After a snide comment from Diamond, Apple Bloom learns the truth of what it means to be beautiful from confiding in Applejack
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This would make a great premise for an episode.
And because I'm a horrible person, here's my summary of the story:
AJ, do you think I'm beautiful?
Well, Sugarcube, ya sure got a great personality.
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Ha. Thanks. Although at the end: She did say Bloom had both sparks
7327988 I know, I'm just ignoring that part for comedic effect
Great job, by the way. I enjoyed the story.
This comment will not have a review of this story, but if you came for a recipe for apple strudel, you're in luck.
Apple Strudel:
You'll need:
1. 3oz (85g) raisins
2. 2 Tbsp brandy
3. 5 Eating apples (Granny Smith or Cox will do.)
4. 3.5oz (100g) dark brown sugar
5. 3 Large cooking apples
6. 1 Tbsp Ground cinnamon
7. Grated rind and the juice of 1 lemon
8. 1oz (30g) dry breadcumbs
9. 2oz (55g) chopped pecans or walnuts
10. 12 sheets of frozen filo pastry, thawed.
11. 6oz (170g) butter, melted
12. Icing sugar, for dusting
Serves 10-12.
Steps:
1. Soak the raisins in the brandy for at least 15 minutes.
2. Peel, core and thinly slice the apples. In a bowl, combine the sugar, cinnamon and lemon rind. Stir in the apples and half the breadcrumbs.
3. Add the raisins, nuts and lemon juice and stir until blended.
4. Preheat a 375'F (Farenheit)/109'C (Celsius)/Gas 5 Oven. Grease 2 baking sheets.
5. Carefully unfold the filo sheets. Keep the unused sheets covered with greaseproof paper. Lift off 1 sheet, place on a clean surface and brush with melted butter. Lay a second sheet on top and also brush with butter. Repeat until you have a stack of 6 buttered sheets.
6. Sprinkle a few tablespoons of breadcrumbs over the last sheet and spoon half the apple mixture at the bottom edge of the strip.
7. Starting at the apple-filled end, roll up the pastry, as for a Swiss roll. Place down on a baking sheet, seam-side down, and carefully fold under the ends to seal. Repeat the procedure to make a second strudel. Brush both with butter.
8. Bake the strudels for 45 minutes. Let cool slightly. Using a small sieve, dust with a fine layer of icing sugar. Serve warm.
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Yum. That sounds amazing!
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Oh, and congratulations for going through with it and publishing the fic.
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Thank you. I think it was the right thing to do.
I'm glad you decided to upload this. It was very good and heartwarming. I spotted a few spelling errors, but they were pretty minute. It had a good message about inner beauty. Speaking as a guy, I can say this. It doesn't matter how pretty a girl is. If she's ugly on the inside, she's ugly on the outside too, regardless of her "outside spark" factor. Kind if like spotting a pretty girl with a cigarette. Your attractiveness plummets, because smoking is disgusting.
But I'm getting off track. As a guy, I totally believe that looks can be deceiving when it comes to beautiful girls and their personalities. Good for Apple Bloom to learn that now rather than later. If I were Rumble, I'd go with Apple Bloom, not because of this story, but because I still don't really like Diamond Tiara (though I can respect her for trying to redeem herself).
I liked how AJ talked about being jealous of Rarity, but then learning that Rarity was jealous of AJ for her own reasons. Giving AJ a little piece of wisdom to pass down to Apple Bloom. It gave a little insight into AJ's character, with the hardy farmgirl harboring her own insecurities, as well as Rarity harboring some of her own. Both are more concealed than other ponies, but they're real nonetheless. Apple Bloom's concerns are real too. Society today kind of paints this image for girls and guys, and it's only natural to feel insecure when you don't fit into the current definition of "beautiful". But beauty is in the eye of the beholder, and hopefully Apple Bloom realizes that now, or at least I hope she will in time.
The ending was also really cute. I did that a lot with my OC holding Fluttershy as she sleeps. I'm a sucker for that kind of stuff.
Another great story from the amazing Harmony Pie! I can't wait for the next one. Whatever it is, I know it'll be stellar.
I've decided to edit...
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Umm, okay. I don't know what the "thing" you were referring to in the beginning of your comment, and I'd like to not know.
I was thinking that, yes, it may not have been the malicious, but Apple Bloom took it hard. She can't really control how she feels about a sensitive topic.
Thank you for your comment
...These comments...
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No, I'm not going to... whatever that is. I'm 13 and don't want to know, thank you
For inappropiate humour, considering the rating. Sorry.
Great story! I loved how you wrote Applejack and Apple Bloom, it was so sweet! Have a like!
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Please stop. I'd like to keep it "Everyone" in the comments.
