After being accidentally awakened from his 800-year-old prison, the loyal servant of one of the most evil creatures to ever roam Equestria returns to seek vengeance and reunite with his fallen Mistress. To accomplish this, he creates a small army out of the purest of jewels to scout the land in search for his Mistress's prison and to cause as much chaos in their wake, all the while he gathers a second army of every lowlife in Equestria.
Unfortunately six members of this little army ends up being captured in the most unlikeliest of places, now, the Gemnites find themselves living under the watchful eyes of Twilight Sparkle and her friends, only to be conflicted by their intended purpose and the bonds they begin to develop. Are they merely tools for madness destined to bring back a great evil to Equestria, or are they living creatures with their own souls and choices?
The concept got my curiosity, but please find yourself an editor. The pacing and the walls of text both turn reading into a chore.
Awesome start
7234617 Fair enough, know anyone to recommend?
7234899 Thanks :D
7236721 You're welcome
This most certainly seems like a story that has a lot to promise.
Keep the good work up, hope to see more soon.
This is really good so far! But don't kill poor Discord
These guys remind me of gremlins
Another great chapter! It's awesome Tak is using bad ponies & other creatures to do the chaos for him.
I wonder how Fluttershy reaction we'll be?
When's the next chapter?
Um... I think he's going a bit far...
In the end, Flurry Heart should be able to eat him. Wouldn't that be funny
7369354 That's vengence for you
Awesome story.
7373536 Thanks
Great chapter.
7409790 Thanks
Is Rainbow going to reamin as she is for the rest fo the story?
That was a awesome chapter! Though Twilight should realize that in the EG world, the sun & moon move on their own...
7496086 True, but let's not forget that it isn't the case in Equestria, so she's not really used to it
7496053 Only time will tell
It's Moondancer isn't it?
Or is it Velvet, Twilight's mother
7553327 Spoilers
Poor Rainbow Dash. Turned into a pegasus-wasp hybrid.
nice reprise of Rotten to the core
Wow what a great start!
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Sooner or later time will tell.
Are you there?
come back?