It has been many years since the war started...
Chrysalis and her armies rolled over our defenses, overwhelming our forces with sheer numbers. We fought a fighting retreat, always on the run from the swarm. We thought it would be over, that this would be the end of Equestria, and the end of Harmony...
But it was not so. We gathered our strength and held our ground, at last. Desperately our soldiers fought on and held the swarm off. Ponies took up arms to bolster our ranks or grabbed a tool to aid the war industry.
And now, after all these years, we remain in a stalemate. The Changelings adopted their own variant of total warfare. They launch raids on defensive positions at night, send bomber squadrons to destroy civilian centers all across Equestria and sink civilian cruisers out on the sea.
The war drags on, and my ponies grow tired of grieving the loss of their homes and loved ones. It is time for Equestria to commit to this war and leave behind our outdated principles of pacifism and harmony.
This war has brought upon us a new age. And with it, a new Equestria must rise!
This story takes place in the 'Equestria at War' universe. Further knowledge of this universe is not required, but it's good to know. Link to the official EaW group can be found here.
I don't know anything about the mod, but this reads like a 'Nightmare Moon wins' story, but with Celestia going evil instead.
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Which is, of course, fair criticism. The main difference is that Luna turned evil because her subjects gave her too little attention and admiration in contrast to her sister, while, in this universe, Celestia slowly succumbs to her evil self in an effort to save Equestria and its ponies from the horrors of war.
I do get your point, though. Cheers!
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Which I assume is a good thing!
Unless you're talking about episode 7 and 8...
Hmm I have to wonder about twilight, if her beloved mentor and Equestrian are going all evil empire, that is going to be extremely rough on her, not to mention how the eternal sun thing will wreak havoc on crops.
Not to say I don't believe Twilight incapable of stopping Daybreaker fighting her even if she is later cleansed and worse banishing or worse having to slay her would likely take a massive toll on twilight mentally given how central Celesta was to her life.
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Well, as I mentioned at the end of the last chapter, I was thinking about adding an additional chapter to the story if it is well received. That extra chapter would, in fact, focus on Daybreaker and Twilight.
Now there will a civil war that will keep the fighting going even longer as many ponies will not want bend there knees to another tyrant and others will want to rule themselfs now while some just want to just be free, many of them did not win a war to suddenly find out all the freedoms they once enjoyed are to be taken away and not allowed any more.
Note I'm not asking you to write if for the aftermath but if you do just do a brief story not super long and all that just enough detail.
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The end of the last chapter actually hinted towards most Equestrians accepting Daybreaker's rule, at least for the time being.Daybreaker's motives, as such, are not to rob ponies of their freedom and liberties, but simply to lead her nation to victory in a war that had already cost many ponies' lives.
Of course, there will be resistance to this, but nothing like a civil war. The greatest resistance Daybreaker would face are the Elements of Harmony, though the extra chapter which I may add to the story would go into that...
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Glad to hear that!
Love the mod though i think more land (and nations so im aware it would take time) will make it even better.
This story is a interesting one, daybreaker is probably what Equestria needs, but that certainly doesnt mean shes the best option for the long run.
Still, wonder how Twilight would react, from my view of her and her pro- celestia bias she would probably deny any wrongdoings on Celestia/Daybreakers part and Daybreaker seems smart enough to use that to her advantage.
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Well, we're working on adding a new continent to the mod in the near future. Stay tuned!
Pretty neat story - I would love to see that extra chapter.
Also, hope you are going to write a sequel with Daybreaker crushing Chrysalis
(or learning that it was actually the queen’s idea to force Celestia to become Daybreaker, with some nice plot-twist in the end).
You murdered Luna! You monster!
But this was a fun story.
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Oh, it was fun because I murdered her
Nah, but for real, thanks lad! Glad you enjoyed
chrysalis aint going to be defeated anytime soon, sol-loving butt >:(((
jk i love this story cheers8681467
We'll see about that, hah!
God emperor Celestia
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Sol Invicta!
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Either one works
*breathes in and out deeply*
Well...while this fic is short, it still demonstrates a crucial truth: war changes people, many times for the worst. And in total war, the freedoms and values the soldiers fight for become lost into obscurity. The military and civilian then become pawns, sent into the bloody meat grinder, in order to protect their masters...
there's a reason why it's been argued that war should be avoided as much as possible, because when a nation gets involved, especially when the war drags on....freedom eventually dies.
