(This fic was created from a school project of mine... yes I gave a pony story fic to a teacher of mine, the project of mine is about a murder case and the setting is in my high school but of course im going to change the names, and obviously i put a little twist in it. Please just give this a chance, we all know this has ponies in it but there's more and im sure some of you will rage and some of you will love it. Hey, everyone has there own tastes and i respect it)
This story involves with ponies, humans, alternate dimensions, video games, novels, and movie characters
Chapters (6)
Not bad, though wall of text syndrome and the not separated dialogue detracts from it.
777948 thnks for commenting and what do u mean "wall of text syndrome and the not separated dialogue" im a newbie in FICs so yea... lol
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There aren't enough paragraph separations, an you are supposed to start a new paragraph whenever someone speaks.
783110 ohhhhh ok thank you i'll edit it right now
783110 ok there that should take care of that oh and there were some bad grammar that my beta reader missed so... yea
>yes I gave a pony story fic to a teacher of mine
Nigga you crazy