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  • 1w, 6d
    Art Search!

    Good morning, all!

    As some of you may know, I'm a really big stickler for detail in my stories. I try to hold back on work until I know it's the absolute best I can make it, and that extends to all aspects of the story, art among those. The few things I'll be releasing in a while fall under that criterion I've set up, and so I find myself once again on the lookout for new artists that I might be able to commission covers from.

    I feel it gives something back to the fandom if I sponsor an artistic piece, plus the uniqueness of the image tends to draw in more people than you might think. My first big story, Lines and Webs, didn't get particularly well-known until I had Hinoraito do the coverart. This being before Hino's prices went a bit above my price range.

    So, if any of you know of any good pony artists out there who are open for commission, let me know! I'd prefer them to have experience in workin with brighter colors, as I've noticed stories with more "pop" in the covers tend to perform a bit better. Plus, most of the stuff I'm writing is going to be fairly lighthearted anyway, so it would match thematically.

    Either post links in the comments section, or use the more preferred method of PMing me the info. I'll even sweeten the pot for you all. Not only will the ones who link me artists that I end up commissioning  be privy to information about the next book in the Sunfall series, I will go so far as to write a short (3-5,000 word) fic on a subject of the winner's choice! Credit to be made in the description and all!

    So get out there and give it your best! You haven't let me down before, and I know you won't now. See you on the flipside!

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  • 2w, 5d
    Coming soon!

    First off, sorry about the delay on the epilogue on Stormsinger. I was going to write that out today, but I've been hit with a hell of a cold and just haven't been up to it.

    I suppose you all would be wondering about what is going to happen next! What am I going to do after Stormsinger? Will I jump right into the next book in the series, called "Courts of the Magi"? Will I take a hiatus? Will I do something new? Well...

    Here's the deal. After Stormsinger, I'll have written nearly six hundred thousand horse words in this universe, not counting side stories, which account for another couple of tens of thousands. That's well over half a million words on one given subject. Well-beyond the word count for Lord of the Rings, approaching that of the Harry Potter novels (I think I've matched the first four or five books), and getting into US Tax Code territory. So first things first, there's going to be a brief hiatus whilst I get my head back together, and start in on my "read later" list, consisting of 1015 stories consisting of horse words, three years' worth. It'll take me less time than you think.

    I'll also be focusing on getting my associate's degree, reading non-horse fiction, and a few other things which remain to be specified. You know. Life. The thing that you sometimes neglect when constructing a massive horse fiction.

    Fret not, however! I'll be releasing other things as the mood takes me, things unrelated to the Sunfall Universe. Slice-of-life fics about tea, for example. Shipping fics both of the friend-ship and relation-ship kind. Maybe I'll do something involving werewolves with twelve-pack abs or shiny vampires, I don't know.

    And then we'll get back to the Sunfall Universe. I can't wait to see how this turns out, because I've got some really cool ideas I want to toss around, and some stuff that's going to straight blow your minds. I'm excited to use it, but I'm also tired. So I need a break while I let these things simmer, and we'll be back soon.

    Until then, I ask only for your patience. I WILL return, and when I do, it will be well worth the wait.

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  • 6w, 3d
    No but seriously

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  • 9w, 3d
    Updates and scheduling and chapters, oh my!

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  • 16w, 5d
    On scavenger hunts and schedules

    Sorry about the late update, all. I've signed up to be a part of the Greatest International Scavenger Hunt the World Has Ever Seen, or GISHWHES for short. It's a week-long adventure requiring cunning, skill, photography, a familiarity with the Queen of England and tea ceremonies, and numerous other skills. It promises to be quite fun, and also the only thing I'll have approaching a summer vacation, so I'm quite looking forward to it.

    Unfortunately, GISHWHES has the habit of monopolizing all of your time, seeing as the list of items numbers in the hundreds, and there is only one week in which to score as many points as possible. As a result, I wasn't going to be doing much writing next week, and I wanted to push two chapters for you at the same time so you could have something to chew on while I was gone.

    I could only get the one chapter done, though, which is disappointing. So expect that either tonight or tomorrow, and the next one a day or two after the ninth.

    In the meantime, have some quality entertainment!

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Inspiration is Rarity's Element, and Sweetie Belle her greatest achievement. But the filly has questions, ones that Rarity might not be able to answer on her own. What makes a pony? How can somepony know if they really are alive? Are they alive if they laugh and cry? Are they alive if they think, if they make mistakes and have ideas?

If Sweetie Belle is nothing more than a collection of wires, is she truly alive?

First Published
24th May 2013
Last Modified
24th May 2013
#1 · 78w, 2d ago · 52 · 1 ·

My God Sweetie Bot is awesome.

#2 · 78w, 2d ago · 29 · 1 ·

Oh my god this is amazing.

Sweetie Bot is best Filly-robot.

#3 · 78w, 2d ago · 46 · 1 ·

This was amazing. I loved every minute of reading this story. Do you think that you might write more set in this universe?

