Part one in the series.
Rainbow Dash has been wanting to tell Applejack her true feelings for her but is to afraid to do so. Finally mustering up the courage, Rainbow Dash goes to tell Applejack how she feels but finds herself being avoided. Finally catching up to Applejack and tell her the truth. Shortly after a simple misunderstandings tears the two apart.
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Great Start! I'm hooked on this story now.
Huzzah! AppleDash with proper grammar
Since they had first met as fillies, strong feelings had developed for her companion The mere thought of her caused her heart to start racing - you missed a dot there
NOO its all a misunderstanding
Nice story, although it's sad that Rainbow Dash lost her flying ability.
Usually Rainbow Dash would have take a few minutes for herself to get in a quick practice session for the tricks
would have taken or would take
the lake making the silver water
sparkle
an enter to soon
Now she had not only had she lost her best friend,
two had's and she's
'Tis indeed quite sad>>826288
826282
Grammar has never been my strong suit. *scurries around to fix things*
Heh, thanks.
826456
Oh geez, how did I miss that... No excuses..
Anyway, fixed!
Such a touching story
Definitely suited for my AppleDash group
I do believe an epilogue might be in orde
Maybe a year later when Rainbow is able to walk again and have her adjusting to her new life..
Or her wing kept getting muscle spams and it eventually healed and Rainbow has to learn how to fly again
Good story, but this concept has been done to death. It was essentially the definition of cliche, and completely predictable, which took away from the experience. Good writing skills, but use that for something more original next time.
827838
Thanks for your thoughts. Sorry you didn't enjoy the story.
Personally though, I will add that I don't read fanfiction and I've only been writing for not even three months, so I don't know what has and has not been done to death.
827883 It's completely understandable, even though I do agree that this idea has been done before, it did not make it less enjoyable to read
The grammar in this story was also a sight for sore eyes, needless to say you did a fantastic job with it. Over all I give it a 8.5/10.I really enjoyed it (thumb up & Fav)
Sweet. Dash will fly again
D'awwwwwwwwwwwwww
what a nice ending :D
Interesting story, though I do have to agree that it was pretty overdone...
I enjoyed it either way, though, especially considering I'm not exactly a fan of AppleDash. ^^'
And I also agree that the grammar was pretty sloppy. Next time try to proofread a bit more before posting. :)
Great story lad!
Sequel NOW!
Please?
832261
Sequel is being processed as we speak. Had to finish editing it the best I could and now I wait for the painful day long wait or so for it to become public.
Edit: never mind it appears it is actually going to be up quite shortly.
Wvat?
The stages of my face after this fanfic
848826
I'm not sure how to take that! P:
Cupcakes, Rainbow Dash and Pinkie Pie... those words arent supposed to be together in harmony... if ya no what i mean
849262
The only reason I know what you mean is because this has been pointed out so many times to me.
I've NEVER read a single fanfiction. Least of all cupcakes. XP
849262 (BlackMirage)
It really depends on the context. In this context, it's perfectly fine! I mean, if in a story someone was stabbing someone to death with a stake it wouldn't be harmonious but if someone was using stakes to put up a tent it would be fine!
890540
Poor Rainbow Dash, she can't very well fall in love with somepony without being maimed in some way. It's an obligatory part of any AppleDash fic.
Coxjisnsijekzjejdken can't wait to see what happens next
903455 You know you're right, but it's not a bad plot device you got to admit.
Hmm. I don't like that really, if they think that Rainbow has someone...then it would be bad for Rainbow if Applejack comes up and tells her she loves her. That would just make it all worse, and I think Twilight would know that.
848826
I can't tell if that was good or not.
However this one is mine:
EDIT: WAIT...I thought this was the last chapter....I'll give my actual reaction in a minute.
Still:
1308346 It works wonderfully as a plot device. Especially since the two in the story are so rugged and tomboy-ish.
1877159 Indeed,and that's one of the reasons why there perfect for each other.
I love it
i think you mean "She took out an apple from one of the buckets and chewed noisily on it."
this makes me sad
Omg this was awesome