight? or Celestia?

The corrupter would betray Twilight.

The original(?) Lucifer betrayed God (Celestia).

I can't wait to see how the story unfolds. cause its gonna be good. :pinkiehappy:


Something else I noticed about Twilight's name. Twilight Sparkle, who's cutie mark is a very large and bright star. Twilight, or evening, and star. What deity does that give you?

Hesperus (Evening Star)

PHO′SPHORUS (Phôsphoros),or as the poets call him Heôsphoros or Phaesphoros (Lat. Lucfer), that is, the bringer of light or of Eos, is the name of the planet Venus, when seen in the morning before sunrise

like i said earlier .. Amazing!

I prefer to think of Twily as The Bringer of Light instead of Lucifer BUT in this story i Really hope she kicks Celestia's flank. :twilightsmile:

(to be honest i had to google it to find that. :twilightblush: )


I've always preferred the term Hesperus anyway. Although, if she makes it free, how do you think Twilight will look to Equestria? Especially if Celestia is still in charge?


Assuming that Celestia has been effected by an outside force ..and can be healed ...

A Hero!

If this is a Solar Empire Celestia?

Poor Twily may be boned.

I still have no idea what Celestia's real plans are.

The best i can come up with? Celestia is trying to manipulate the bearers in such a way that they channel the power of the Elements of Harmony into Celestia. If Celestia can absorb the power this way she may be able use the power any way she wants (regardless of the will / restrictions of the Elements themselves). It may even make the power a permanent part of herself. :pinkiegasp:


Keep in mind that there are other powers in play besides Twilight, Celestia, and Morning Star.

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