Hello, my name is Alex. Sad to say I might not be continuing, Steve: Through the portal. Why you may ask, I lost interest in it. I lost the motivation, I was planning on rewriting the story but...
I don't think I will. We will just have to see on that. Though we can all agree the story was not that good, it did have a little hope. Also, why I might not be rewriting it is because I would have rewrite, EVERYTHING! Down to the core of even planning! So that's apart of the reason. Till then.
~ Alex
Chapters (2)
I just saw a movie about Minecraft (documentary) and I said to myself ''It would be cool for their to be a Minecraft/Pony fic and my wish was answered.''
3418738 lol
this is my first fanfic, I hope you did like it. 
peace.
one rain dasher there's a good one called the capitain of mining anddd pm me if ya need my help as a proofreader for this story rainbowskit
3425299 after I deleted it in about a hour I felt like a dick because you did it for fun, and I'm sorry but you're taking this too far and I don't have time to deal with hate comments and you made you're self look like a dick and acting like I'm the curse to mankind. Again I'm sorry but going to far. And also I toke some things from the 'everything wrong with Steve in a new world' and I did take in mind with want you said HECK I EVEN FOLLOWED SOME THINGS YOU SAID! That's why you should think twice before attacking people. I do read hate comments and I do learn from them.
3418738 oh and also minecraft adventures beyond but I like this one cause rainbow skit the writer, and his team (me LOL) is doing a job to make fanfiction Awsome THAT RIGHT RAINBOWSKIT?
3428480 THATS SO RIGHT!?
3429222lol
First!
3432643 lol
3432654Lolol
This is criticism, not hate and I say things that you might need to work on to improve your writing. If you don't want any negative feedback on your story, feel free to delete this comment now. No offense intended.
First off, you need to work on your paragraphs. ALOT of that text you could bunch together and it would make a lot more sense. Your spelling is decent but please specify the characters more as its hard to tell who's doing what a lot of the time. On top of that, the characters feel incredibly out of character- for example, Twilight feels way too at ease to letting a completely different species- let alone a stranger- into her home when she doesn't know what the species motives are, where it came from, etc. She doesn't even question any of it!
You also need to work on your 'show and not tell'. That is, rather that blatantly saying: she cried, you could say her eyes began to leak. Crappy example but that's the idea behind show and tell..
Final thing: pace it more and work on staying in one tense.
Heres an example of the first paragraph if you split it up and paced it a little more:
What the heck?" He (steve- needs specifying) says to himself, (.) "This does not make sense. How does it have this (these) good graphics?" (" not needed) The trees look so... Real(.) i(I)t doesn’t make any sense!(") Steve walk(s) around in the woods,(, not needed) (and) he (he not needed) thought to himself(;) why not try to get wood.(. not needed)(?) He goes to a tree and punches it good and hard, but sees that he takes some damage from it! What the hell! (! not needed)(?) I should not be taking damage! (Steve thought- needs specifying) And (and not needed) h(H)e notice(s) that his health is not recharging (. not needed) (and thinks,) (o)Ok... Why is my health not recharging? Fuck man(,) what do I do... Steve look(s) around a bit to find the edge of the woods(. not needed)(and eventually sees it.)HEY look the edge of the woods!(this entire sentence feels out of place/not needed) As Steve ran(runs?) at(to?) the edge of the woods to(with as at the beginning it should be a he, not a to) see(s) a village nearby. Awesome a village near (my) spawn(.) Even better... (... not needed/bad grammar)(Steve thought- needs specifying)(,) (n)Now sprinting to the village.
3432883dude you said hes instead of he's
3437488 hey dude don't hate he's my 2ed editor.
You need to make them speak more realistic.
3437702 I understand what you mean.
3437610>>3437610 I'm not. He should be the first cause he's better though.
3440392 yeah but you were my first editor before him so there for you're my first editor and he's my second.
3437488 If your trying to prove me wrong or rebut me, don't worry. The author already said hes fine with my criticism and asked me if I'd like to because his second editor. (over PM) I'm not looking to get into an argument over something like a simple mistake (everyone makes em'
) so its all good. 
3441286 No I'm not. I am saying you skills are awesome and you should be first cause you're better.
3441403 Thats even cooler then.
I think what Rainbowskits saying is that he made you editor first so your his 'first' editor and he made me editor second so I'm his 'second' editor, quite literally. I don't think hes referring to actual rank, but I could be wrong.
3441417 Well he would be wrong if he was going by rank. Number and date... Right on the money.
3441505 My fathers an author- I guess that helps my writing/editing skills
3441621 I don't judge my editor by rank I just wanted to add that
3469568 *shivering* I don't know.
3469617 she might of check out his um private areas...?
3471031 probably no... I don't read much 'clopfics'.
3540548 Yeah it's really rushed. I have been thinking about not continuing the story, as it was rushed and just it's too flawed. I did not write it as good as it should of been, and I did not explain things as good and I also rushed romance too much. But I have a new story it's called 'New Life, Old War' I highly recommend reading it.
3542315 Also, I have got better at writing, planning and details on stories. I'm writing a story right now that's has, almost no rushing, high amounts of detail and smoothly wrote. so I think I did good...
Please continue man.
4330466 Sorry, but no. I can't, it just wasn't that good. I did have little hope and that's all fine and good but if the story isn't good it's not worth working on, for me anyways.
5356361 It was and IS really fuckin' awesome! Seriously! Please!
All pf your other stories are HITS!!! You just have to continue on that kinda path to make this one even better!!
5357743 I've lost my interest in it, sorry but I will not. Also, read my latest blog post I explain some important.
5357748 Read the comment below.
Please don't leave us....
please continue....
5360181 Sorry dude. But I want to become a game developer and that takes a lot of time.
5362899 well do this story in your free time!! PLEASE I'm begging you!!!
5364957 Look I'm done working on the story for a lot of reason other than rewriting it. I'm moving on, I found so many other joys than writing, I'm working to develop games and that's something I chose to do. I'm not moving away from the community I'm just focused on so many other things. I don't want to work on the story or any of them for that matter, I lost interest in a lot of my work and that includes this one. So I'm letting go of them, and I'm not changing that. Please come up with a good well thought out comment for me to read OVER PM, this isn't a conversation to have on this story page for the fact that it isn't relative to the story.