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Knetir, half Argonian, half Nord, is the prophecized Dragonborn. To him dragon hunting is a normal activity. He is always cautious about this, but one day this activity killed him. Due to reasons unknown, he's given a second chance in Equestria. There he'll finish his mission.
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Story telling style reminds me of Fallout Equestria. I like this one already.
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Thanks for the words of encouragement!
7779123 You're welcome. When does this take place?
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This takes place right before the season 2 finale
Seems like Knetir's using a whole new perk tree unlike the ones from Frostfall.
celestia is a bitch here
7782972 at least it's not the 'I am the God of the world, and need to be in control of everything and you can do nothing to stop me' Celestia.
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That's true, I actually kinda dislike it when writers do that.
I tried to make it seem realistic with what Celestia would do. I tried to make a mix between full tyrant Celestia and "I'm the kindest pone" Celestia
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Is the guy in the picture an Argonian? I'm sorry, but I don't know much about Skyrim...
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Yeah he is
It'll be hard resisting every instinct to not kill Spike.
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True, but I do have some interesting plans for Spike and Knetir
7798009 It'll be interesting teaching Spike the Way of The Voice, if he does.
So I haven't yet read a single chapter of this yet and before i do i have one major question how can this guy exist?
I mean I'm not talking about the whole Dragonborn thing I'm talking about the fact that he's half Beastrace and halfnord( which is a human race) in the Lore it's just not something happens.
I SUPPOSE you could play the whole 'the gods wanted it card' and to be honest i would be totaly cool with it..im just crious ok its how my brain works
ANNY WHO ima read this story now lets hope its a real kicker! I need something to binge read my friend
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Yes I know the offspring probably wouldn't look like full of one but a mix of both
But this is fanfiction, we don't need no canon or lore!
But point aside, yes I can play that "Gods demand it" card all the time, but where's the fun in that
Just go with the simple explanation of genetic splicing
And may I mention that he's the first of his kind, I kinda did forget to mention that. Whoops
Anywho enjoy!
MAN THIS IS A FAST ONE its right into the action no corners cut and... not sure if I like that to be honest. Its like i allways say real fiction has crurves
. Innuendo based analogies aside i think this could do with more interaction! For example a more fluid introduction to some of the reasoning to the characters actions. I feel like the best stories i have read have let you observe to determine things like that. To put it into one word i would say show don't tell.
For example i could say"you punched me now im mad!" Which frankly sounds a little bit silly or i could describe this emotion like this i suppose" Marks brows furrowed as he registed the unwanted pain shooting up his arm" Its better than simply stateing it because it gives more room for personality and description ya know?
Im I'm probably just preaching to the choir though..in any case i hope this has helped and rember to take it slow! Im gona take quality over quantity even if it takes years to make!
I mean just look at Mordane Stronghoof its takeing forever but its well worth the wait and im shure your audence can view your stroy the same way!
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Yes it did thank you for the constructive critism that I can build upon.
If your referring to the fight with the Manticore
It was because he wanted to kill it as practice if ever he runs into more of them in the future
*sees new chapter out via my feed* Yeahhh! Time to read it! *reads it and finishes* Alright now onto the next chap-Oh. That's it for now.
Welp, time to wait for more chapters. 
I never played Skyrim before though. I want that Special Edition one for the XB1, cause it looks amazing. 
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Oh don't worry, I'll be trying to post weekly for the coming weeks
It's a good game plus on XB1, there's mods
7808833 I know. It looks so awesome! Sadly, I'm stuck with my Xbox 360, and my Skyrim disc is practically dead, due to being scratched up so much.
it's okay, but Celestia is really out of character imo
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FYI
She's acting that way because the Celestia being portrayed here isn't friendly Celestia, but Tyrant Celestia instead
Tia, stop it. Get some help.
I am so sorry but I had to say it
7808718 Thanks for saying it. I don't like doing it, even if I know it has to be done. This story really needs work...
I'm sorry.
7887605 hay don't worry about it I'm just trying to help. The best way to know when some ones mad at yah is for them too leave yah hangn when it comes to advice
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Me? Mad at something that can help?
Sounds crazy
Like I've said before its alright, criticism can help
Wait.....didn't he get a pardon?
Ew, school. *insert 12 DansGame Twitch emotes here* But I guess it is important and such. I liked this chapter though. I will await for another, if you decide to work on this more.
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He tried to kill Spike remember? That's why Celestia wants to get him arrested again
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I know, school's a pain in the ass.
Don't worry, I'm not planning to stop anytime soon
7894510 oh...well....still he's alive! That should count for something!
7894510 more please
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I'll be tryin'
This feels like another Skyrim game.
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I'll take that as a compliment... But thanks for the response anyway!
Timberwolves don't breath fire.
They captured him and imprisoned him for no crimes. That is fucked up.
The story moves to fast and there are no reasons given for ANY of the characters reactions please be more thorough in your story telling.
moved waaaaay to fast
When is the next chapter coming out?
ATTENTION TO EVERYONE READING THIS STORY
I shall be doing a complete overhaul of this whole story, so I shall be deleting all the chapters and reworking the whole thing completely, please bear with me