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When Apple Bloom discovers a strange creature injured in the Everfree Forest, it isn't long before the creature follows her home and the Apple Family end up playing host to a new house-guest in the form of a mischievous, yet highly intelligent Gizmonk named Goggles.
NOTE: Set between the events of Season 4
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This is going to be an interesting read.
Quite a few run on sentences, and some spelling/grammar errors, but overall a fun read.
Wonder what Applejack's going to make of Goggles.
"...one monkey, two boxes of..."
That gag always makes me laugh.
5323348 Glad to hear it
Well, this is certainly interesting.
You have a bit of a problem with run on sentences that should be addressed. Also, one frequent error...it's Apple Bloom, not Applebloom.
5334152 Fair enough That's easily fixed
Nice to see Goggles put Diamond Tiara in her place like that.
Is a Gizmonk a made up creature or is it from a different series?
5349195 Originally from G1 but I think they only appeared in one episode
http://mylittlewiki.org/wiki/The_Gizmonks
Well, that's certainly something I never expected regarding Silver. Here's hoping it never comes back to bite her or Apple Bloom on their flank.
5353319 jinx
...k.
Well, this was a nice resolution.
Though I begin to wonder where, exactly, you're going with this story.
5362599 You'll see
5362110 ...k?
5363031
...k.
And now Goggles is Ponyville's Mr. Fix-it. Considering how often disasters cause massive damage to Ponyville, they could use it.
5382010 Exactly
An interesting chapter, though it could use some editing.
Also, unless it's going to play a part in the story later, I suggest you remove that little bit of AppleSpike in the Cake's kitchen. It doesn't seem to go anywhere, and unless it's significant to the story it'll just put readers off.
5401116 trust me mate, anything that's in this story WILL have a part to play right up to the end
Oh lordy...wonder how the Apples will react to Trixie as Goggles' assistant?
5437832 Indeed
And...now he can talk. Welp, no telling where this is going to go now.
Something tells me that didn't do what he said it would do.
5498611 Well you won't find out till the next chapter
Okay, that last bit was golden!
5512660 Glad you think so
poor goggles
5536066 Indeed
and so begins AJ's losing streak, Heh
That B$#&@ who should not be named, deserves hell and more for all that she said... Nuff said
I did like that bit with Trixie at the end, real smooth Goggles
Awesome chapter and nice use of the song
Honestly I thought I saw a parody of Thriller.
5632200 Glad to hear it
5632241 Seriously?
5633885 yep.
5633882 you're welcome
Why do I have a feeling murphy will screw things up?
5669387 Murphy?
5671688 Murphy law.
Here's an idea on how to tell AJ:
AB: 'ey AJ, I got a new pet!
AJ: Oh really, what is it?
AB: This is Goggles. (Goggles comes in, dressed as a cowboy...much to AJ's confusion)
AJ: ...eh?
5671800 You'll have to specify a little more
5671926 Anything that can go wrong, will go wrong. Meaning that let say someone say 'What the worst that can happen?' and something does happen.
5671967 I see, well we'll just have to see won't we?
And that's Goggles 1, DT zip.
Interesting character with Silver Lining.
And this is why you're not the element of generosity, AJ. You're kind of rude at times
(Falls back laughing) and now it makes sense XD
Never read a girl's diary, Goggles
Talking monkey sings..Of course