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7928772 hahahaha the perfect reaction ive gotten so far
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Well, I do try.
he sure fought like hell and won.
boo yah!
just us the dragonballs
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Krillin: dammit roshie!
Roshie:shut up krillin
If you get it then yay!
7938683 Dude; 44 chapters, over 27 weeks, and nearly 318,000 words into a story and you still don't capitalize "I" when the POV character is referring to themselves?
I'm sorry, but after 8 chapters, I can't read this any more.
7942391 oh that makes since
7938683 This is going pretty good so far and I can't wait to read more.
This seems interesting enough, but I can't get 'into' the story. It feels like your skipping around plot development(I barely read up to chapter 5 so far). If I could make a suggestion; go into detail about how he really learns that he is death's son first. Just having his 'pops' tell him, should not make him understand all the details that he clearly understands already. Also, his abilities are showing up randomly and makes no sense as to why he can do them easily. Can you explain how he learns them?
Please. I really want to feel like I could dive into the life of rin, but the roadblocks I mentioned are stopping that feeling. Thanks for your time.
7843647 read it it's actually a good story if u don't mind the grammar
8134419 meh
8134432 The latest chapters are far more legible, though capitalization remains a constant flaw. You might not have the best execution, but you're not a shit writer. You've got it in you, it's just taking the time to do it.
OH ,PLEASE LTD CONTINUE THIS STORIE!!!!PPPPPPPPPPPPPPLLLLLLLLLLLLLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAASSSSSSSSSSSSSSSEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!PLEASE LOVE IT SO MUCH
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Get a beta to help fix up the issues so its a fluid read. For some people errors make it hard to focus and read through a story.
Hello are you and this story alive?
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Im alive but im not sure about the story got another if your intrested though
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Well you hit gold with this one for sure is up there with things like greffen the greffen as for reading the ather unless it like 50 chapters plus I'm not likely to go read it.
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Well its still ongoing but alright
The terrible English is the issue, a Beta would fix that up right quick.
Wow can't wait for the next chapter.
So i decided to give this fic a shot. Ive read about 100 pages worth and i have to say please get an editor. I could ignore the grammar though in hope of it getting bettter. never the less a bit dissapointed.
(Spoilers)
As for what i got from the story, its completely wacko in plot development. From becoming mr. Edge lord himself to being the son of link. I either have a terrible understanding of zeldas herritage or this fic has got a rating of five stars in the random category.
Sorry if i went a bit hard, i do see some need of improvement in certain areas though i bet you could be great. Have a good day
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I realized how random it was and I'll admit I winged it pretty hard so I stopped doing this story and I will not return, but I started on one of my old stories and it has done pretty well, their are some grammer issues yes, but I promised to many that I will go back and fix them. If you wish you may go read if not then I will not disheartened it is your choice. I hope you have a nice day, merry Christmas and a happy new year.
Also if you look through the comments, their are people who have said much worse, but I dont mind them.
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Yes I do, but that doesn't mean I can't comment in the extra words section.
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True, have at it I guess
*cough* why is the start of this story written like that? *cough*
When's the update coming up
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Some? Basically the entire story. Just semi literate and turned gary stu. Complete rip off of a much better story.
I hope that this story will get an update, I don't need to add another dead story to my list
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Sorry to say my guy, but its dead, ran out of ideas so I went to my other stories the savior and a new life
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Thanks for telling me, at least I know now, I'll be looking forward to the other stories!
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All the time my friend.
This story needs a rewrite and an editor I barely finished the first chapter and I have seen my fair share of bad writing
Are you ever going to finish this
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Nope
Then why don't you put it on canceled then
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True
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Dang man cut me some slack it's been like 3 years
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Yeah I realize that but dont criticize someone for their grammar/spelling when you can't spell right either
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Think of it as like a pet peeve
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I'll be taking over this story I dont know when chapters will be uploaded though so rest assured
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Sorry about earlier but I think you'll be happy to know I am continueing this story and yes before I send the chapters I'll be going through to look for grammar and spelling
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"We all make mistakes in the heart of passion,jimbo"
Just. Spell check. PLEASE!
I want to see more of this story
I'll... I'll just leave a link here for you.
https://www.fimfiction.net/writing-guide#Dialogue
That's all I have to say.
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Atleast you can see the errors and kept practicing. Thats the mark of a good author.
The beginning of the story hurt my brain
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Read my other work startingthis new life, I winged it with this