It has been several years since Discord's reign of chaos and anarchy was quelled by the Elements of Harmony, but that doesn't stop the malevolent entity from plaguing the ruler of Equestria with terrifying nightmares of a future he wishes to create.Will Celestia cave into the dark desires Discord places into her mind? Or will she overcome the odds of insanity and remain strong as the sovereign ruler of Equestria?
(Mild language, some gore but not grotesque. Cover art coloring done by LeafLock. Proof reading in progress and revisions done by Idsertian)
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Well, that escalated quickly.
The ending seemed somewhat...abrupt and I think you need to find yourself an editor, or at least a proof-reader, as there are so many grammatical errors it's tough to count them all. Otherwise, it's a sound idea and I do like.
You got yourself a thumbs up, sir.
EDIT: One point that occurs to me: You mention how Celestia is nigh indestructible and how no physical harm could kill her; yet Luna finishes her off with a mere stab through the neck. You're contradicting yourself there, and I would suggest that you reign in (haha) your description of Celestia's toughness.
Idsertian, thank you for your comment. I appreciate your constructive criticism. Although, please elaborate on my 'grammatical errors' I'm using Microsoft Word 2007 so spell check removes most of my errors.
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Apologies for the late reply, I haven't had a chance to get onto fimfiction until now.
Rather than crap up the comments section with a long-as-hell post, I'll read through again with a critical eye and send what I find in a PM, along with any fixes/suggestions I think up.
Also, don't rely on the spell-checker in any word processing application, it's a rudimentary tool. It'll catch basic rules and errors, but nothing more. There's no better checker than your own two eyes, or failing that, someone else's. :P
Also also, every time I see the title of this story, I think of this: http://youtu.be/OKAQzS40PeY?t=3m20s
Also also also, you should contact a mod and ask them to remove the spambot comment in 1st. You can find their details in the FAQ.
So falling to her death does nothing, but being stabbed in the neck kills her?