7328155 Oops, sorry. Still, it's up to the individual if they choose to look up those terms or not. Thanks for the responses & have a nice day.
A very sweet story with a nice moral, Applejack has got to be one of the best older sisters in the series, right up there with Rarity, Rainbow and Celestia. Another great one shot from you Harmony, and I'm glad ya posted it after all!
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I'm going to try this...it sounds delicious!
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A very perceptive and positive comment. I think the same way about beauty myself...it's the substance inside that matters most.
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Oh, I also liked your thoughts on Rarity and AJ. I think you most correct in that they do keep a lot of their thoughts to themselves and what they do reveal is very telling about their personalities and character. Very insightful. And well done by Harmony, too, by the way!
First off gave you a thumbs up. It's a good message for sure, I would of liked a little elaboration on exactly what Rarity envied maybe pull some inspiration from that episode with Trenderhoof.
7328155 you shall not enter the dark realm of the internet, once you entered the dark realm, you can't (completely) go back
btw nice fic, i like it, and i also gave an upvote for this story, it kinda similar to the issues i'm having by now
I love this story! I like how you wrote the characters also!
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Aww, thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it! But... why the chest pain? That's good, right?
Hey there! I just saw your story on the top of the popular list!
https://gyazo.com/ec4eaddca5b085404bdab9b12d8474ef
Congratulations! This story certainly deserves it! I'll leave a more thorough comment once I am less tired, but for now, know that I did thoroughly enjoy this piece!
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Oh...thank you for that. I look forward to your more in depth comment, and I'm glad you enjoyed it
Alright, now that I am of a much sounder mind...
I have to say that this story was absolutely lovely. It captivated me from the start because you wrote Apple Bloom so well. She was perfectly in character, as was Applejack. And the conversation that the two had was absolutely believable. Not to mention that the message was beautiful and heartfelt, and definitely one that needs to be heard.
I did find a few minor typos, though I could point those out to you in a PM if you'd like. All in all, a wonderful story!
This is a really important lesson! Probably the third good Lesson fic I've read.
Apple Bloom is still super, super young, I'd range her just around 10 or a hair younger, and it's not at all surprising that she's feeling this way about a snide comment. To be honest, the younger you are, the less rational you are. While we may be able to say "Who cares??" at an older age, the ones we are to guide and teach cannot simply look over things. Hormones and figuring out who you are, it's chaotic and hard as hell growing up, sorry for the language. And even as you grow up, sure it may be easier to deal with the comments, but others will still get it under their skin. Everyone's different.
You've got a lot of talent :D Don't let others get you down, you've still got a lot of room to grow.
One typo I saw, "angerily". It's "angrily" instead. Super close!
Hello, I'm just looking back over my comments for this story and realise now I was possibly a little bit over the top in my use of inappropriate humour, considering the rating. I must have been in a silly mood that day. Please accept my humble apologies, and keep on writing... you have quite the talent.
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Of course, I understand. Thanks, but no hard feelings
7328159 You, good sir, are deserving of a well done. Thank you for making the comments a better place, even if it was marred by your own words in the first place.
You have my thanks and appreciation
On another note, this was some great sister bonding right here! I feel so fuzzy inside. Very nice story
https://www.fimfiction.net/group/211585/reviewers-cafe/thread/308771/reviews#comment/6143272
So, care to tell me what you posted in the reviews thread? ;)
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. I didn't know I couldn't do that.
Yeah, my bad
I just wanted to thank you again for the review. It's still shocking that you would refer to Dear Sister, Sister as 'astronomical', though. I hope I can write/submit more stories to merit an acceptance into the café ^^
I love the sisterly bond of the two here. Nicely done.
This was sweet. I enjoyed hearing Applejack's thoughts on what makes someone beautiful, and overall this was just such a pleasurable, leisurely sort of wistful read.
I also imagine that Diamond Tiara's change for the better wouldn't be immediate, though I suspect she'd be more prone to little slip-ups in her conversations that she'd immediately apologize for after, as opposed to the more bully-like behavior she's been known for in previous seasons. Mind you, she probably has a crush on Rumble here, which might explain why her words were so unusually harsh.
I love the aesthetic of the Apple sisters looking up at the stars while they talked, though I don't exactly think Applejack should be encouraging Apple Bloom to go sitting on the roof.
I also loved that Applejack wasn't all mad at her little sister for waking her, but instead patiently sought to understand the situation.
The whole bit about the bow was a nice touch too, like a representation of Apple Bloom's self-esteem being cast away, and then her allowing Applejack to restore it.
And now maybe Applejack can go back to sleep.
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I enjoyed this story. Very wholesome. Thanks for sharing!