A well written fiction!
I have always been interested in the balance of what drives the decision makers within wars, and how they cope with the losses that they experience. Does it harden the generous, or vice versa? So seeing one perspective of that is particularly interesting.
A few problems with tone/mood shift, more particularly at the first chapter, at least for me it throws off direction a bit. Dialogue is simple and handled well, and the story develops at good pace.
Looking forward to the next few parts.
This is great. The story is already in motion, from the war introduction, to Celestia's characterization, to the mystery of the voice. Great job!
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Thanks!
I love how this takes a toll on her and we see how it impacts her, from her perspective. This is some fine quality gourmet stuff you've got here.
Now this is an Avengers level threat.
Wow, real emotion. You are great at wielding it in your words. I've read a lot of promising fanfics that fall flat on character and emotion, but this... Astounding. My respect.
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Thanks a ton! Really! Your Comments mean a lot and are great encouragement to keep doing what I do.
Do make sure to check out the Sequel to this and, if you liked THAT one, the third and final part to this Trilogy which I coincidentally happen to have uploaded just an hour or so ago
I haven't read a fanfic this good in a long time. For far too long, I've seen nothing but Anon stories, 2k-long comedy fics, and clopfics. The long, grandiose, wartime stories are the stuff I yearn for.
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I'm just gonna pretend like I did not write a dozen of 2k Comedy Stories
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No, no, you're the exception here. You have a few good fics out. And you're not alone. I wrote, like, ten ASMR-type shipfics with different ponies, in addition to my main epic longfics.
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While I do enjoy Comedy, nothing's better than good drama, really. If one pulls it off the right way it's really fullfilling, both to write and read. At least that's my own taste, and tastes differ.
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So which branch of the focus tree are we going down? Looking like...left?
I like this story. Short, but concise. The changes Celestia goes through are clearly shown, but they're not overwhelmingly descriptive. And, from this concise, detailed story, a glorious tyrant is born.... Can't wait to read the sequel.
I don’t blame celestia here actually because her road to hell began with good intentions! I see that she wanted justice for her subjects and that filly too. I feel bad for blueblood too because he had to deal with a grieving mother who attacked some guards because her child is dead. I actually can relate to it because I lost my cousin Luna due to Sudden Infant Death Syndrome and I actually was in denial and when I found out it’s real I actually couldn’t deal with it well and I actually literally felt so alone that I actually became used to death but when my chihuahua El who actually got attacked by my neighbor’s pit bull and died during surgery because his liver or kidneys failed it literally broke me internally and when he died that day my mom was crying and I was so shocked because well I thought he would make it and not die. We didn’t know that El would have gotten attacked and he was using the bathroom when he was attacked. Not only that I’m still recovering because well instead of being respectful my fifth grade teachers Hepner and Columbus actually decided to target me and Mrs.Columbus actually insulted a coloring contest paper that I colored myself and was good but didn’t win every time because they hated me for losing a dog and were jealous. What’s more horrifying and fucked up Mr Hepner and Mrs Columbus said that they are so glad he’s dead because we were all stupid for letting my “Retard and dumbass” chihuahua outside to take a piss and now he’s dead. They said that he deserves to die and insulted the name I gave him. His real name is El Skippy Forito de wood.
I don’t know why could anyone insult someone’s dead family members and blame them for that and I know 100% that we didn’t know that El would get attacked and my mom got attacked also and her legs are having issues.
I was expecting their soldiers would surrender or ran away as cowards, abandoning their posts.
But this is far worse.
Something is awakening within Celestia...
If you do everything by yourself you would need weeks to process the orders for just a single day...
A princess? For now maybe.
But if the war goes on for too long the bugs may face a queen.
A queen which will make even their "fearless" queen shiver...
Celestia: "Hey Luna, how did you say you turned into Nightmare moon?"
Luna: "I was under extreme stress when I suddenly heard a voice which promised me everything. If you ever hear such a voice just ignore it."
Celestia: "Thank Faust I just randomly asked this. Thanks for the insight. I was about to do something very stupid."
The End.
Chrysalis: *eats popcorn*
Chrysalis: "Hehe. I'm in danger."
Luna is just taking a forced vacation on the moon, right? Right?
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Still being tuned.
Maybe try the elements?
That worked out well last time.
Edit: Nevermind, it's explained later.
Daybreaker: "Uh, maybe. We'll sort that out later."
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