A good story displays a moral, the best ones attach you to the characters who display them.
It's hard to adjust to a new life.
That's what they say, anyways. This was not so for Vapor Trail: she adapted easily to life at the academy. That wasn't the problem, though, the only problem others notice is how she adapted: sticking to the sidelines while cheering him on.
Rated T for brief rude humor.
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7727841
Thanks.
What a confusing mare..... (Rubs bridge of my nose) I understand what she's trying to do and what she thinks her purpose is.... This need a follow-up to help explain more dynamics between her friend and herself.... Does he understand how she feels not towards him but in general..... And I think Fleetfoot's joke went over her head lol I think you made a adult joke ,Sir.
still it was nice and to the point bravo
I only saw one thing that stood out to me grammar wise... When she refers to her friend as ... Him?.... Is that a question or being asked questionably towards Fleetfoot? Thank you
7727849
Haha good on you u beat me lol and here I thought I was making good time good show
7727845
Yeah, it's meant to be a little confusing. As far as a follow-up, I think I'll keep this as is.
And yeah, I had to try an adult joke at some point in my career.
And as for your question, it's the latter.
7727855
Very well (twists moustache ) right on you Lad. Haha
other than that I had no issues right going and what a spectacular comeback 
7727869
It wasn't I was challenging myself and congratulating u on out doing me at my own challenge lol
7727870
Thank you.
7727887
what are friends for? Lol
No problem
I guess you could say Vapor is happy senpai noticed her long ago.
7727909
I guess you could...
7727914
Thank you, I'm glad you liked it.
That's was pretty good! 7/10!
7728069
Thank you.
cause her friend's an asshole
7728796
Maybe, but he cared enough about her getting the respect she deserves that she brought it to their Captain.
Nice one.
7744906
Thanks.
Not gonna lie, I completely forgot I had this on to my read list(sorry about that
) *ahem* Anyways, onto my thoughts.
I love Vapor. Ever since I saw the ep, I've wanted to write a story with her but as life has it, busy, busy, busy(ugh, I hate myself). And you wrote her pretty well. Personally, Sky is a... ah, what's the word...? A rule 63 version of RD(Not sure if that makes sense or if that's the right metaphor...) and that's not exactly a good thing but that's just me. The fact she puts her friend far above herself is brave on its own terms and I love it. The only problem I noticed was the grammar but I'm not one to talk since I hardly hold a candle to good writers. That's and I need help just to have the stories done so... anyways, love the story so here's a like. Sorry it took me so long to read this.
7801806
It's no problem: I prefer a relaxed pace, myself.
Thanks for adding this to your favourites.
Also, need a hug? You sound like you need a hug.
7801827 A)Ah. Glad you didn't mind. B) What are you, Pinkie's brother? In all seriousness though, I'm alright. Just dealing with my own problems. Nothing worth noting. Running pretty late on Christmas stories(I have two. One of witch is dark themed and the other light). Anyways... I'll check out your other story soon(hopefully by tomorrow).
7801847
A) No problem.
B) Maybe...
In all seriousness, I'm glad you're ok. (And I have that exact same problem!)
And don't be afraid to procrastinate reading a little longer in favor of getting some work done, I often do just that.
7801857 Problem? And that is what if u don't mind me asking.
7801875
Being behind on two Christmas stories: one light-themed, the other dark.
Not major, per se: but definitely nerve-wracking, I know.
I suppose a more appropriate word would've been 'Issue'?
7801882 (oh?) Ah. For some reason, I presumed something bad. Then again, considering my luck, that's not an understatement. *ahem* in any event, I plan on posting my next story on the 21st. The 2ND one will be on Christmas Day. After that, I have no particular order but hopefully I can start getting my stories out once every week(maybe every two)
7801890
(Yeah: one's a comedy, the other a tragedy)
Okay, yeah, you need a hug. *Hugs*
Well, I hope that goes well for you!
7801922 It seems my story (Jealousy) got a good review. I credited you of course. So that person might be coming here to see your story. Still, thanks.
I feel bad for Fleetfoot. xD
Nice story though, you made me find another reason why Vapor did what she did!
8170840
Yeah, talking to ponies with a different perspective can be... frustrating.
And I'm always glad to offer a headcanon!
My review of the story can be found here.
8489931
Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it.