I'm a user that has been on the site since before season 3. I'm working on a story called World at War, and some of my earliest work exists in my catalog.
Rick is an isolated human that got stranded in the woods after being sucked in a portal and built his life there since he was 19. Now 22 he became well known with the wildlife and the climate, he knew it was going to get colder, with that he needed some more wood for a fire to keep him warm. Then he discovered something strange.
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This reminds me of Unreal World.
I hope twilight doesn't bring the dissection tools
The ideas there but your wording and flow is awkward
Hmmm shows promise I hope you do continue
5613105 Lulz.
5613968 We'll see.
5613711 I did touch up on this story that was half written a year or two ago.
5612922
Huh?
Also a question to the author, who the human is going to get shipped with?
5615372 That will be explained later in the story I don't want to spoil the readers.
5615372 It's a Survival Game. It has notoriously difficult winters if you don't prepare. Mainly trying to chop enough firewood to not frieze to death.
5615593 Oh that's what that is I was confused too on that comment.
Unless you plan to put a bit more effort into the writing, I'd say don't bother continuing. It seems somewhat an interesting premise, but if you're only half interested than it would probably just be better to drop it rather than continue with a mediocre story.
5617063 Thanks for the feedback, I'll try to put more effort in the story.
Tenses gets mixed up, some typos, capital letters are missing, the descriptions are tacky. "He did x. Then he did y. And he said z."
5630123 Thanks for the feedback.
I think I give up at this point.
5665645 See Diaries of a Madman you may or may not like it. I haven't gotten around to reading it yet but give it a shot. http://www.fimfiction.net/story/45860/diaries-of-a-madman
Looks okay so far. And I like it
Definately hope you continue this. Has the beginings of a great story!
This is really cool, though i assume its been left for so long there os no intrest to continue, however if this is not the case, you should definitely continue
9020290
After going on a long break and starting back recently, I decided this story shouldn't continue. Grammar problems, rushed pace, and structure is poor. I have changed a lot from when this was written. My new story should, hopefully, prove to be engaging and more enjoyable, at least for me.