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This fic won't mean much if you have not seen "No Second Prances" and contains numerous spoilers there of. You have been warned.

Bothered by how Twilight acted during No Second Prances? Me to. And I think Twilight would be as well.

Twilight is faced with the realization her actions were not becoming of the Princess of Friendship and must face down her own hypocrisy and learn many more lessons about herself and others.

After some probing questions by Trixie and Starlight, Twilight is compelled to reflect upon how and why she acted the way she did and when she's done she will need to explain herself to Princess Celestia....


I'm eager to hear feedback from anyone, but especially if you DO NOT like this story, be it that you felt it was badly written or that Twilight was out of character. I am eager to learn from my mistakes

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Yeah,pretty much. Twilight's need to impress and look good for Celestia hasn't changed with becoming a princess herself.

Add to that her general "things must be perfect and I can't have anything go wrong" control issues, and... well.

“Hey! I mean I’m still worried about letting ponies down, especially Celestia. I don’t know what she would do if I failed her.”

Starlight Shimmer looked conflicted.

Celestia rolled her eyes, looking even more impatient than before.

“I’m guessing you didn’t find Starlight Shimmer hiding among the ladles?”

Having a craving for bacon today, are we?

That was a fun little read, and it's more or less how I interpreted Twi's behavior in the episode as well. Despite how much she's grown she still has that adoration of Celestia that tends to push her into panic mode when she feels like she'll disappoint her. I'm not really sure if it's a fear of punishment anymore, but that fear of letting her down is definitely still present. Though after years of hero worship, I guess that's understandable. It's probably not an easy habit to break.

Episode would have much more points in my book, if this was actual part of the script!

I wanted to impress Celestia and I thought Trixie would make a bad impression.

They should've made this the focus of the episode. Trixie being her usual self could've easily carried this plot point and it would've seemed way more natural than Twilight worrying that the flashy stage magician is going to somehow be a bad influence on the worlds-destroying crazed ideologue.

Good story!

Also, grammatical error jumping out at me:

You and Luna, who I could also have spent the evening.

You and Luna, who I could also have spent the evening with.

Incredible.

Thanks for the feedback everyone. I tried to edit this story better than my last (which I admit was submitted half-baked) but I guess I still missed some stuff. Think I've cleaned it all up now.

I appreciate the feedback I've gotten, but I'd particularly like to hear back from anyone who DIDN'T like this story and why you would feel that way

I thought you were one of the few ponies I could relax and be myself around.

Maybe in another decade or two, Twilight will be able to relax completely around you, Celestia.

I think this represents Twilight and Trixie to a tee:

And Twilight, nothing you do could make me think you are a failure.

I'm certain you said something similar to Sunset Shimmer, you two-faced bitch.

that Twilight was out of character

Considering Twilight was "out of character" in the actual episode, I don't think this is much of a concern, really - well, unless you suddenly made her a psychopathic mad scientist who has gone axe-crazy and has killed her friends or something equally ludicrous.

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