Jean was a simple seventeen year old guy, living with his big sister in east philadelphia. He was a big geek, played video games, pen & paper role playing games, watching cartoons and anime. until he was sent to Equestria.
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Who is Avarice?
8204780 avarice(shortened to Ava) is a resident evil four merchant displaced (from the fic hello, stranger by GameJunkie7) that later becomes a fertility goddess that Palutena met in an earlier chapter (chapter 11 it was a part that was missing apparantly, so I readded it a few days ago she shows up again in chapter 18 for the birth of Palutena's foals, her grandfoals) who through some rather kinky shenanigans becomes Palutena's mother. Lumi(Crescent) was also apart of Ava before she split from the Ava collective and started dating Palutena.
8205526 the switch in perspective is more an issue of me working through old chapters to convert it to third person from first person, as I found that it was too ambitious and I was forgetting to emote, as for the issues you brought up some was just stuff I glossed over or perhaps forgot to elaborate on.(I'll go through it and see where I can elaborate, as I am not sure where I can fit in the explanations. As for your critique yes I'm fine with it I welcome it, I am not an English major, I am doing my best I haven't been writing for long.
8205526 actually quick question was the first person sections italicised? if so those are thoughts, I am rewritting it to third person omnicient.
8205649 Yes they were. However, you literally changed it to third person in the middle of a sentence.
8208645 Partially, that was the reason and also because having to wait many chapters for an explanation didn't seem useful if people where going to question it early on.
8208658 The interludes will be chapters that focus on the history of Celestia and Palutena and other events that I didn't sufficiently explain in the main story chapters and are informed by later chapters and palutena's guidence interludes".
8210897 actually the story already existed in an interlude section called Palutena's guidence, your comment just made me aware that maybe I should probably introduce the story earlier and subsequently add to it.
8211051 Cool.
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oooh, okay. I kinda skimmed that chapter.
8233701 okay, I can't force people to like clop.
Little tidbit in case it hadn't been mentioned, Aphrodite is Greek not Roman. The roman variant is Venus.