A girl so bad at writing she took to learning how to write at University. How'm I doing so far? Yeah, I know-- I'm working on it, I promise.
It's about time somebody heard my tale...our tale. It can get lonely up in space; even more so when you do not appear to have any heart in the first place. I never imagined that as I took my first steps on the moon I would meet a creature so beautiful and....lonely.
The blue pony will have wanted this tale to be heard...somebody needs to save her someday. Can you help her?
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Oh, it's sad...I avoid sad fics...but since it's you, I'll read it!
Oh the juxtaposition and the metaphors in this are great!
It does however say "baron wasteland". I'd hate to meet him. Sounds like a big meanie.
Whoa you've gotten really good at this and I am super impressed
That was sad, but the ending made sense and it definitely brought some closure. Great work!
The Official Seal of Awesomeness has been given.
Now. Most are crying over the ending.
I, however, am running full-on logistics mode.
The lunar eclipse that occurred when Murray died....
Some might say it was Luna mourning.
I believe it is some magic coming into play.
Betcha Luna has a new friend on the moon.....
Its a good story and I was wondering if you would like to check my story its also sad, I call it When Darkness Falls I hope you all enjoy and I will be watching you for more amazing stories
870213>>870289>>870359>>870369>>870766 Wow, thanks. I didn't think it was that good
870213 Tis an oxymoron good sir...glad you liked it
Loved the story and it's getting shared to everyone I know!
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870949 Thankyou....thank you...thank you....Thank you....Thank you...okay enough Twilight bouncing, just smile and wave boys smile and wave
This is very sad,a very good story too
"If mankind loves mysteries so much then why are we constantly trying to solve them? The more we try to solve a mystery, the less mysteries that our planet will keep."
If I really loved ice cream I'd stop eating it, the more ice cream I eat the less ice cream the world has. Sorry I couldn't resist
871356 It's okay...I like comments in any form
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Your story had less to do with ponies and more to do with the human condition. Brilliantly done, just brilliantly done. A great example of the sad-fic genre.
Alright then. I'll start off by saying it wasn't bad. Not really suited to my tastes though. Honestly, if you ask me, it verges on being a little bit Dark with just how unbelievably jaded you made this guy. As a result, I didn't find it sad. More pitiful, really.
It's serious and seriously written, so well done there, heh. Needs another comprehensive full read through edit, though. Enough mild grammar mistakes and typos to be noticeable--and of course, easily fixable.
Some of your phrasing here or there seems a bit off to me, but that very well could just be me. I'd suggest reading it aloud to yourself, maybe you'll hear it. But *shrug*, not that big of a deal.
I think it could just be the balance of it (there's so much build up and then when he meets Luna the story shifts its gears), but your ending feels a little rushed. Considering how jaded and scarred you've made the fellow, he folds a bit quickly and easily. I know the story is complete but...With your philosophy-ing style for most of it, maybe a bit of discussion at the end there wouldn't be amiss? That's completely your choice though.
Like I said, not to my tastes, but I wouldn't particularly call any part of it outright bad. Just perhaps a little unpolished--which is a typical problem with pieces this deep reaching and serious, when you're inexperienced at it. So, yeah, nifty piece certainly.
*Single Manly Tear* Great story...
*sigh* I need something sadder, something with an extreme amount of emotion inducing...stuff, any emotion really, I find myself to be fairly stonehearted
Lol John named her daughter after Luna, how sweet
885591 I recommend For Auld Lang Syne by Mr. Dependable.
A mixed coctail.
Needs a rewrite, badly.
It is called the superego; the moral compass of the human psyche, it guides the ego which guides the id. The id is the instinctual part of the game, infantile and selfish. It cares naught but pleasure. The ego is the realistic part of the brain; it tests reality and seeks pleasure in a realistic way that causes little grief and pain. Instead of stealing food, it buys food. Not because of morality, but to avoid punishment. The superego is the moral compass that seeks to follow societal norms and rules to gain gratification. The superego will reprimand the person for breaking the rules of society and ethical laws, so if you were to murder someone, you would be reprimanded by the superego with guilt.