• Member Since 23rd Oct, 2011
  • offline last seen Aug 19th, 2015

BronyNeumo


Author, dreamer, adventurer, scientist, High Prince of Appledashery, and bonafide lover of sadfics and the Great American Cheeseburger.

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Sometimes, when you've lost so much, when everything you do seems to come out wrong, and when you don't feel like anything but a failure, it can seem like there is no other option but to give up.

But when one pony feels so lost, so inconsolable, so forlorn, that she makes a life-changing decision that almost leaves her shattered forever, it is up to her friends to bring her back.

When you lose something that you can't replace, when you love someone but it goes to waste, and when the tears come streaming down your face, is there anyone who you can turn to...

...to fix you?

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 159 )

Must not cry... Activate pokerface: :rainbowderp:

T4

hmm, im liking this so far. dd you read shattered rainbow?

28157
Actually, "Shattered Rainbow" wasn't brought to my attention until after "To Fix You" was posted on EqD.

At that point, the author of "Shattered Rainbow" was already reading mine and told me mine was even better. :rainbowlaugh:

All i could think about at the ending was...

snake?
snake!?
SNAKE?
SNAAAAAAAAKE!

MxP

Read up to chapter 5, realized it was the end. Went all "BUT WHAT ABOUT FLUTTERSHY!?!?!?!"

Then I read chapter 6, and then I cried.:heart::fluttercry:

(Thankfully not as dark as expected)

Little do you know I've already read this on EqD.

Insta 5 star go

28394
End of chapter 3

:twilightsmile: blue waffle

“Well then, Sugarcube, I will try to fix you.” ZING! :rainbowdetermined2:

I saw this on Equestria Daily and it wouldn't load on my horrid connection on my wii. I am glad it' on here. This is a geat story, thank you.

*reads at 11:04 pm* cries.

Read this on EQD; a good story. I also like the picture for it on here compared to the one on EQD.

Great story. There clearly isn't another word to talk about it.

I really enjoyed this one, can't believe I missed it on EqD. :facehoof:

I love the cover image too, whose it by?

Good job. I really couldn't find a flaw in your entire story. Both story-line and grammar wise. (well there was ONE grammatical error, but it was very minor so I wont bother about it; plus finding it again may be a issue :P it was a single word.)

SPOILER ALERT
And now for the emotional analysis. I will admit that I cried when you killed Fluttershy, but I was both slightly happy and yet disappointed that it was all a dream. I would have loved to see how the death of fluttershy would have played out with Rainbow Dash.
The shipping was good, all the characters took to their expected personalities.
One small continuity issue I did notice was with Applejack's backstory. If we were to relate her story to that of the actual episode, her age would have been that of Appleboom, and the level of maturity she showed, even as good ol' Applejack was a bit too much for her as a filly. :applejackconfused:

Grammar: 4/5
Story line: 4/5
Appeal: 5/5
Overall rating: 5/5

CAN-NOT-CRY

THE DARKNESS IN MY SOUL FORBIDS ME TO CRY!

*sniff*

SCREW IT! :fluttercry:

BRILLIANT! PLEASE STOP MAKING ME CRY!

This story was just so fucking :fluttercry:

28294 That killed the mood. :ajbemused:

I don't really know how to cry. So I do what Pinkie does. I laugh. :pinkiehappy:

My first thought after reading the final line: NUH UH! :applejackunsure:

Thank you for writing this. :heart:
I recently went through something similar to Rainbow Dash's experience and I know how hard it is.
So again, great story and it almost made me cry.:fluttercry:
Merry Christmas!
:twilightsmile:

It's great to see this on here - I read it on EQD way back when... and loved it.
I always thought it was funny to see a few similarities it has with my fic, 'Hearts Aflutter'.
Only just now getting around to writing that out properly though.

Anyways, awesome fic. Truly one of the better ones I've read.

Unwilling or unable to accept the situation she was being faced with, she watched as her oldest friend fell nearer and nearer to impact, until a switch flipped in her mind.

not even close, man. fluttershy is the oldest and twilight the youngest.

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It would be wise to learn the difference between "oldest" and "eldest".

Oldest friend means: "Friend who you have known the longest."
Eldest friend would mean: "Friend who has the largest age."

to be honest i'd liked the fluttershy-dying part more. there was sooo much potential in it. and i think the story with AJ could've lasted about 5k words if you would've tried.

112471

oh that makes much more sense!

Great story, I'm not sure why, but I've read a few incredibly well-written fics that just make me cry, good thing too, as I've been living as a bit of a cold-hearted jerk these last few years. It's always good to get a slice of life in these stories. Overall impression of an obvious 5/5 for this story.

:rainbowhuh: confusion
:rainbowderp: getting it...
:rainbowkiss: understand!
:rainbowhuh: lost again...
:rainbowlaugh: get it now!

this was the first ever fanfic that I read. it was amazing. It made me cry, then feel about as happy as possible. Amazing:pinkiehappy:

I remember reading this on EqD a few months ago. Basing a fic on a song is quite the interesting concept.

That was beautiful I am an 18yr male I SQEE'd when I saw the reference to another Coldplay song "Yellow":pinkiehappy::pinkiesad2::pinkiesmile:

Can't believe I hadn't commented on this fanfic earlier. This was one of the first fanfics that I ever read, and I think it's one of the reasons I keep reading them now. This was a very moving story if I ever saw one. I'm glad that everyone made it in the end, but it's obvious Rainbow had to work her way back towards some semblance of normal. And the various Coldplay lyrics peppered into the song made it all the more interesting. Long story short, awesome story. :yay:

Are you going to upload your sequel on fimfiction, too? I don't like the non-existent tracking system of DeviantArt/EquestriaDaily...

200311
I'll get it here eventually, give me at least a day to get the files sorted. I've been pretty busy this week.

201966

I was just already asking, so that I know if I should begin to read already. It was a question, not an order or something =(

112434

I think the author means that RD had been her friend the longest.

this

is beautiful

Since the start, I wanted to see some Pinkieshy. Oh well, still well done.
Also, I didn't shed a tear after the "Fluttershy's fine part"

I love this... Do yourself a favor and give yourself a cookie... This was stunning...That's all that needs to be said... :pinkiesad2:

Just thinking... Werent Raritys parents in sisterhooves social?
But i assume this was written before the episode.

122976
Same over here. just worse.

This was a really well written story. I am glad I found it and I hope you write another fic in the future. You have a real talent for it as the tears that have been shed will tell you. Great job.

Very good story! gonna read every chapter today and story 2 too probably :pinkiehappy:

:applecry::fluttercry::raritycry:
rly good story though:pinkiehappy:

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