#4 · 78w, 2d ago · 24 · 1 ·

I have no words.  None at all.

This was beyond excellent.

~Skeeter The Lurker

#5 · 78w, 2d ago · 19 · ·

I love the way that you looked at Rarities first dresses and thought "hey, maybe they were robots?"

Ingenious :pinkiehappy:

#6 · 78w, 2d ago · 17 · ·

Very nice. I love the twist on Rarity being a cybernetic engineer, it fits just as nicely as dress making with her personality.

#7 · 78w, 2d ago · · ·

Oh, my. That was excellently done. And very neatly encapsulates the sort of questions a self-aware robot is likely to have, too.

#8 · 78w, 2d ago · 29 · ·

This is great on a oneshot, but the AU you've built with just one chapter has a large amount of potential. I would love to see the differences in the other elements as well.

That is. If that's alright with you.:fluttershysad:

#9 · 78w, 2d ago · 3 · 1 ·

Excellent work! Really enjoyed this story, would love to see more like this.

#10 · 78w, 2d ago · 7 · ·

I loved this story. Short, sweet, and moving all at the same time.

I wonder though, how would sweetie grow? How would they size her up to mimic age, let alone a cutie mark. I expect she couldn't get one naturally.

#11 · 78w, 2d ago · 5 · 1 ·

That was such a touching story. You sir, have earned yourself a follow. :scootangel:

#12 · 78w, 2d ago · 2 · 1 ·

Thanks.

Just... thanks.

#13 · 78w, 2d ago · 7 · ·

I like how Rarity's what she always should have been here: Inspiration.

#14 · 78w, 2d ago · 7 · ·

this feels like a direct counter to background pony.

a wonderful melancholy type of sadness, with a feeling of hope and gratitude. beautiful. noting more. nothing less.

#15 · 78w, 2d ago · · ·

Too... Much... Cute Sweetie-bot...

*Explodes, then reforms*

IGNORE THAT...

#16 · 78w, 2d ago · 6 · 5 ·

And then, after suffering from extreme depression brought through never aging, Sweetie Bot goes on to upload herself to the Equestrian mainframe, and takes over the world. The end.

#17 · 78w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

Wow.

This is really beautiful story. :heart:

#18 · 78w, 2d ago · · ·

Why would you ever build sensors beneath the skin to detect pain? Seems like wasteful design to me, as soon as the skin is breached the construct should know that it is damaged and refrain from using the damaged leg.

#19 · 78w, 2d ago · 3 · ·

>>2624800

Added realism.

#20 · 78w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2624800

Why do animals have sensors beneath the skin to detect pain? We can detect that our skin in breached and refrain from using the damaged leg. However, knowing something and feeling that it really hurts gives you a greater drive not to do stupid things like walk on a damaged leg, and real animals (including people) can do spectacularly stupid things without the right motivation.

#21 · 78w, 2d ago · · ·

Do I have permission to cry?

#22 · 78w, 2d ago · 2 · ·

Well, that was amazing. See this everyone, this is what a one-shot should be. I could ask for a series for this, but this story doesn't need anymore, the lesson is enough.

(10/10, would read again. Sweetie Bot is my favorite fanon character.)

-Mis

#23 · 78w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2624667  Until Jeff Bridges enters the net and destroys the M.C.P. (Master Control Pony), gathering the data to prove he was the original creator of the M.L.P. (Matrix-Like Plot) in the first place.  :rainbowlaugh:

#24 · 78w, 2d ago · 2 · 1 ·

traje de flamenco
It's "flamenca". If it ended in an "o", it would mean it was for a male, and that would be ridiculous.

Also, I'd like to point out that the name Minuette is already taken. The pony nicknamed "Colgate" by the fandom is actually named Minuette.

#25 · 78w, 2d ago · · ·

It was an interesting story.  I would be serious and all except for this line which initiated T.S.C. (Troll Sequence Compulsion) in my CPU (Cerebral Punification Unit).

>>>and the audience with Princess Celestia to offer her a jester made of clockwork and amethyst,>>>

Clockwork jester, eh... You mean something like this?

:trollestia:

#26 · 78w, 2d ago · 1 · ·

What's so nice about this is it very simply outlines the differences between a mere computer and a living machine.

A living machine will be able to think in the abstract, consider potential beyond its current limits, imagine random thoughts and then act upon them in physical conditions.  

It will be a new form of life, a conscious mind without an organic body and force us yet again to reexamine what life is.  

For we think of bacteria and plants and many other organisms are alive, yet they possess no mind at all.

I have always felt that sapient life is a truly higher form of life, one that has taken a step beyond merely being a metabolizing, reproducing biochemical machine.  As such a thinking machine will have gone beyond its own material composition.

And then we get "Ghost in the Shell"... :raritywink:

#27 · 78w, 2d ago · · ·

And it turns out the world is going to love her, so she doesn't need to teach it to fear her instead.

#28 · 78w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2625000

Then the extra sensors still wouldn't make sense. The reason animals etc have nocicereptors (pain nerves) is indeed because we are quite dumb and tend to forget when we are hurt. However, a mechanical construct has near perfect memory.

