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Lil Penpusher


Put the words in the bag and nopony gets hurt

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Hearth's Warming eve is here once again as snow covers the streets of Canterlot and ponies all over Equestria chant songs. The towns and cities of Equestria light up in many different colors as the festivities beginn.

Celestia has always enjoyed Hearth's Warming eve, it has always been that one day of the year, the day where she can simply enjoy spending time with friends and family.

Only Problem being that her only family member is a grumpy alicorn. For years Celestia has tried convincing Luna to enjoy the festivities, yet she has never succeeded. This year will be different though.
This time she will succeed! This time she won't give up! And there WILL be cake!


Warning: Lots of Cake involved.

Merry Christmas! Happy Hearth's Warming eve everypony! This was just a quick little story I thought of as sort of a present for you all to enjoy. It's nothing special really.


Caaaaaaaaaake :trollestia:

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Comment posted by INFUSCATE deleted Dec 24th, 2016

Interesting story, though the dialogue was a bit hard to follow intermixed with the stray thoughts between. Maybe put those thoughts in italics? Possibly give Tia actions as she's sitting in front of the door, or described how she hears the party going on down the hall. Stuff like that would make the story much better.

8256024
Good thoughts! I doubt I’ll really edit it now, since it has been half a year and all, but I’ll definitely remember to put thoughts into italics in the future.

Thanks again! :rainbowkiss:

8256035
No problem. Glad I could help.

8256038
I checked again, actually. Turns out all of Celestia’s thoughts were put in italics already! Crazy world, amirite? :pinkiecrazy:

Cute, funny little story. :ajsmug:

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