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Mr. Haze
I'm a brony. I love to write, read, draw. I was sucked into the MLP fandom by voluntary choice. I love these stories and I love making stories.
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So... how did she write the last bit? Or is it in real time?
Anyway, fun, dark story here. Undead Twilight is best Twilight.
Fun story, a few typos, but enjoyable overall. Only real complaint is the timeframe, seems a bit fast for everything that happened. You could double the number of days and it would still give the proper feel of a snowballing series of events. Twilight not being aware of major holidays and events struck me as a bit strange as well.
I have no idea what happened at the end there, but that was a fantastic story and one of the best uses of lichs I have seen in a very long while. Minor gramatical errors throughout, but the diary structure worked quite well. the timeframe being only 40 days was kind of impractical, but it's still easy to understand what's going on in the story. I was pleasantly surprised when this didn't turn into a mindless gorefic, and the way you wrote about Twilight's sanity slipping away was very effective. Take all my likes, I enjoyed that very much.
Well that was really good
of what I understand Twilight went comlitly mad
at the end and thought Celestia was Crysatlis. Very good story indeed
OH FUCK! THAT MARE IS STILL RUNNING!
literally laughed out loud so bad, I don't even care that the context made no sense as a diary entry. this line is just so funny 
With Twilight's previous mental stress I shortened the story to 40 day because of preexisting conditions. She was prone to insanity to the start. So... thank you very much for your comments. I will indeed take them into consideration.
Don't you mean "Has proven to be..."?
Don't you mean "Pyrokinesis"?
I hope you don't mind that I added your story. I was sitting here and thinking about what I felt had to be done yet hadn't been done.
Slippery slopes twilight. This was good would have been amazing to get chapters of this length for every day and then stretch out the time period to maybe 5 years or so. Sad what she did to Amber she could have easily kept her alive but imprisoned everyone was used to them using sound proof wards just go back to it not like amber could break out.
Suddenly Glimmer.
Schools can't decide if they value intelligent students or not. Also aren't the students adults? Shouldn't they be busy taking 3 jobs to repay their student loans instead of caring about the top students?
Are you sure those are college students or high schoolers?
Won't it make more sense they suck up to Twilight to get closer to Celestia?
Those tech bros seems to believe otherwise. Also future Twilight in an alternate universe just laughs.
I love how it only took 2 weeks for her to start killing ponies yet longer to start swearing. That's a rather odd morality.
I can't stop picturing Glimmer.
The days before computer storage were dark times.
For some ponies, that makes it better.
Is she writing with her mind?
To anyone asking how she wrote the last bit, she *said* she would use amber and the thrall telepathy to record her thoughts in the journal.
Right here.