Sex on the Porch

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Commander Darklight

Commander Darklight #1 · Jul 19th, 2016 · · ·

worth it!

Jonny5300394

Jonny5300394 #2 · Jul 19th, 2016 · 1 · ·

"What else is there"

Haven't been on the Internet long have you? :P

Anyway, I gave the story a quick glance over and it seemed decent, but you may wanna fix up the typos and missing punctuation in the description, and the authors note.

Also, maybe it's just me, but in a story description, using ampersand and abbreviations such as "gfs" comes off as absurdly amateur and lazy. I tend to skip over stories that do so. Like it or not, people judge stories by their covers, we have too, there's too many otherwise, and if you use stuff like that in the description, you may very well do it in the story itself.

All that being done with, not bad, not bad at all.

chavis54