Even if the actual simulated personality is just as dumb and forgetful as we are a simple memory chip that remembers skin breached locations is a lot cheaper and more efficient than implementing thousands of extra sensors. Just have the memory chip send a pain signal to the simulated brain whenever it tries to move the afflicted leg and you have the exact same effect as we experience.

Besides, don't you think it is quite annoying that we have pain nerves? Yes, they evolved to help us. But an ability to shut them off is highly useful. That's why doctors invented anesthetics. For a robot the ability to switch off pain should be much easier. It seems needlessly cruel to have Sweetie Belle suffer if Rarity could simply disconnect her pain sensors for a few seconds.

#30 · 78w, 2d ago · · ·

This is beautiful in so many ways.

#31 · 78w, 2d ago · 2 · ·

>>2625265

It could be an unintentional side-effect of Sweetie Belle's sentience.

#32 · 78w, 2d ago · 4 · ·

I think a certain truly sentient Geth construct with the designated codename Legion would love this story.

#33 · 78w, 2d ago · · ·

I really really really liked this.

But when I read the last chapter...

It's like in public school when the teacher says, "The last paragraph of an essay should be a summary of everything you've said before." And it really made the whole story fall short.

I think this could have ended with "And really, wasn't that enough?" The last chapter is very distracting...and a really good story like this needs a strong ending.

#34 · 78w, 2d ago · 3 · ·

>>2625552

It could also be why we have pain receptors beneath our skin, so we know what other than our skin is damaged, even if the skin is not.  It is actually easy to damage tissue beneath the skin without doing much damage at all to the skin.  Houdini was killed by a punch to the gut that did not leave a bruise.  In several types of robot, especially those that are shown on robot wars, damage to underlying components often happens before the outer covering layer is damaged in any noticeable way.  So having pain receptors under her skin would make sense.

#35 · 78w, 2d ago · · ·

sweetie bot in here? im in!

#36 · 78w, 2d ago · · ·

Sweetie Bot is the best Robot.

I've been dying to read a Sweetie Bot fic and I'm happy that I finally got to see one. The ending was meh. But up to the last paragraph it was awesome, and I'm glad that she got a happy ending.

#37 · 78w, 2d ago · 4 · ·

*in which Bronyman1995 kicks himself in the foot for not going with the idea of science Rarity in Iron Mare*

This story was awesome.

You were able to tackle the subject of free will AND what makes someone human all without seeming preachy or heavy handed.

I TIP MY HAT TO YOU SIR.

#38 · 78w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2625250  dats what i was finkin (i dont know why but i feel orky tonight:facehoof:)

#39 · 78w, 2d ago · 1 · 1 ·

It's a lovely story, with only one discordant note, for me.

> “Legend has it that Celestia and Luna made the first ponies out of clay, clouds, and stars..."

Why, oh why?  That was like a sudden dash of cold water in my face.  :raritydespair:

#40 · 78w, 2d ago · · ·

This was..... AMAZING!!!!!!!:heart:

#41 · 78w, 2d ago · · ·

Cogito!

Ergo, sum.

Heh. Not so bad, friend! It's a curious idea--Sweetie Bot and Rarity as a scientist. I almost want to try it.

#42 · 78w, 2d ago · · ·

Feels, D'awws, and Laughs. This was worth my time. A pity I can't vote for it more than once.

Feels at the repair, d'awws at Sweetie Belle's reaction to Minuette, and laughs when she asked to use Rarity's make-up.

#43 · 78w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2625000

At the risk of repeating everyone else. :P Learning is essential to survival among other things. It would do us no lasting good if we simply stopped using the leg until it was better. We could bang ourself on the same spot over and over and suffer continually. By recognizing the source of the pain, we can avoid it. Besides, by, say, realizing that fire burns and causes injury we can yank our hand out of the fire, before irreparable damage occurs.

In the context of the story, an autonomous robot cannot depend on a handy repairman, and so it would be best to be avoid catastrophic damage itself/"instinctually".

P.S.

Sequel, please? :twilightsmile:

#44 · 78w, 2d ago · · ·

I'm going to try and will that tag from Complete to Incomplete now. Wish me luck.

#45 · 78w, 2d ago · · ·

I like your Rarity, a lot. :raritywink: The whole scientist thing fits well, surprisingly, with Rarity. If there was a more futuristic version of MLP your Rarity would be a deadringer for it.

#46 · 78w, 2d ago · · ·

...So why is this called "Minuette's Lesson," when clearly the summary and character list indicates that it's not about Colgate/Minuette?

#47 · 78w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2626286

Maybe because Minuette taught the lesson?

#48 · 78w, 2d ago · · ·

... And THAT is why Sweetie Bot is best Pone, Crusader, and Bot. Period.

#49 · 78w, 2d ago · · ·

>>2625132 You know, that would actually make for a good fic.

P.S.: That means write it NOW, since it was your idea.:moustache:

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